I've never reviewed before but this is one of my favorite stories in fanfiction. I hope you will continue and hopefully complete it.

Really great story.
Your writing style is awesome.
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Poor Naruto!
What will he do, when he sees Mayu return as Pain?

Bro you're an absolutely brilliant writer, I've never really cried reading anything before but you've made me cry twice now!

such a great story; i hope you can continue it.
and if not: i really enjoyed reading it!

I really like your oc's! you really make them come to live

My chest hurts reading this chapter

I really hope you finish this masterpiece of a story.

I will happily hold you at gunpoint for the next chapter

:'0 wow, ok that hurt

Update please

It’s always the best fan fictions that are left unfinished. Severely disappointing.

I've never read a naruto fiction where natuto has such a mental problem though I understand you are trying to build his character for what's to come.

This is the best fic i have ever read. Update plz

This chapter was terrible. You fully misunderstood the bell test as well as butchering it, gave genin magical powers that somehow let them surprise an A rank jonin which wouldnt be possible unless they were high chunin level, shadow clones are a forbidden technique that wouldnt have been found in a library, sensing chakra isnt something genin are capable of, naruto sensing 2 types of chakra is nonsensical, narutos personality is borderline illogical and the entire team aspect of the test was ignored. You also failed to realise substitutions are one of the 3 basic academy techniques so naruto mistaking it for a clone is illogical aswell, especially if hes gifted enough to surprise and steal a bell from a jonin. So many mistakes, its hard to read. Grammar is weak at best. Seems to be another OC story. Atleast the grammar isnt terrible, but still cant be asked to read this.

This is largely ‘OC the fanfic’. Don’t get me wrong, many of the OCs are passable, but it would be nice to know in the description that we won’t be spending much time with most of the actual Naruto characters.