|Reviews for Broken|
| ngoc.c.pham chapter 1 . 11/17/2013
I absolutely love the last sentence! It's sums the whole thing up in one go!
I don't know if you would use this, since it might be your style; but perhaps you could use a bit more purple prose in your writing? Your writing is very descriptive already and sends chills down my back as I read it, but perhaps in adding more description of the surroundings, of actions, really play it on, you can draw the reader in more and have a bulkier piece of writing.
Great job of writing!
| Dixie Darlin chapter 1 . 7/6/2013
I think the best part was him comparing weddings rings to a dog collar. THAT gave me chills.
| Prussian Victory chapter 1 . 5/5/2013
Wow this was awesome great job
| Guest chapter 1 . 4/6/2013
Nice very interasting
| Guest chapter 1 . 2/17/2013
Couldn't decide what I want to do more - throw up or strangle someone. You did excellent job of capturing Bumby's monstrosity.
| pumpkin moose chapter 1 . 2/1/2013
! I absolutely adored this. I love how it flowed in the beginning, and I loved how you captured his inner desires, and thoughts throughout the piece. Good job!