|Reviews for I, Alone|
| Zeikos chapter 9 . 14h ago
That's one of the cutest FF chapters i've read.
I'm satisfied with the whole fiction just for this one :3
| Zeikos chapter 8 . 20h ago
There's at least a single fiction out in the world in where harry doesn't get forced (he basically is) into whatever quiddich team?
I mean it's ridiculous , you can change the whole universe but quiddich is a bloody constant ...
| ZanyMuggle chapter 3 . 3/30
Given your rate of about 4300 words of fiction per week on this story, I don't see how the phrase "slow writer" applies. This is a great story so far. I wish I had found it sooner.
| Sabre96 chapter 9 . 3/29
I can't work out who the ship is...
So far, the story is pretty good
| PKSTEAD chapter 7 . 3/29
I tried, I’m not going to try any more. The first seven chapters are what, 70 thousand words? You could have told the same story in 10. There’s too much repetition, too many dangling propositions; so much filler; such stilted dialogue. It feels like there’s an interesting story in there, somewhere, but until you throw away two of every three words you’ve written it’s not worth finding out what that interesting story is.
| V-rcingetorix chapter 20 . 3/28
First off, I am thoroughly enjoying this work. You have a definite flair for drama, I have to say. This chapter ends a little bit dramatic ... but then again, you've been able to pull off decent follow-ups before, so I'll give you the benefit of the doubt on this one ;)
The premise of this story, according to your notes, is that the Wizarding World is darker than "Just Kidding" Rowling portrayed. I can understand that, and agree with it. However, to mix metaphor's and literature a bit, you are taking Frodo and reducing his Company to Gimli and Gandalf. Maybe a bit of Saruman (Snape) as a mixer ... I'm not saying it's bad, but it feels a little limited in how Harry is obtaining support.
Two examples; first, Harry hasn't done any research on the mer-people. There's a bit of Pirates of Caribbean going on there (which I thought entertaining), but for some reason, Harry isn't apparently interested in ascertaining exactly what "Sailor Bold," Teles, or any of the other words mean. Given his predilection for reading, I was expecting a lot more research going on.
Second, in this last chapter, none of Harry's friends think to send a wind spell, or paint, or a bright light. Now granted, they're first years, but they should know a *few* area-effect spells.
That said, I like the pace you're taking this. It's already chapter 20, and you're only a bit past Christmas, and Harry is just beginning to learn how to use his magic. Power He Knows Not, I'm guessing ... not hard given how many fanfics use that line. Anyway, what I find enjoyable about the duration is how unlike other fics it is, where Harry gets hit in the head or something, learns about new powers, and steps out of the hospital minutes later wealthy beyond Kings and more powerful than half the magical world combined.
Here, you've slowed down the process to a much more realistic point. Thanks for that.
One suggestion; most people do not understand the depths of depression to which some people are susceptible. Frankly, it's somewhat dangerous to get *into* that mindset, at least without safety precautions. C.S. Lewis, after writing his "Screwtape Letters" (written from the POV of a demon) later stated he wouldn't write another book like that, because the thought process was very seductive, and damaging. Just be careful, eh?
Keep up the good work!
| V-rcingetorix chapter 2 . 3/27
Sitting on top of the carriage, eh? First time I've seen that. Nice!
| Eating Upside Down chapter 1 . 3/22
I don't think you actually know how abuse manifests itself in young boys. It's not always obvious, and actually a very subtle thing to see in people. Some people react to abuse by trying really hard to get people to like them - pornstars are an obvious example. Others become very withdrawn and introspective, this manifests itself in imaginary friends at older ages, "loner" persona, and inability to socialize. Your Harry can't be a mix, he either is an attention whore with low self worth or a quiet loner who speaks in whispers and lashes out at people.
| Goose chapter 10 . 3/16
I see slight Weasley bashing on the horizon. I will keep reading to see how things turn out. Hopefully you won't go that route.
| Goose chapter 7 . 3/16
I'm really loving this story. Characters are not OOC(honestly, someone who was just ignored and talked down to all their lives like Harry was would act like this), no bashing whatsoever...one of the best stories I've been able to read in a while now. I look forward to reading the rest of what you have posted so far.
| Goose chapter 3 . 3/15
Nice start so far.
| Gandalf's Beard chapter 20 . 3/9
Another gripping chapter as always.
| vysirez chapter 20 . 3/9
I was a bit worried when I started reading your story. I tend to like stories that try to do a more realistic portrayal of the effects of the neglect and abuse that Harry suffered. So I wanted to read your story for that. However your A/N at the beginning of chapter 1 and some of the reviews made me a bit nervous about what Harry would be like in the story.
One of the things I disliked about the cannon story was how passive Harry was. He would fight back when he got pushed or angry or stumbled into a life or death situation, but generally he was passive. His life was in danger multiple times and he made basically no effort to adjust or counter things. The only time I can really say I remember him going above and beyond his normal minimal effect was in 3rd year when he learned the Patronus and used it successfully. Other then that he would just stumble through his very dangerous and scary life as if there was nothing going on, and he would survive due to luck and author's fiat.
So when I saw your A/N and some of the reviews about how passive Harry was made me worried that you would take an aspect of the cannon that I disliked and make it worse. Add in the fact that we are 250k words into the story and we are only 3 months into first year, and also the fact that you made a number of comments about how long it would take for Harry to get over things. So I have to admit I read through your story almost waiting for the 'hammer' to fall, not that there would be a hammer, since I was worried about Harry being passive and a pushover, but I hope you can understand what I mean.
After explaining that, I have to say that I didn't have any real problems with Harry's character in the story. Was he passive and shy? Yes, but not so much more so then cannon that it was a problem. And you did show him acting to better himself and improve, so that was better then cannon IMO. I do admit that the story is progressing a bit slowly, but I am generally fine with slow stories, though slow stories still being written are harder to deal with then ones that are slow, but done :) I was worried that Harry wouldn't stick up for himself at all, and while he doesn't go out of his way to do so, when he's backed into a corner he seems to do ok, at least so far. So all I can say is I have enjoyed the story, and I hope to read more, with only the wish that you try to keep him from being too passive/shy.
On a mostly unrelated note, simply because the story has stopped where it is for me, I have to talk about the situation with Harry's entropy hands, I have to wonder how it works. Cause I'm having some trouble figuring out how he's not disintegrating things right and left. If it's just his hands, I would assume he can't wear gloves? Cause if he could, and they worked, then it wouldn't really be that big of a problem, well it would still be a rather major problem, but not to the level Harry seems to be indicating. However if he can't wear gloves, how is he not disintegrating his wand, or his clothes, or his blankets and bed when he sleeps. I figured it had to just be his hands because he's not running around naked, and falling into an endlessly deeper hole as he disintegrates whatever he stands on.
| Guest chapter 5 . 3/9
Really enjoying the change of character viewpoints. It's refreshing and gives a far more sympathetic view of them.
| JordanMathias chapter 20 . 3/8
A beautiful ending here and a very fun way of changing Harry's life again.