|Reviews for His Butler, Caregiver|
| Beckoning Shadows chapter 1 . 7/23/2014
As a whole, the story was interesting and entertaining. Everything is clearly written and the description is fairly accurate. There are some spelling mistakes, though. You wrote ' The young earl woke from his dream and whispered to himself "another one of those dreams... that makes 3 of them this week." 'The 3 should have been three instead. Also in ' "Liar, I would never be so cowardice!" ' I believe you meant coward as cowardice doesn't fit. This sentence should either be "Liar, I would never display such cowardice!" or "Liar, I would never be such a coward!"
Another thing I noticed was that in some places it seemed like there was unnecessary description such as in "Ciel fell back on to the cool pillow and closed his deep blue eyes as he fell asleep.". The color of his eyes doesn't matter and, though it is good to be descriptive, the description bogs down the sentence. In another place you wrote (I censored one word)' "Oh shut up! It's your da*n fault I'm sick!" Ciel yelled back at his sexy demonic butler.' Calling Sebastian sexy just sounds awkward and several more descriptive words could be used instead.
Now in terms of characterization: Ciel seems fairly in character and his reactions are believable, if one ignores that he is having erotic dreams of Sebastian, but him swearing seem rather odd and out of character. Finny, though he appeared only in short part, seemed a little stranger than usual as though he does manage to destroy things accidentally and is somewhat naive on how he destroyed things, I think he would have enough sense to not chase a mouse with a hammer but more run after it (that part was comedic, though). Lizzy seemed in character, especially when she burst uninvited into Ciel's room. Sebastian seemed a little informal in certain instances but overall he stayed in character (but I think he would smirking if he saw Ciel so flustered rather than just saying how adorable Ciel looked).
Though there was many things I brought up that I though was needing correction in this story, my impression of it still remains that same: It has much merit and is humorous and fairly well written. Good job!
| bubble-chan93 chapter 1 . 7/7/2013
that was soooo cute!
| TheGrammarHawk chapter 1 . 5/15/2013
*too lazy to sign in*
BWAHAHA. NICE. This was brilliant!
| AnimexXxGoddess chapter 1 . 3/22/2013
Ooooooooh! I can see the hints, heeheehee.*Laughs like Undertaker*
Nice but I would have loved it if there was more teasing and hints,,,
| Blackitten13 chapter 1 . 2/18/2013
PLEASE CONTINUE! And thank you for posting this. Till then
| Flames-of-Silver chapter 1 . 2/6/2013
You should make this a multi-chapter fic! this was beyond funny!
| promocat chapter 1 . 2/2/2013
LOL!only when ciel's defences are down-does his true feelings come out
| Queen MiMi of Wonderland chapter 1 . 1/31/2013
XD Funny! Love it!
| tohru15 chapter 1 . 1/31/2013
| Mrs.Ciel Phantomhive chapter 1 . 1/31/2013
Aw this was so cute! .