|Reviews for Alterran Legacy|
| Guest chapter 20 . 6/9
fraking awesome like said really should think of making a longer version
| Guest chapter 10 . 6/9
fraking awesome like I said
| Guest chapter 8 . 6/9
this story is fraking awesome please make a longer version of it that world be insane love it so far
| enji-benjy chapter 20 . 3/28
Great story, just a shame it wasn't a little more detailed.
You need to watch your " though. You have some in the wrong place and most of them are missing entirely. You also need to include something to denote a scene change.
| enji-benjy chapter 10 . 3/28
You have missed out several ", not just in the chapter.
| enji-benjy chapter 7 . 3/28
At least that stupidity didn't last long. How was it supposed to work with their bond anyway? How did the fidelius break anyway?
| enji-benjy chapter 6 . 3/28
*sigh* and this was shaping up to be a great story. If they aren't properly back together in two chapters I'm out.
| katmom chapter 20 . 3/11
Thank you for sharing. This was a fun romp through the stars.
| Bad Wolf chapter 10 . 9/18/2015
Ok, so an example of needing more details and such... This is a pretty big one... When the hell did Harry absorb a repository? Don't get me wrong, I still love this story. It just sometimes seems way beyond AU and more in the realm of crack fic. So far, it seems like a brilliant outline. You could flesh this out to be about four times longer, giving it more depth and more pull on the reader. There have been sometimes when I wanted to stop reading because it got too crack like with what seemed to be a ton of missing info, such as the previously mentioned repository scene that seems to be missing. 50,000 words could easily turn into 200,000 words here. Still loving the general story tho.
| Bad Wolf chapter 4 . 9/17/2015
Love the story. Could you a bit more fleshing out as far as depth and details, and a bit of proofreading. But it's still a lovely story. The only thing that annoyed me really is in this chapter, talking about Harry needing to become a citizen. He MARRIED Sam. When you marry a US citizen, you become a US citizen. Cary on. :)
| serenityselena chapter 20 . 9/6/2015
fantastic story with very interesting twists...
loved reading it :)
| Noble Korhedron chapter 20 . 5/13/2015
Interesting, even if their attitudes are sometimes a little childish. ;-)
| Ori chapter 10 . 4/21/2015
The oath to keep silence in chapter 4 about SGC makes no sense in light of later chapters: it shows enough co-operation between magical and mundane law enforcement to expect an oath, which by the same token Harry could have just oblivated the officials unless they had magicals monitoring them, all of which is fairly junior level co-operation.
SGC being as important in the grand scheme as it is, should have enough assistance from the president, to at the very least make sure the complex is warded against magical if not also extraterrstial. Therefore Harry shouldn't be able to outright apperate into the complex unless he's already set with the wards or simply break through them.
Next we have Harry outright asked, by an army general no less, to go on a killing rampage, of American citizens and officials on American soil. USA is a democracy, thus he has absolutely no mandate to request such a thing unless he already have presidential approval, and then general Hammond should show it. The whole operation makes no sense from the very start: Hammond should have no knowledge of the fidelous charm, and if he does happen to know, then makes no sense to request not to share the secret with anyone when they can't break it in the first place, and they might need his help off-world in the meantime. As the president is in the know about the whole thing, he could outright deploy magical special forces. Even if he doesn't, Harry could have taken them prisoners via drought of the living death and thus later have them officially executed in military top secret trial with administration of veretersrum. Harry himself shows to be unreliable when he gives his word to keep his identity from everyone and break it on the same day no less, even if it makes no sense to have given it in the first place. He later give official warning about funding the NID, which is a legal organization that has illegal branches due to military espionage, and thus completely legal to fund. The warning could reveal magic to the world, if some bother to have a live camera feed, which they really should have if only to help each other reveal the means they are targeted with.
After showing such complete ruthlessness and disregard to laws the general does complete 180 when saying he must risk his best agents by putting every little detail in a report to his officials, as expected from him by law in chapter 10.
| StefanSchmiererderVielleser chapter 1 . 3/2/2015
You forgot for the entire story the DISCLAIMER! Did you do it on purpose or not? Stefan Schmierer
| biob1 chapter 6 . 2/19/2015
Good chapter but the drama,seems kind of rushed and unnecessary I mean if he was willing to trust her with the secret of the magical world I don't think he would be brow beat in to not telling her anything.