Reviews for Shreds and Ribbons
Guest chapter 5 . 3/23/2019
I loved this story a lot! (I commented a couple days ago.) However, one piece of constructive feedback: Aren’t Bo-Katan’s eyes amber? You wrote in that she has green eyes.
theatergal33 chapter 5 . 3/22/2019
This story is amazing! You perfectly captured Bo-Katan’s aggressive nature towards Maul and his brother and the relationship between her and Viszla as well as her true feelings for the New Mandalorians. In other words, you nailed her character. I’m writing a story about her now and this really helped me with ideas. Well done!
Omegoid chapter 6 . 7/3/2018
(Chapter 6: Jester) Wow, I loved this chapter. What I loved most was how it was true to the characters, and also put a nice explanation to the characters on the show. For example, on the show jester was the guy who always cleaned his weapon. Now I simply brushed that off as just a quirk the creators of the show so we could tell clones apart, but for you to have interpreted it as a habit that kept him sane added a new, darker, and more thoughtful dimension.
Translator-Lost chapter 3 . 2/24/2018
Aaaaaaaaaaaaah my heart you monster. *sobs* Waxeeeeeeer, come baaaaaaaaack!
Ultra King Fan chapter 9 . 6/28/2017
I thought this chapter was OK. I liked it that Dogma did not go to republic custody, but was still able to serve the Republic.
The Generic Ficer chapter 3 . 4/9/2017
I read chapter 3, and it is so sweet. I always liked to think that Boil abandoned the 212th (Or was discharged, he wasn't present from Season 5 (I think) on) and went to Ryloth to help take care of Numa
time2read chapter 4 . 4/17/2016
amazing piece of work! for this ch!
Oakenshield3 chapter 11 . 3/14/2016
I'd really like for you to keep adding to Jester's story. I want to see the squad mend itself.
Corkyfaust chapter 11 . 2/17/2016
Alright. I know you have not updated in over 2 years And You are probably not even in the clone wars fandom anymore more, however I would like you to know you have made a fellow fan VERY happy while reading your fan-fiction. Shreds and ribbons is both beautiful and heartbreaking. Canon and non/canon become one in your beautifully woven masterpiece of one shots. The emotions that you put in your writing is outstanding. So to end this review... is there any way to get you to write more? Cause lets face it. You're pretty cool.
Eregnar chapter 11 . 6/4/2014
Oh man. This makes me hurt for the whole squad, especially Jester. It's always interesting to see another look at Slick playing mind-games with his squad (is that fanon now? I didn't see anything in the episode to confirm or deny that description of Slick, but it seems pretty universally accepted in fanfiction). Chopper mocked for his scars, Jester psychologically abused, even Gus, so desperate for affirmation that Slick's managed to twist that into something harmful to both him and the team.

"scared side of Chopper's" should be "scarred." "Did he mean he didn't trust Slick to do his duty." should end with a question mark.
laloga chapter 11 . 6/4/2014
[hugs Jester] It's okay, buddy.

As others have said, this was an intensely sad chapter, but I loved the insight gained into the men of Slick's squad. Masterful job with each of these guys and the intricate relationships between them. Chopper was appropriately prickly and unwilling to just blindly follow Gus' orders, no matter where Gus claimed they came from; he is definitely questioning a lot of stuff, and that was clearly evident in his behavior. Gus, conversely, seemed like he'd stopped asking questions a while ago, and was content to believe whatever Slick told him - which makes me wonder exactly what sort of intel the sergeant is feeding him.

Punch and Sketch were wonderfully portrayed; closer than any of the others and content because of it. They could handle the dissent and anger because they had each other to lean on, which makes all the difference. It was sad, though, how they could not/would not let another, like Jester, into their clique. I didn't get the sense that it was purposeful or malicious, just that they were content with each other and saw no reason to upset that balance.

Jester. Sigh. [hugs him again] Amazing job capturing this guy. It's a continual source of surprise to see how very different each clone can be. Training and genetics only go so far. Jester's lack of confidence in himself rang so true, felt so genuine; I could definitely relate! I think everyone has those feelings, but they were magnified on him because he has so little else in his life to fall back on. His thoughts about the squad *needing* unity, not division, were poignant - and spot on. Infighting is going to get someone hurt, or worse. While I so wanted him to speak up, I understand that he's on a journey of his own, and hope that one day he will find his voice.

His focus on maintaining his weapon at the end was a brilliant link to the man we meet in "The Hidden Enemy," the man who is fanatical about such things, because it's all he *has,* at least in his mind.

