Reviews for The God Slaying HeroKing
ramielz chapter 5 . 1/19
You know if u substract shirou in this chapter and upload on the other sites in the name of Takatsuki jou, everyone might believe it.. seriously u should huv written godou centric fic for this chapter alone..instead here emiya fan would skip the fight and disappointed that emiya didnt take the stage...the action scenes are absolutely great and i like the scene of lily trying to cut her own leg for godou's sake... shame u huv to redo this fic...
Rawrking chapter 3 . 12/6/2017
Trash fic delete pls
miguelgiuliano.co chapter 6 . 10/14/2017
Genial esta historia así como su nueva versión que hicisteis de ella .
Espero que continues con esa versión y pongas elementos de esta historia .
Guest chapter 5 . 4/28/2017
Is Liliana an fucking idiot.
Guest chapter 4 . 4/28/2017
mutltitude of different emotions: kindness, care, protectiveness, and above all pity.

Pity reley reley... no one likes being pitied it's one stap form disgust.
dan chapter 1 . 3/25/2017
some how this ending of all the worlds evil is 98.8% perfect!
Pegasai chapter 4 . 9/18/2016
Holy crap. This level of writing.

The fight was basically this:
Perseus: I AM A HERO! WHO ARE YOU?!
Shirou: No, you aren't a hero! I'M THE REAL HERO!
Perseus: I AM A HERO! (swings sword) Kuaahhhhhhh!
Shirou: No, you aren't a hero! I'm the hero! (swings sword) Kuahhhhhh!

Rinse. Wash. Repeat.

I lost count how many times they repeat this idiotic conversation.
Paxloria chapter 6 . 1/26/2016
Well, I can see what you mean.

You have lots of good stuff here, but your right about the errors.

Good luck with your writting!
Paxloria chapter 5 . 1/26/2016
Why would their be bits of Shirou's swords laying around after the fight? shouldn't they have all turned back to particals of Prawna after breaking/no longer being suported by him?

What was the point of all that kissing when Lillian just lectured him with information instead of implanting it into his mind directly?

That god said that he wasn't going to hold back, but he went easy on Godou. Why? It doesn't make sense.

I understand that Shirou had other things on his mind at thee time, but wasn't swords a stupid choice? A shield like Agis or Rho Aias whould have been better.

Like in earlier chapters, your still having trouble with knowing when to use "his", "her", "she", and "he" for the characters.
Paxloria chapter 4 . 1/26/2016
So Medusa dropped down a rank and went from goddess/diety to Divine Ancester
Paxloria chapter 3 . 1/26/2016
This was a totally AWESOME chapter!
Paxloria chapter 2 . 1/26/2016
Its a good chapter.

The only difficult-to-believe thing is that it took 2 hours and 30 minutes for Shirou's physically healed body to return back to the world.
(he couldn't have spent more than 5 to 10 minutes in that Reality Marble and figure 20 to 30 minuts MAX for the physical healing [2 minutes is more believable], and that makes the rest of the wait time exsessive.)
Paxloria chapter 1 . 1/26/2016
This doesn't make sense.
Shirou's wish:
"I wish she {Sabor} was here with us."
Should have resultedin either:
1). Sabor being re-summond to them (maybe corruped by Angra Minyu)
2). Them being sent to Sabor's side
3). The four of them plus Sabor all being sent together to where ever Angra Minyu wants to go.

But the fact that none of these 3 things happened means that the wish WASN'T granted and all that happened after ward should not have happened.
So, For this outcome to make sense, Sabor should also have been yanked into that world and trapped with the other three girls and Shirou shouldn't have been left behind since he was including himself in that wish to.

Also, Shirou was pretty drained even before fighting the god, so he should not have been able to do that much or last that long before dieing.
Now if he'd landed & stabed Angra Minyu with Caliborn in a surprise attack from the fall and got lucky kill with the distracted God befor dying, that would have been more believable.
Shit chapter 1 . 12/10/2015
This story is shit. It's not even worthy of being call a fanfiction.

Arlos, you're shit too. Your spelling and grammar is atrocious. Your review is badly structured. Your points are all bullshit. The logic you use is extremely restricted and based on misinformation, false assumptions, and an inability to think outside of the box, an inability to be creative and inovative. Basically, go fuck yourself because you have shitty spelling, grammar, and logic.
Im a guest chapter 1 . 11/18/2015
HAREM!
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