|Reviews for Betrayal of a dragon|
| The Crimson Dazzle chapter 1 . 8/12/2013
Hey, it's Crimson Dazzle, aka VexThePegasus. This is my new account. :3
| knexfan100 chapter 2 . 7/18/2013
MOTHER FUCKER, my stupid app derped again and it made me review for THE WRONG FUCKING STORY. O MY FUCKING GOD. THIS MADE ME FEEL SO FUCKING STUPID. Look if you read it already are is confused that's because its for "sins of the heart". I have no way to delete the derped up review from this shitty phone so I have to find a pc soon. Sorry about this random bullshit. (Just ignore my chap 1 review.)
| knexfan100 chapter 1 . 7/18/2013
I just started reading this but I couldn't even get to chapter 2 because the fanfiction reader app derped and started crashing...
Anyways, this is one of the better fanfictions i've read. With a creepy vibe that puts many creepypastas to complete shame, this story is a joy to read so far. I know this is not meant to be a creepypasta but, I just have to say that I'm really glad you didn't opt out for stupid clechies like "hyper-realistic blood" or "black eyes with red pupils". The red eyes for king sombra (believe it or not) is actually a breath of fresh air to me. Cadence's dark magic explanation was also nice to read... I've never read a dark story with dark magic in it so mabe that's just me.
My only complaint is the grammar errors. Sometimes you put "in" when it should be "if", sometimes words are switched, and sometimes the dialauge just sounds unnatural so I have to re-arrange the whole sentance myself. I don't mind bad spelling... I can't spell to save my life so if you used the wrong "your", had improper use of a comma, or just completly fucked up a word's spelling: I really don't give a shit. Its just jumbled words that always get to me.
| devonbronyboy chapter 7 . 7/14/2013
Dude...please just typimg this story. It brings back terrible memories too me, memories that I have been trying too get rid of for my whole life. Please just stop with the violence and let Twilight be okay...this is exactly how my life came too be
| MADMAN03 chapter 7 . 6/20/2013
And I thought twilight would win!
| Impatient Reader chapter 7 . 6/19/2013
STOP WORKING ON THIS FOR A WHILE AND GET BACK TO WORK ON "CLOAKED IN SHADOWS!"
| Mecha-Whooves chapter 7 . 6/7/2013
I feel that the drake's life is officially bucked and yes this is starting to get really dark, I hope that he realizes what an ass he's been and attempt redemption by making things right to those he wronged. Can't fix his life but he can at least help fix everyone else's and please don't let Twi die (hey that rhymed unintentionally) also I would like to know who does spike love really?
| NightsOwl chapter 7 . 5/21/2013
i find it hard to believe twilight doesnt know how to deal with love after all she does know the goddess of it
| ShiningShadow1965 chapter 7 . 5/7/2013
Dude to end this do what you do best made me cry on this chapter now things are just falling apart everywhere bravo.
| MAD- The Awesomeman chapter 7 . 5/6/2013
Spike do have a point thought each time a big problem occur the "Higher Powers" usually sends people with attitudes to fix them...
| He23t chapter 7 . 5/5/2013
Spike's life is living hell right now but try making Spike resolve head strong and face the music plus i guess they will be a big confrontation between spike and the 6 mares.
| PyraohXBlaze chapter 7 . 5/4/2013
This story is amazing so far. I seriously can;t wait for the next chapter. I like Pinkie's slip into insanity. It shows the damage Spike has done. Good job and keep it up
| Karlos1234ify chapter 7 . 5/4/2013
Poor Spike. I hope Ditzy and Dinky help him resolve everything.
Consider the very first in centuries, now dead.
| Guest chapter 6 . 4/13/2013
| thecreator339 chapter 6 . 4/4/2013
Yo bro you need to update this story