|Reviews for The Last Breeze of Autumn|
| Moonlight Serenity chapter 5 . 8/28/2013
This story was so intense. And captivating: I just read it all one sitting. I couldn't stop reading. It was a very realistic portrayal of this sort of (horrifying) situation: I felt like the characters reacted to the situation in a realistic manner. It was really difficult subject matter, too. Really well-written.
| StarStormRazor chapter 5 . 5/26/2013
I give this thing a 9.9999999999999999 out of 10. Only reason? Nothing is perfect. But still one of the best fics i have ever read. Probably the only thing that rivals Digimon: The college years. Great storyline, amazing description and definitely the best "unclear" romance fic that i've ever read and that's saying something. And by unclear not as in low level of description, i mean like those kind of stories where the guy puts himself in danger for the girl and sort of strengthens their bond between each other greatly after the incident. Kind of like a thisguyalmostdietosavegirlforlove kind of story. This site has gotten me hooked. Dude really you should work for a publishing company or something. Make money out of these amazing fics you think of. But of course only if you want to but i really think your up to it! I am also writing but my ability PALES in comparison to yours! One more thing, if you become famous because of your sheer ability and creativity, i assure you i will do all in my power to be the FIRST to get your autograph.
| TogetherAgain chapter 5 . 5/2/2013
I am so glad you recommended this story. That would of been a difficult one to write. Or even to capture the emotions that would be needed inside this fic . Well done.
| field innocence chapter 5 . 4/5/2013
The story went out smooth and very descriptive. The ending was nice also. Overall it was a well tell story. I fairly enjoyed it.
| chumble chapter 5 . 4/3/2013
this is a really great story It's well written and i've been on the edge of my seat since 3 seconds into chapter 1. as you can tell by my comments. I really REALLY hope that guy get's life in prison where he's constantly raped and beaten like a little bitch. and then get's sold for a fucking cigarette. and the process repeats it's self until he's been violated by every inmate in the prison, and then once his usefulness to them is no longer there, he get's shanked by a knife ripping out his throat revealing the juggular and continued through agonizing torture untill his guts are torn out of him and his boy is repeaditly viola... WOW I HAVE ISSUES DON'T I? Yyyyyaaaaaaa let's not go there. BAD PLACE BAD PLACE! Sorry about that but umm ya anyway the point is he's NEVER going to bother Takeru-San again. and that makes me happy. You're really good at writing a bad guy I can really totally frigging hate and when i say hate i mean more hate then i hate Daisuke-Gaijin hate and that's a lot of hate. You're writings skills are REALLY REALLY good. i dunno if i'll come across more of your stories in fanfiction but i hope i do. because you're really good at it. Maybe you can review some stories of mine some time. not that you half to. but still you're writing skills are just AMAZING! I've never loved to hate someone with so much passion before. You've got SERIOUS TALENT when it comes to fanfiction and over all i'd give this story a 9.9 out of 10.0 why 9.9 you may ask BECAUSE THAT BASTARD DIDN'T DIE! but i mean that's just one little thing and that's personal reasons that not everyone would share. you're writing is really good. The story is emotional but not the totally pathetic over emotional bullshit i've read before in fanfiction. You've got a really great blend of emotions and story here. it's a really great job and as such you should be proud for writing this. Once again good job. -
| chumble chapter 4 . 4/3/2013
I think you just gave me a mild heart attack with that line about Takeru-San's Mother. ... THAT MEANS TAKERU-SAN HAS TO LEGALLY GO STAY WITH HIS FATHER WOOOOOO THAT BASTARD CAN'T GET TO HIM NOW!... you're going to ruin this for me now aren't you? -_-... thought so. FINALLY TAKERU-SAN SHOT THAT BASTARD! I HOPE HE DIES FROM THAT. NO I HOPE HIS LIFE IS PRESERVED BY A MACHINE IN THE ER AND THE KIDS JUST CASUALLY YANK THE CHORD OUT OF THE WALL AND SNIP IT SO THAT HE CAN'T BE PLUGGED BACK IN AND THEN SHOOT HIS ASS AGAIN IN THE FACE FOR GOOD MEASURE! AND THAT IT'S YAMATO-SAMA SPORTING A SHOTGUN DOING IT! once again you have freaked me out and caught me off guard. your writing is excellent. the story is good and i about crapped my pants in excitement when Takeru-San shot the bastard.
| chumble chapter 3 . 4/3/2013
PLEASE FOR THE LOVE OF GOD BRING MAGNA ANGEMON INTO THIS FIGHT AND HAVE HIM STRAIGHT UP KILL THE BASTARD. OR ATLEAST BRING IN TAKERU-SAN'S REAL FATHER! once again I'm looking forward to seeing the next chapter i know it's completed but still i can't help but voice my oppinions on what should happen next. Keep up the good work, i actually managed to get past this chapter completely before starting my commenting this time, so i'm learning to get used to your writing style which is AMAZING by the way.
