Reviews for The Penitent Man
Guest chapter 1 . 2/18
Oh yeah, and it has been over a year, so next chapter please?
Guest chapter 1 . 2/18
Well. Fuck. And he did consider himself saving humanity, and some did follow him because they believed in him, so he is a hero to them. No one said a Hero was a good guy, did they?
Impaler98 chapter 1 . 1/11
Awesome! yea thats all I got
God Emperor of Chaos chapter 1 . 12/5/2013
They might as well pull down their pants and bend over because they are FUCKED!
Eljin1 chapter 1 . 11/8/2013
heart pumping excitement! tho horus would be totally op compared to all the other heroes.
and wasnt he in terminator armor at the end?
Duncan0Idaho chapter 1 . 10/15/2013
There is no S rank, the next ranks to A are A, A, A and EX, AGI has nothing to do with speed but rather dextreity.
Kaito-sama chapter 1 . 9/28/2013
Given that my favorite primarch is Horus lupercal, i have to say this is a great story. You making him an anti-hero to get him into the throne of heroes.

I'd like to ask you to provide a second chapter as a kind of flashback showing what dreams were revealed to illya about Horus' life. And also some dialogue, given that Horus is a master strategist, he should still have quite a bit of his reasoning and sanity enough for him to speak to her. Cheers!
BloodRavenFan chapter 1 . 8/16/2013
Beloved and accursed...greatest and lowest...Son of the Emperor...Prince of the Imperium...Primarch...Warmaster...Arch-Traitor...H orus the Lupercal. It's over...they are all going to die.
Random Guy chapter 1 . 6/28/2013
No problems with the story itself, but the authors note at the end where Horus is statted out is wrong. "S" is not a classification in the Nasu-setting. It goes from E (lowest for a Servant, roughly x10 better than a regular person) to A (Where A is roughly equal to godly magic/power, Excalibur is A).

EX is a classification of it's own, because it doesn't necessarily mean that it is better, just that it is different. For example Sparticus from one of the canceled Nasu-games had an Endurance of EX. The reason for that was not because it was super-ridiculous toughness (although it was) but instead because it worked differently from regular endurance because for him he would actually get tougher/hard to hurt the more he was injured instead of the other way around. For example starting the fight he would be, comparatively, easy to injury but the more hurt he became the harder it became to hurt him. This is why he had an EX rank in endurance.

More to the point S is not a real classification in that setting. It caps out at A. The sign denotes something roughly twice as good (under certain circumstances) than the regular stat of that level. For example A is roughly twice as good as A, but A is only 3 times better than A (they don't double on top of themselves, merely double the base). In this fashion a B is better than a flat A.
Rein Hellfire chapter 1 . 5/13/2013
Instant victory. Horus Lupercal? As fucking BERSERKER?!
It's official. They're all fucked. Fuyuki is going to have a bad end... very bad.
Nice one-shot. Kind of familiar with Warhammer, but not really at the same time. I know enough to get by though.
Horus as Berserker though, that's all kinds of unfair.
Alfred Blake Astracadence chapter 1 . 5/12/2013
I apologize to all fate fans but this has curbstomp written all over it. i mean, seriously the man needed his father to come up and ANNIHILATE him mind, body and soul, and that was when he was, in a sense, remotely human. with the grail powerups i'm surprised he's not S or EX in everything.

Please continue this work.
For Chaos Undivided, their champion has come!
Anniria chapter 1 . 5/12/2013
A very interesting concept, kinda feel sorry for poor Horus after reading the beginning though lol.

I do hope to read more soon, though I do wonder what you'll use for his noble phantasms.
Spiritblade chapter 1 . 5/1/2013
Your decision to commit Horus Lupercal - HORUS, of all people! - to the Grail War is akin to taking a nuclear missile to an infantry battalion. The other Heroes - even Gilgamesh - are out of their league. This war is as good as Ilya's. No Hero short of Sanguinius or the Emperor Himself can take Horus on in a straight fight.

Your ambition, brother, is magnificent.
Deadzepplin chapter 1 . 3/24/2013
Will the Emperor feel his son's presence even though he doesn't understand who it is?
Darkkon27 chapter 1 . 3/17/2013
You have such nice stories with such great ideas...
Summoning Horus, what a masterstroke!
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