Reviews for Damaged Bodies, Growing Lives, Building Families |
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![]() ![]() ![]() So I get that you're trying to avoid a super!Harry, but this was kinda pathetic... A simple disillusionment or notice-me-not and he would have been perfectly safe. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Not sure if this will be an issue later, but in the comments here at the end of the chapter you mention that Harry can't do wordless magic, but he does it in the books, and it is mentioned that it is regularly taught (even if it isn't mastered) in sixth and seventh year at Hogwarts. Considering that Harry fought as much as you've hinted and survived the war when so many others died it doesn't really make sense that he wouldn't be able to do wordless magic (especially considering the advantage it is in battle). Wandless I can see him not being able to do yet since he's still quite young, but not wordless since he is quite powerful and managed to defeat Voldemort. |
![]() ![]() ![]() You know, I'd like this story a lot if Harry were non-magical but, as it is, it just seems to me that he isn't being sensible. He gets attacked and doesn't use his wand, several times. The few times he does he still gets hurt and by people who weren't even shooting at him. This is a guy who spent his entire life dueling and escaping from attackers. Even when I consider he's pregnant and unwieldy, his mouth still works and, the kind of person he is, not liking others to get hurt, I'm pretty sure he'd have gone "statute of secrecy be damned" when those guys broke in and were likely to hurt his friend. On the other hand, the story itself is really well written so, I'd say good job overall. |
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![]() ![]() ![]() This is excellent! While rather angsty in spots not over the top. Looking forward to reading the last chapter! :-) |
![]() ![]() ![]() It would be really cool if, at some point, the avengers found out about his history in the magical world and just what he was capable of. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Really? Harry didn't do anything while he was inside Tony's workshop waiting for whoever caused Jarvis to be offline? He could have bloody taken his invisibility cloak! |
![]() ![]() ![]() really liked it |
![]() ![]() ![]() Does Harry know Clint knocked him up yet? And I loved how impressed Fury was with Harry, even if he didn't show it. You wrote that part very well. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like that it started with a douchebag and not some elaborate plot. I've never heard of this omega/beta/alpha concept before, where did it come from? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Awww his name is ellis thats cute |
![]() ![]() Great story! I'm going to miss the entire thing! :( You're doing great! |
![]() ![]() ![]() When i heard ellis's name im like, hey thats my last name. Oh you said ellis had blonds hair and than it turned to black hair. (At least im pretty sure) love it keep the good work up. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Sad that is over but it was brilliant. Thank you for the wonderful gift of your writing |
![]() ![]() ![]() I loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved was great. |