| chumble chapter 2 . 4/3/2013
As soon as Ken asked about Takeru-San I was like FFFFFFFUUUUUUUUUUUUuUUUUUUUU LET'S JUST GO ON THE WAR PATH FIND OUT AND KICK THE ASSES OF ANYONE WHO GET'S IN OUR WAY. You've got me Super pissed off and Super Emotional and wow you're really good at writing this stuff. OH. My. GOD. DAISUKE-GAIJIN BECAME THE VOICE OF REASON!? He even stated what i was saying all along while reading this stuff so far. Let's just go confront him about it. I wanted to confront him at his appartment. My annoyance and hatred of Daisuke-Gaijin has been slightly decreased. Really. Good. Writing. *Evil Laugh* with Yamato-Sama back *crack knuckles* there's gonna be hell to pay. HEY! Ken is a blackbelt is several styles of martial arts right? Takeru-San's pretty strong himself though in his weakened state he won't be much help but still. and Hikari-Chan was taught self defense by Takeru-San,Yamato-Sama, and Taichi-Oniisan. KILL THAT BASTARD! once again you've gotten me all riled up on this story GOOD JOB it's kinda hard to get me riled up about stuff like this. there's a difference between getting me riled up and annoying me. annoying me states that you have no idea what you're doing. and Getting me Riled up. WHICH YOU HAVE DONE proves you can make a story original and still keep it within the basis of what show or game the fanfiction is about. When i'm riled up you just know you did a good job writing a story.
| chumble chapter 1 . 4/3/2013
I'm shaking with pissedoffedness at this guy that you so casually call Natsuko's boyfriend. it takes ALOT to get me pissed at an OC. and you did it before i even got halfway through the first chapter... that takes TALENT. You've got great tallent and PLEASE TELL ME TAKERU-SAN... or at leasy Yamato-Sama Kicks the living shit out of this guy who deserves death. *twitch* and now I have only one more thing to say and that is FUCK GOD DAMN IT THIS GUY NEEDS TO DIE! AT THIS POINT I'D BE HAPPY WITH DAISUKE-GAIJIN SLITTING THIS BASTARD'S THROAT! AND I FUCKING HATE DAISUKE-GAIJIN! YOU'VE MANAGED TO MAKE ME HATE THAT OC BASTARD EVEN MORE!
that being said you're writing skills are impressive and i'm shivering with anticipation from the first chapter alone REALLY GOOD JOB. though i don't like it when Takeru-San is abused you're good at writing stuff like this. keep up the good work
| Digidestined Ninja of Sunshine chapter 5 . 3/25/2013
This story deserves more reviews than what it has.
...Could you possibly write an epilogue? You left the ending so open! It leaves me curious!
| cook563 chapter 4 . 3/10/2013
ok that not only surprised me but it made me very happy that that scumbag finally got what he deserved. i feel bad that tk's mother died and the fact that her boyfriend couldn't have cared less. i can't wait to see what happens next and whether or not the police will get involved also where will TK live now? will he go to his dads to live, or will he stay in that apartment? anywho can't wait for the next chapter and please update soon.
| Digidestined Ninja of Sunshine chapter 4 . 3/10/2013
It's about damn time that bastard died! And, as much as it shocked pretty much everyone, I could totally see TK shooting the gun! GO TAKERU!
| field innocence chapter 4 . 3/10/2013
Wow! Very dramatic and slight graphic (I mean with blood here- blood there) I really enjoy action that involve with only physical contact-attact, it's more interesting than supernatural-spiritual-super power technique (I mean it's interesting to watch sparkling light fly but reading in description form it is not fun). Especially the heavy emotion that went with the action, it was marvelous, Takari sound very strong and powerful that I suddenly fell inlove again. I say this is your best chapter, great job!
| KilluaZaoldyeck chapter 3 . 2/26/2013
First of all, it's a good story. But still, there's a couple of things that I find "odd".
I don't mind if you don't want to include digimon here. I think the story would be more relistic if you don't involve digimon. I also don't mind about the fact that hida and inous were staying in the same building as takeru, I mean, Takaishi could've been moved fro mtheir old apartment.
And I like how you refer them as Takeru and Hikari, I'm not a fan to their american name. Takeru and Hikari is a perfect name. And I think it would be better if you edit the conversation line with ("). Preferably if you break it down into different line on different paragraph instead of putting it together in same paragraph.
But, there's no way you didn't include the brothers. This man you referred as takeru's mom boyfriend, is not just abused him, he raped him, he raped him for god sake. If that's happen to my brother, I would literally killed that man.
Knowing Yamato, with his over-protective way to his brother. He would do the same like me. So, I don't think you can just outcast the brother especially Yamato. He, of all people, should be involved.
| field innocence chapter 3 . 2/24/2013
Oh my gosh! What is going to happen next?! Can't wait for the next chapter. Great work! Emotional. Love it XD