Reviews for The Lost Boys
B chapter 16 . 5/26/2014
I read this every night before I go to bed and I cannot get enough! I expect to be sorely disappointed with myself for speeding through it so quickly when I finish and there is no more for me to enjoy.
Anyways, as much as I love this fic I have one tip: do your research. Even if its just for a small piece of info like spelling. I know for most people it's not too big of a deal but for a lot if people, when we see words spelled wrong it kills us. Fraulein Maria is her name, not Froiloin. Something like that is just so distracting it pulls you right out of the story. There's nothing worse than being so taken with a piece of writing only to be drawn back to the present because of a silly mistake that can be avoided with a minute's worth of research.
B chapter 9 . 5/24/2014
I really love this story and its hard for me to put my phone down and actually get things done, it's so good!
But there are a few things I think you should consider fixing: you misuse pronouns a lot, calling Emma he and Killian she. It's not too big of an issue, but it does distract the reader from the actual story for a minute. Also, everybody is calling the paparazzi the "paps" and while it works for a few characters, David and Mary Margaret are known for their eloquent speaking and it's not something they would typically say.
Thank you again for the great story, I hope my suggestions haven't been too rude.
LostGirl0017 chapter 35 . 5/23/2014
Heey :) Wow your story was really awesome! :)
Totally loved to read it. Must say one of the best i've ever read! ;)

Question! The tattoo Emma got, thats the buttercup tattoo (the one series Emma has), right? :)

Grace chapter 1 . 5/22/2014
Hey. Here I am again.. even though I finished your story I kinda want to start it again, that's how good it is! Too bad you don't have any other long stories... (hint hint) xx
Guest chapter 35 . 5/21/2014
Thank you for this amazing fanfic! Peterpanfreak from IG brought me here and I absolutely love it! There's a wonderful mix of jokes, seriousness, and love. Honestly you really have considered how each character would really act in these situations and I respect you for doing so. It's a rare occasion that a fanfic would be so true to the character. Thanks for the story!
Tadpole24 chapter 4 . 5/23/2014
I really love how you've had them meet and how they have that slight hate for each other, but you can tell there's something else simmering there too. So good! :)
Grace chapter 35 . 5/21/2014
Nooooooo now it's done and how else am I gonna procrastinate? You don't know how much trouble I'm in for skipping a bunch of school work to read this instead.. And now it's done! :( At first I wasn't very excited about the AU of it all, but that changed after like 3 sentences. I absolutely loved this story; suuuper cute but still realistic. Too bad I finished it :( Xxx
256412 chapter 35 . 5/23/2014
Okay, I HAD to leave you a review, because your story is outstanding! In my life, I've never read anything like it. It's not a fanfiction, is a bloody novel and a marvellous one indeed. You could change some of the names (the obvious ones) and publish it, trust me, it would be a best seller.

You write like a pro, I love how you describe the feelings of each characters and keep them soooo real, I could almost believe they were actual people. I FELT what the felt and I laughed, I screamed, I smiled, I jump, and I cried like a motherfu*ker ! I cried so much it's not even funny .
When The Lost Boys won at the VMA I almost screamed of joy, like if I was watching my favorite band winning an award. I kind of feel like a loon, but I just want you to know how much your story moved and amazed me. I'm a fan of your work, a groupie to be honest. I'll read it again and again like a good book.

You made the characters so believable and true to themselves it was hard not to actually live thought them. The whole love story is a marvel, I fell in love with Emma and Killian and I was rooting for them as much as I would for characters in an actual book or TV show. Everything was perfect: the friendship, the joys, the heartbreaks… from the beginning to the end, your story is beautiful.
Even with the process of making an album, begin a actress and facing paparazzi and fame, you blew my mind.
My life was kind of "on hold" while I read this, I was so emerge into it I couldn't do anything else but read for three days, all day long (okay, I ate and slept too, no kidding, but you get what I mean…)

Anyway, enough with my craziness, I just want to thank you for sharing this amazing story with us and making me live this adventure with Emma, Killian and all the others.

Read you soon, I hope.

Yours truly,

Tadpole24 chapter 2 . 5/22/2014
Gah! You're amazing! And I didn't know this was your first fic! OMG! So well done :)
psymplemind chapter 6 . 5/21/2014
Moving along...(I'm pretty sure Rob and Kristen was real)
It's a psychological/brain chemical thing...if you gotta kiss and be around someone so much your brain starts to form a bond with them! I actually don't know why there aren't MORE divorces in Hollywood! It must be very very difficult to remain faithful!
psymplemind chapter 5 . 5/21/2014
Yeah I figured they'd shove these 2together. I like these kind of stories rather a lot...this is going to be 'fun'. :)
psymplemind chapter 4 . 5/21/2014
Snarky sparring...I was never like that but my sister was! She's kind of more like Emma...I'm kind of more like Belle.
I'm guessing the pics look good so his people decide to make a deal for them to be seen together to improve his image?
psymplemind chapter 3 . 5/21/2014
Great they dislike each other. A Lot! Sparks will fly
psymplemind chapter 2 . 5/21/2014
Good chapter. Establishing Jillian's character in ch 1 then Emma's in ch 2. They meet in ch 3. Every good love story starts with hate (or at least dislike).
psymplemind chapter 1 . 5/21/2014
Very enchanting beginning... I like it! Going to give it a whirl
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