Reviews for The Boss's Wife |
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![]() ![]() So... I like the idea of your story and really wanted to read it, but I have to say the way you write your dialogue is a little too far from actual speaking things such as "oh, I just feel so protective of you I really don't know how that happened." doesn't really sound like something ppl would actually say. I am also missing a little detail in the action. You could lead towards the things that happen a little more in the first seven chapters you hinted towards a connection between the FBI and the Black's the Black's and the Denalis and you introduced James as a threat. It's a little much at once with not a lot of time in-between. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hoping you finish! Merry Christmas |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wish there was more ..too many mob ficus left incomplete data ..I'm doing a covid clean out on my alerts and this is another to go ..thanks. For sharing did like the way this was going thanks for sharing have fun |
![]() ![]() ![]() The Blacks and the Denali's aare thes to watch, but where is James. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great. |
![]() ![]() ![]() So sad for losing Aro, l would have liked him dealt with Blacks first. Poor Bella, what happened to Charlies mother? |
![]() ![]() ![]() phew, l need a shower now. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Go Bella, show them who you are |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great, l really, really like Char. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Loving it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thanks for a great chapter.-:) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Well put Edward. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow, it just gets better. Billy is in so much trouble, he killed Aro's son. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I can't wait to know what they find out at bank. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Maybe Charlie's parents were in the mob and that's why Charlie left them. |