|Reviews for Mario and Luigi and Bowser|
| Guest chapter 88 . 3/4
... Ok, this is gonna be a long one.
Let's get the unpleasant part out of the way first, shall we? Yeah, I noticed the rush job on the past 10 chapters. They seemed less... good. Hopefully when you get back you'll have some revisions to these chapters. They're not bad, they just don't live up to the same quality of the other chapters.
For example, the confessions between the Stars seemed a bit rushed and compacted. Expand that a little! Also, during the Peach's castle battle, Starlow seemed a bit... more callous than usual, if you meant it as more scared or nervous or confident, it came off as more of possible residue energy from the Dark Star corrupting her. The castle battle didn't seem to be as detailed as usual. Also, I would have liked to see a paragraph at least from Fawful's perspective when he was the dark bug thing.
Ok, unpleasant part out of the way. You are still doing an amazing job, and have created one of my favorite stories and my new headcanon. Again, the dialogue shown in the game blends with the mental conversations and the ones happening 'off camera' to the game. The way everyone who knows what is happening is frightened of the Dark Star adds an excellent sense of just how powerful it is. The Bros analysis of what is going on fits them well, they are not dumb enough to fall for that. Bowser's attitude fits him as well, but maybe expand that a little. His guessing about the conveniently Dark Star themed area also seems like him. The battles with the Dark Star and Fawful were both great, and the struggles the Stars were having with the Dark Star while the Bros battled in the illusion added great depth to it. It's not easy to jump between two points in a fight while keeping them separate, and you do it well.
And here we are. Finally, the end is in sight. Original grey vs Copy black, Souls of Light vs Core of Darkness. Write it out, and have fun. I look forward to seeing the resolution of this as it all comes to a close. Good luck.
| XerxesTexasToast chapter 88 . 3/1
*flips table and walks away*
| XerxesTexasToast chapter 87 . 3/1
So THAT'S how you included Broque's cameo! That's BRILLIANT!
This was such a sweet scene! The Broques are starting to creep their way into my list of favorite ships. 3
Ho, geez, I don't even know what to say about your writing at this point. It's been Darker and Edgier (in a good way, I swear!) since the beginning, but F*CK, NOW WE'RE GETTING TO THE FINAL BOSS! It's getting to the point where this story feels like an epic; there's a history for everything in the game. I love it so much you don't even know *collapses in a flailing fangirly spaz attack*
| Latham02 chapter 88 . 2/28
This chapter really highlight why I liked this part of the game so much; Bowser is up against a world ending scenario, and yet he still has complete confidence! I really can't wait till he realizes who was really helping him this whole time though, that will be priceless.
Have fun on your research trip! We'll miss you!
| Latham02 chapter 86 . 2/28
Ahh, the reveal to Mario and Luigi what was going on was perfect! Just, everything about it was hilarious and clever, and it's nice to see the bros aren't that stupid.
| cryptidking chapter 85 . 2/27
R.I.P fawful the most unique villain Nintendo ever made also "flying kick was met with a flying punch"made me laugh for some reason
| Mr.lvs.luigi chapter 2 . 2/25
Not to complain but why can people give Mario & luigis voices?
| cryptidking chapter 84 . 2/25
Short chapter but I found the castle too easy AND IRONIC
| XerxesTexasToast chapter 83 . 2/22
"Oui, Madame, 'cest moi."
Awwww! AWWWWWWWWWWWW! 3
You're so good at building up the feels for your own headcanon! I'm jealous. This whole chapter was so feelsy!
| cryptidking chapter 83 . 2/22
Just curious (love the story)but are you doing a novelization of dream team or the other Mario & Luigi games
| Sonar chapter 82 . 2/19
| Mobyfunk9 chapter 1 . 2/19
Loooooove you're story!(:
| Latham02 chapter 82 . 2/19
Whoo, go Starlow! Nice reference to SSBB by the way, though it would complicate the story infinitely if that was cannon.
| YinWriter chapter 80 . 2/17
Oh my! This is getting interesting! I'm certainly looking forward to the fight with the Dark Star itself! *patiently waiting while suppressing fangirl squeals*
| jakeroo123 chapter 77 . 1/17
... It would appear that there's a VERY good reason characters besides the Mario Bros don't usually transform... I'm thinking I'd be right in assuming even extra lives wouldn't help now? Not a good way for things to end for Midbus, or anyone, not at all.