Reviews for PTB's Writing Challenge 2013
twinmomma chapter 3 . 2/6/2013
Holy cow... That is one dramatic start. I hope there's a HEA planned for Edward and Bella - evn though I have no idea how you'll pull it off after that opening :)
smooshie55 chapter 3 . 2/6/2013
Shit just got real.
Melany333 chapter 3 . 2/6/2013
Love it, but what is Bella's daughter's name? Nessie,Vakate, or Kate
tpea1288 chapter 3 . 2/6/2013
Loving this! It has mystery, love, revenge, passion, anger & hurt.

Still don't know enough about Edward & Bella's past. Both seemed to have loved each other & both seemed to feel betrayed by each other. Each thinks the other did not return their love & is the "bad guy."

Practical concerns: Edward's threats are meaningless. No judge will ever give him full custody. He will be lucky to get joint eventually. It is disgusting that he has threatened to use his innocent child to punish Bella & is willing to hurt his child to do it.

It is also disgusting if Bella kept Edward from his child out of malice or spite. There are almost no good reasons to keep a father & child apart except if the father is a danger to his child. This might be the case. The fact that his own mother seemed to agree that Kate was better off without her dad is powerful.

Edward can make things difficult for Bella through Kate but Bella already has won Kate's heart. Edward will lose his daughter if he uses her or attacks her mother.

It seems there was a massive failure of communication when they broke up. I hope so. I'm hoping Edward can be a decent loving father to Kate. If not, I hope Bella cuts off his balls & has them for breakfast!

But Edward has no hope of full custody-none. And Bella was not legally required to notify him he was a father. It's on him to keep contact with any potential baby mama's to see if he's a daddy!
Kgunter34 chapter 3 . 2/6/2013
Lawd, I am getting out the lawn chair and popcorn. He fucked up and I can't wait to see him brought down. Great chapter.
JulesColes3 chapter 3 . 2/6/2013
Wow what happened between them. Please post soon I live this story. I hope theirs a HEA for them.
angelspinknose chapter 3 . 2/6/2013
i'm interested. keep up the great writing.
CassandraLowery chapter 3 . 2/6/2013
Wow.

Just...wow.

xxxooo,
Cassandra :)
Jlyons0424 chapter 3 . 2/6/2013
Wowza! Intense! LOVE IT!
jmcfall chapter 3 . 2/6/2013
. Gawd! this is gut wrenching and we don't know what happened , You are amazing . Thank you .
BelleOfTheBook chapter 3 . 2/6/2013
Good lord, please tell us what the heck happened soon.
pnkats chapter 3 . 2/6/2013
Wow angry spiteful Edward! I love it! Curious as to what happened for her to need a lawyer. Just love attorneyward!
nurseroxy chapter 3 . 2/6/2013
This chapter gave me chills! I need to know what happened to them to make them hate each other so much. Also, I really need to know what happened to Alice. Awesome job!
cejsmom chapter 3 . 2/6/2013
Like I said in my previous review - daily prompts! Dying for more!
Fudgy Buddy chapter 3 . 2/6/2013
WHAT?! There's so much going on...I don't know. I'm damn curious now.
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