Reviews for Proofread
Guest chapter 1 . 6/2/2016
Loved your story.. But I just don't see hikaru as the Uke; and the twins don't either. ( refer to episode: Attack of the lady manager! ) Koaru an hikaru speak about how innacurate it was that koaru was portrayed as the 'pitcher' in Renge's movie. Haruhi is confused by the phrase and thy tell her "if you dont already know, don't ask." seeing as she's pretty innocent and wouldn't understand that it meant the person who topped.
TheCauldron chapter 1 . 3/9/2016
Very hot. *grin*
Ms.K216 chapter 1 . 7/13/2015
Wow... I usually don't read stuff like this but I really really enjoyed this. Great writing and amazing start with the letter thing. If I weren't afraid of my little sister finding this in my favorites I would definitely favorite it without a doubt!
EternalFalsity chapter 1 . 9/26/2013
cute story
Megan chapter 1 . 9/1/2013
I would have loved this fanfiction endlessly...except I just can't envision Hikaru as the uke. That really really bugged me. Some of Kaoru's words were very OOC too. Other than that, I loved it
Jacinthro chapter 1 . 6/17/2013
That was awesome! You did a good job of having Kaoru on top which barely anyone can do right! But you did! YAY! You should make one about what they do the next night!
cyberangel chapter 1 . 4/1/2013
i like kaoru being tied but hikaru being tied is fun too. _
MirthfulMurder21 chapter 1 . 3/30/2013
Aww c: The twins are so cute! I loved this fic. It's the perfect combination of fluff and sexiness! Great job
HikaruTheKid chapter 1 . 3/18/2013
I love how you made the twins (how do I put it) in a forbidden position. I am a young author so I know a lot about writing. There are a few things you should fix, but of course this is proofreading (so I'm giving you props for making little grammar errors) I think you did beautifully, in your imagination and detail. I hope you enjoyed writing (I know I do) so I hope you make a habit of this.
blah chapter 1 . 3/17/2013
this is very detailed...but I LOVE it so much
Atalaya86 chapter 1 . 2/20/2013
OoO owwwww so cute! twins love the best! V
Freekness X Yaoi chapter 1 . 2/17/2013
Queen Weirdo chapter 1 . 2/17/2013
O.M.G. I lived this! Truly awesome! Mega thumps up on this ;D
Bobbie9 chapter 1 . 2/13/2013
"how come you have karou being the pitcher?" its in the storyline/origional story that hikaru is on top. which in all senses makes sense since he's the older of the two. but, all in all, they really dont have to follow origional plot and i did really like it [i just really wanted to use that quote]. well written and just about as easy to follow as you can get with identical twins with almost the same freackin' name
tolazytologin chapter 1 . 2/11/2013
TWINCEST! HOW I LOVE YOU SO MUCH RIGHT NOW! Hehe (the thought going through my mind is from ep.8 of OHSHC when Hikaru tells Tamaki "you nasty pervert") xD
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