Reviews for In the Eyes of the Delusional
Nikki Altava chapter 1 . 2/14/2013
Ooh, this is a very interesting idea. Especially since no one barely ever writes about Anton! It's looking good so far and I really like the way it's written. Though I do have a couple of suggestions. For starters, the story starts of in past tense then drops to present- try and keep them in the same tense.

One thing that I'd really lik to see, is his life with Sophia. Including his meeting with Sophia (maybe), him proposing to her and then her leaving. Also, some things to do with his family and brother, Beluga (I think that was his name... could be wrong) and not just the scenes he featured in, in the game. Maybe even include that scene with Parcelle, the postman?

I hope to see more soon! And I wonder who the other people's POV it'll be in? Katia's? Don Paolo's?
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