|Reviews for The Allurement|
| Vampire Harry Fics chapter 23 . 9/11
3. I think the story is quite good, but there is a minor problem. I found a few spelling errors, but the story is still understandable despite the errors.
| emmalilly21 chapter 36 . 3/4
| Guest chapter 36 . 2/27
What a shame this has stopped. It had great potential.
| Guest chapter 23 . 8/6/2015
10 love it
| FotoDi chapter 25 . 7/26/2015
Wouldn't a werewolf sense something off? If Harry Potter has become a part-vampire...
Would the Vampire Venom have killed the horcrux in Harry? Is that why Harry is a bizarre hybrid?
| FotoDi chapter 23 . 7/26/2015
Like the story: 7
Rate Author: 6
To improve Writing style:
I would suggest that the story might be more vivid, unique and compelling by adding specific details and observations, grounding plot elements, as well as the piquant observations/concerns of other characters.
Both protagonists, Harry Potter (Boy Who Lived, Orphan, Intriguing Folk Hero, Sole Heir and Scion to the Ancient & Noble House of Potter, Parselmouth, Loner, Youngest Seeker in 100 years, Muggle-Raised Half-blood, Winner of the Triwizard Tournament, only Witness to Cedric Diggory' Suspicious Death, Fashion-challenged as he wears Muggle Rags under standard School Robes, Arguably Dumbledore's Favorite - having received Two Medals for Special Services to Hogwarts, and most recently Publicly Derided in the Press and Labelled a Deranged Attention-Seeking Liar) and Prince Auguste, (the powerful, sexy, rich Immortal Royal Ruler of the Vampires) would be under intense scrutiny and subject to wild speculation.
15-year-old Harry Potter could not physically change, eat even less & even further isolate from his peers himself without everyone at Hogwarts and thus Magical Britain noticing! Rumors and conspiracy theories would run rampant. Master strategist, Control-Freak, and Riddle-Horcrux-wary Dumbledore would be paranoid and frantic. Fudge & Malfoy, amoral opportunists both, would sense possible discord within the "Light" and want to exploit the possible weakness. Harry could not long hide from this high-profile scrutiny.
The Vampire Leader, while he may rule supreme, would also be the focal point for his entire species. Auguste brought what appeared to be a Human to the Palace - 10 guards saw the unescorted teen mortal who claimed to know their Lord, portraits talked to the boy, and a servant caught Auguste canoodling with what should be his food! It is not leap to assume that Vampires, being bored immortals in a small closed Society, would jump to wild gossip, ramosnt speculation, and even resurrect their Kindling myth.
So, your interesting story might be improved by including such ever growing concerns from both isolated magical societies. Use creative details to ramp up the "Dramatic tension". While also adding confusion and realism through the two a Protagonists' obviously confused and contrary feelings as they are Fates playthings!
So far your story is akin to an ephemeral dream, anchored only by both protagonists contrary reactions to their unconscious need for increased physical intimacy.
Well done. Eager for more. Thank you!
| ripper34 chapter 36 . 7/2/2015
Great story I hope you finish it.
| yuki chapter 23 . 3/7/2015
1. 8 out of 10 (because the self esteem Harry has. And denial. And his thought about dark creature because you, or Harry, must remember Remus is werewolf and that is meant dark creature too, but Harry accept that.)
2. 9 out of 10
3. Harry's personality. Because come on he always in danger and weird situation that sometimes it not even funny, so, definition of normal is lost to Harry, even if he want it or not.
| yuki chapter 9 . 3/7/2015
| yuki chapter 5 . 3/7/2015
Is Harry that obvious? What race that bitten you, suck your blood and leave mark like that?
| venos chapter 36 . 2/4/2015
Its a very beautiful story .i like it .tnx .but its more than one year that u didn't update it .do u abandon it !?
| LiAmi chapter 36 . 10/21/2014
is this abandoned?
| Almondeyez93 chapter 36 . 9/29/2014
Please please please update the story… I love it so much, and the potential plot lines are endless.
I think luna and neville would obviously be accepting of harry's vampiric status, but hermonie would be prevented from doing so due to her determined rigidity in believing in authority figures. ron on the other hand just would accept it based on the fact that he is a jealous prat with an inferiority complex.
anyway I really do hope you update this, and if you don't i received a great amount of pleasure from reading what there is of the story.
| Anuba chapter 36 . 8/15/2014
Please Update I love the story so far.
| Child of Music and Dreams chapter 36 . 8/2/2014
Please don't make Sirius and Remus hate Harry...