Reviews for Elements
MISUNDERSTOOD and FUCKED UP chapter 3 . 1/23
Hmm maybe you can start the next chapter with the twins, mori, honey, tamaki, and kyoya all thinking some thing like 'What... why'd I think that?!' or something like it.
HematiteTigereye chapter 3 . 6/24/2016
This was really good so far, so please update with another chapter, preferably soon (no pressure). Rgarding suggestions for the plot; how about that they spend a short period of time learning how to control Haruhi's new-found powers before something happens (curse of some kind on those who form a group with the embodiments of all the elements?-reason why they are so rare?-ancient legend of heatbreak and bitterness?extremely cleche/corny, sorry.) and the club members begin to fade into their raw elements, Mori becomes one with the trees and earth, Tamaki with the sun and light etc. Perhaps you could then have Nekozawa temporarily revive them (him being a Dark elemen person though much weaker than Kyoya) but only in the forms of maybe something like their core animal (...?) as he and his Black Magic club don't have sufficient power to do more than that (motive could be to repay the Host Club for their help with him and Kirimi, his sister). Mori may be a bear, Honey a squirrel or a rabbit, Kyoya an owl, Haruhi a wren (...?), Tamaki a hummingbird and the twins lynx? They may have to gather specific ingredients to create a counter-curse? Limited time? Occasional ability to turn human but puts a strain on their life-force? Choosing one or none of the hosts as she gets to know them more personally? Maybe? Maybe not? I don't, it is ultimately your descision (have i spelt this correctly?-nevermind, please ignore).
P.S. This was on the spot thinking, so please cut me some slack. - Hematite-Tigerseye
Littlest1 chapter 3 . 7/26/2015
Talk about the bond and where the elements came from. Try to show a community of supernatural and have them interact with one another.
Sadistic Tendencies chapter 3 . 6/22/2015
Stories are about conflict- be it internal, external, emotional, whatever. I'd say think about your world-building if you aren't ready to let go of this story yet, because you have a really good beginning - maybe that might provide an answer somehow. Like a why or how question might end up leading to an interesting road to take this story. What is the purpose the elements embody humans, how... there's a lot of different routes you can go, it's really up to you, to decide what you want to do with it.

I don't actually like telling people what to do with their own work, that seems wrong, but asking yourself the right question about it might inspire you with exactly what direction you want to take your work.

Please don't give up on this, you've written it really well so far and it has so much potential!

Good luck!
keysama morinozuka chapter 3 . 5/18/2015
update plpeas love this story
Junriel18 chapter 3 . 3/29/2015
Nice story, author! Hope you can fix your issues.. Update please!
DarkPurpleTomBoy chapter 3 . 3/18/2015
Omg I love this story so much please update I love this story!
My Hazel Eyes chapter 3 . 3/16/2015
Not gonna lie, Takashi/Haruhi is my favorite ship so it'd be awesome to see them end up together if you add in a romantic interest. Other than that, seeing the development of Haruhi's newfound abilities and seeing how the bonds of the club become stronger. Anyways, I can't wait to see what you come up with! Great start :)
8Cait8Cait8 chapter 3 . 2/20/2015
I would literally just do something like them trying to live life normally then enemies try to capture Haruhi or one of the others and their group breaks a little until they find the missing person
Person chapter 3 . 1/2/2015
This is really interesting and I would love to see more chapters, soon. I think you should explain each of the hosts powers and maybe have them slip up a few times and use them accidentally during hosting hours, or you could add a villain to the story.
Emerald Lylythia chapter 3 . 1/4/2015
Nice story, well it's a good start. Maybe you could explain how the members came to be elements in the next chapters ? Also explain how it has an effect on they every day life it has one.
Thanks for the story.
EasilyDistractedBookWorm chapter 3 . 1/2/2015
Wow, it lives! *Starts dancing*
Anywho, hmmmm... they could meet other elements? You could throw in some random villainous person out evil? Of course, fluff is always allowed as well! Everyone needs some fluff! I'm glad you updated though! Hope everything's going well for you!
slvrphoenx chapter 3 . 1/2/2015
i really like the 1st 2 chapters. I hope it becomes a Haruhi x Mori or Haruhi x Kyoya story. i have no real suggestions on the story but look forward to reading more of it.
SoulReaper067 chapter 3 . 1/2/2015
first, tell us all of the hosts' elements and then work attractions based on elements. but I don't like Haruhi with Hikaru or Tamaki. She can be with any of the others- but not those two.
other than that, just do whatever.
I love the story!
keep it going!
Iamofmanynames99 chapter 3 . 1/2/2015
Hey, why dont you have them talk about elemental circles!
I've read other fanfics based off of this general prompt and they were awesome, and I'm really excited to read more of yours!
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