I loved how Slick was present, even though he was never physically around. (Unless you count the flashback.) Clearly, he's got all these troopers wrapped around his twisted fingers. His manipulation of them - with the flash inspections & shift changes - were evident without hitting us over the head with the notion that he *is* manipulating them, playing some game only he understands.

I also love the "word they don't say," and how it, too, affected everyone's actions and thoughts. While no one may have ever vocalized the fact, Slick's example of how "broken things should not be kept around" was harsh, and rang true in all of their minds. It was perhaps the cruelest thing Slick could have done, to indirectly point out Chopper's "faults," and thus seed further mistrust among his own men. If he'd openly mocked Chopper, the others might have sprang to Chopper's defense, but instead he allowed doubt to creep in on its own. Sigh.

Okay, so...I remember us talking about Jester, but I *don't* remember what I said. :P In any case, I'm thrilled it was helpful. This viggie, while heartbreaking at times, was a fascinating look into the innerworkings of a clone squad. Fantastic, fantastic work! :)
Sage of Wind Dragons chapter 11 . 6/1/2014
dam. I like akward tragedys of the clones, I mean take to much of it and you REALLY feel depressed, but a few looks into it and its function of a tragedy is always an interesting experience.
Zipitnow chapter 11 . 6/1/2014
Gosh, that was ...sad. In ROTC in High School, I had an Instructor, a retired Colonel, tell the class that Team Work was everything in a squad...EVERYTHING! So if you if you wanted to live, you better find a way to trust each other, get along together and make it work. Period!

I also had a friend in the Navy who always said "Adjust Adapt and Overcome" or out in the field you and your squad would most likely not make it back to least not in one piece. And while "Chain of command" was drilled into us all the time, our SGT. Major would also tell us, (on the sly), following orders with an emphasis on occasionally reinterpreting those orders to insure the objective was achieved AND still bringing your squad back in one piece was okay too...just don't say anything out loud. ( I believed this guy, he spent a lot time in the "Poo" all during Korea and Vietnam).

Of course we all know the story of Sgt. Slick (a real bummer in so many ways, but he did figure out what the "clone army" really was for, in the story line he just didn't make any good choices about it ). Whats sad about this is that the whole squad can see that they're pretty screwed, they just can't find a way to overcome or fix the problem. (see team work) Cleaning your weapons, or "hoping" everything will settle down won't change anything that's wrong.

Great characterization with these guys, just cause you look alike, doesn't mean you are alike. It really is whats "inside" that makes you who you are. The dialog and situation with the squad here was pretty awesome. The feeling of Jesters helplessness and disappointment in himself was heart wrenching, because he wants to be better, he wants the squad to be a real "Team" that stands together.

Great chapter, so well done. Thank you for posting this. Kudos to the writer!
laloga chapter 10 . 12/9/2013
Wow, what a note to end on! Nice little cameo of Gregor.

Sigh. I knew this would be sad, but... I really thought they'd manage to blow the ship up! Is the Renown a canon ship? (Too lazy to check.)

Anyway, this was masterfully done, as usual. I'm so in awe of your ability to write machines, to breathe life into these inorganic beings, and give them distinct personalities that don't clash with their non-living status. The droid commander was perfectly done: sinister but...mechanical. Cold, I guess. And Bunny...was she the spy? I got the feeling that she was somehow connected to the Seps, but I'm not sure.

Ceelee! :( I loved him, so I knew from the start he was doomed, but man...his last section really was a punch in the gut. Really, seeing the clones' deaths from the POV of the droids was intense; well-done, my goodness, but harsh. It's a credit to your skill as a storyteller that it was so hard for me to read a lot of this! I've read so many "war is hell" stories from the clones' POVs that reading this one, from the droids', hit strangely, but especially hard.

One suggestion: I noticed a lot of the passive voice in this chapter. This is something I'm trying hard to get rid of in my own work, so I've been on the lookout for it in others'. Of course, FFN won't let me highlight anything to show you what I mean, but I noticed several places where the language could be tightened up a bit.

But honestly, that's small-potatoes when compared to the meat and bones of this story!

This piece was so well-done, I'm still reeling a bit. [applauds] Tremendous work, m'dear. I do have a request for the next installment... I know you've got a lot on your plate, but when and if you decide to add a chapter to this series, (no rush at all!) can it be happy and/or fluffy? ;)

Anyway, this was a fantastic piece! :D I look forward to see what comes next.
Balin Lord of Moria chapter 1 . 11/13/2013
Good first chapter! You certainly caught the essence of Jango Fett and Darth Tyranus here. It's also interesting to see that even Jango himself, and not just his commandos and ARC troopers, disdained Kamino and it's native cloners.
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