|Reviews for Armor|
| Jiopaba chapter 9 . 3/9
This is the first good Renegade Shepard I can recall ever reading, to be honest. Some of the Renegade choices in the game always felt so... almost comical to me. Like, almost universally they lead to a crappier outcome in the end than Paragon choices, every step of the way.
This Shepard actually feels like a ruthless bitch to me, and not like a spastic dork who occasionally has fits of pointless evil.
| scriptophobic14 chapter 5 . 3/2
Ah, so Shepard indulges through fighting or fucking. Reminiscent of a typical warrior in peacetime. She's shaping up to be a rather dark character. Just take care not to stress on that darkness TOO much, though. That'd just be cheesy.
| scriptophobic14 chapter 3 . 3/2
Aha, so there's a ton of character development here for Shepard. The craving for violence, the subsequent need to quench (or at least leash) this craving, and the mechanisms and mannerisms that would help her 'control' the 'darkness'. Judging by the tone set in this chapter, I'll be expecting a Shepard breakdown in the far future.
| scriptophobic14 chapter 2 . 3/2
Hmm, Shepard seems to be letting out all that bottled up abuse from dear old daddy. I quote Kal when I say: Worrisome.
| scriptophobic14 chapter 1 . 3/2
Absolutely brilliant concept on the quarian method of conveying emotions! Gonna put off writing for a while to read this baby. :)
| Billy Killman chapter 3 . 2/10
I like what I see so far, and noting I say after this hinders my positive opinion of this story so far but as a Marine I feel compelled to point out a few things. First, they would never salute in a combat zone and your scene is definitely that. Second, Marines don't ever use "sarge." It is sergeant, staff sergeant, ect... each rank is separate, I know other branches of service are more lax on that but not Marines. Oh, and Marines are never soldier's, their Marines. Sorry for the rant I know this is a story and in a completely different universe and whatnot, but pet peeves and all.
| Taichi-Doragon Tentei chapter 9 . 2/2
This is such a different way to see Shephard and i can't wait to see how Tali affects her. Tali is just a vision of purity in Mass Effect and this Shepard isn't the stereotypical hero...she's just a woman that gets the job done and doesn't have to many gripes about how its done. Can't wait for more chapters...keep up the good work.
| tripleRRR chapter 9 . 2/1
I have to say your other story, Thorns. Is probably the best single fic I have every read on . So far this story has great potential. To answer your question about Shepherd's motivations I would suggest some flashbacks to help flesh her out. One thing I would really like to see is a Shepherd that doesn't end up as one of the extremes of the Paragon/Renegade spectrum.
I look forward to where you take this story, keep those updates coming!
| Emerald Stag chapter 9 . 1/25
Nice update! Interesting encounter with Harkin, definitely showed the lengths that Shepard is willing to go to get what she needs. Liked how she led the conversations, even with Wrex & Garrus. She's definitely not someone to mess with, almost like boogeyman levels there at the end - I actually feel bad for Harkin lol.
| ScOut4It chapter 8 . 1/23
I really liked your description if the doctor (her annoyingly educated and highly quippy way of talking). Likeable, but yes, all those things.
Because of her speach, Shepard's stood out in stark contrast. I feel like Shephard is talking in this chapter more country (like Kailey from Firefly) whereas before she was smooth and sultry (when speaking with Joker).
Often she doesn't say "I" when speaking. Perhaps I'm remembering or read her previously incorrectly, but she just feels like she shifted into a rugged and unpolished character here.
But, I was digging this chapter, the coffee (though maybe it could be pre-sugared in the future ;-) and her disinterest in the one-sided conversation with Alenko.
I'm glad that you found your muse again for writing this (regarding this chapter's A/N)!
| ScOut4It chapter 7 . 1/21
I bet I know why Shepard feels this:
/He smiled after delivering this riveting life story. Shepard frowned in return, taking in his blocky, cheerful face and experiencing an irrational flicker of contempt. She couldn't quite say what triggered the reaction, but it was an effort for her to keep it disguised. "Anything pertinent you can tell us about the area?"/
As much as she values her strength, I think she envys his blissful ignorance and that the worst he experienced growing up was peaceful boredom. He had it so much better than her and is completely oblivious.
Well presented :-)
Also, I was playing more of ME2 since you inspired me; I found that I like the thief's stealthy kills.
And I still need to catch up on your DAO epic, but I am so far and so long behind, that I'll need to reread. So I did/do love it too... But I need to be in the right moment to begin again.
Glad to see you still rocking great stories!
| ScOut4It chapter 4 . 1/20
You Shepard is very... interesting. Her lust for battle and power make sense with her upbringing in many ways. You really expressed her 'awakening' very well!
This is going to be a hell of a ride :-)
| ScOut4It chapter 1 . 1/19
I'm very excited about this story!
I love that you start before the adventure.
I'm glad that you will go AU (I don't like knowing every plot twist before they happen).
I also am excited about Tali (since she seems off-limits in the game and I'd been dying to peak under her 'veil'...
And I'm glad that you go into ME1 as I have only started (and don't like the control set-up) with ME2.
Also, you are really great at conveying that sense of shame for both Tali and Shephard; I think that's a feeling that most people can relate to.
Thanks for writing and your satisfyingly lengthy (compared to the average) chapters!
| TimeShinigami chapter 9 . 1/16
I'm enjoying this story to an absurd decree. You're great, this story is great, and you should FEEL great.
About Shepard's character, I'd say it was absolutley fine. You're the first author I've come across who I've felt has done Renegade Shep right (Melaradark came close). That little aside about Garrus near the end, with either a planned corruption or betrayal? Stroke of genius, and more in-line with my perception of Renegade than anything I've ever seen.
| BiscuitChan chapter 9 . 1/16
Very glad to see another chapter! Really liked the extra layer of grime you added to the Ward areas.
Shepard feels about right to me. I don't think I could explain precisely why, unfortunately, but if there's any inconsistency, it's rather humanizing in a way. A little (emphasis on little) more uncontrolled anger might showcase her slightly-duplicitous nature, perhaps. I don't think Harkin's situation needed more than you wrote it as though; save it for bigger fish if anything.
I suppose you could actually play around with that and make her more focused and open (and potentially less angry) after some time, once her goals, relationships, and the stakes of the mission become clear. I'd suggest avoiding clarity being given by romantic relationship alone though.
Looking forward to the next chapter, whenever that may be. Good luck.