|Reviews for Birth of the Forest|
| Blackholelord chapter 5 . 9/21
Not a review. Stupid video at bottom of the page is forcing the page to go to the bottom as I am reading the story several times. I do this read your story. j
| Blackholelord chapter 4 . 9/21
Not a review. Stupid video at bottom of the page is forcing the page to go to the bottom as I am reading the story several times. I do this read your story. s
| Blackholelord chapter 3 . 9/21
Not a review. Stupid video at bottom of the page is forcing the page to go to the bottom as I am reading the story several times. I do this read your story. e
| Blackholelord chapter 2 . 9/21
Not a review. Stupid video at bottom of the page is forcing the page to go to the bottom as I am reading the story several times. I do this read your story. w
| Leonard chapter 22 . 9/18
Naruto give his life to save kushina from Pain
| Blackholelord chapter 1 . 9/20
Not a review. Stupid video at bottom of the page is forcing the page to go to the bottom as I am reading the story several times. I do this read your story.
| eimajssof chapter 22 . 9/18
Kushina has already chosen her husband over her son at this point no? Of course there is time to change ( I hope!), but are jiraiya and tsunadae going to manipulate Naruto? You really left this story at a bad cliff hanger lol.
| Guest chapter 22 . 9/10
I absolutely love this story, it's one of my favorites on this site. I just have to wonder, is it dead? The author page said it would be updated in a couple weeks, but that was months ago. I would hate to see this story end like so many others with just an AN saying it's gone.
| LaBunny32 chapter 22 . 8/30
| Aegorm chapter 7 . 8/29
I absolutely adore this chapter. This chapter alone makes this story one of my favourite Naruto fics. The description of his power is simply amazing, this gives me goosebumps every time I read it.
But the later chapter go downhill, Kushina betraying her son and Mito is simply bullshit and Kushina being alive in the first place is already a stretch IMO. I would honestly like to see a rewrite.
| Guest chapter 7 . 8/23
| Guest chapter 2 . 8/23
why would he leave them?
| DanteNaru chapter 22 . 8/19
| phff122 chapter 1 . 8/15
Hello, I have been reading this story on and off for quite some time. I want to present to you my own critique and opinions about the story. First off, let me just say, that you are very brave to continue writing stories despite those stupid flamers; please pay no attention to them!
First off, I love the fighting scene and jutsu innovations that you introduced, simply amazing! They are deeply described, and the intensity of the battles are communicated. Well Done!
Now I want to address some things that could be improved. Understand, that these are merely opinions, opinions that you might disagree with due to your own knowledge of your plot, and your perspectives. Overall I think you have amazing story, but here are just some of my perspectives:
1) The Tragedy of Strength: You portray Hashirama (rightfully so due to canon) as an extremely powerful entity. The problem with that, is that it could easily become a "fix everything that went wrong" kind of fic, and that would be slightly boring. HOWEVER, you innovated by taking old villains and using them to create obstacles and plot for the story. That is good, but don't forget that Hashirama is experienced. Obstacles are good for the plot, but don't downplay or procrastinate on resolving the plot. For instance, the hugely powerful Itachi. Don't leave such a powerful allie "fighting for Akatsuki because he needs to maintain his cover". There's a point where it becomes too repetitive and "dragged out". Hashirama's power levels makes writing a plot difficult, I know, but don't just overpower everyone, and downplay his logic and sense, for instance, why couldn't he sense Kushina's guilt and angst? Yes, it's needed for the plot, but just be careful.
2) Accent the "Naruto" in the story: After 4 or 5 chapter, this is definitely a Hashirama Fic, and so if not for the name, we wouldn't be attached to the story as much. Maybe show brief "flairs" of Naruto's personality being mixed in.
3) Kurama's dialect in the beginning if really OOC. I'm sorry, I had to say it. It was too convenient of a "mentor providing the exposition and teaching about seals and telling Naruto/Hashirama what to do". But I did enjoy this characterization!
There are more I could say, but they're really itsy-bitsy critiques, so I won't take up any more spaces.
Again, take these criticisms with a grain of salt, since they're mostly my perspectives and could be different from yours. Overall please keep on updating!
| Guest chapter 3 . 8/8
Why is this tagged as a Naruto fic when it's clearly a hashirama fic