Reviews for glass that separates, strong as steel
charm13insomnia chapter 6 . 10/31/2013
such a sweet chapter with such an ominous end
James Birdsong chapter 5 . 8/4/2013
So good and so wonderful. Cool. Hooray!
deemama66 chapter 5 . 8/4/2013
I recently got back into xxxholic ... and i have to admit it IS one of my favirite anime and manga's
My favorite ova is the * rou* ..it explains so much ...it fills in the holes that were left ..
Annndd the adayume ...where yuko comes back in the form of a younger girl with her right eye missing ...only to have watanuki's right eye turn red the color of yuko's and domeki's other half returned ...

It's sad and teary and domeki more or less confesses to watanuki ..and he's getting married but its to the seer girl ..and i just turned into a puddle of goo

Watanuki has stopped time ..will remain in the shop forever while domeki ages ..

Sighs ... hangs head and gets teary ...
charm13insomnia chapter 5 . 8/2/2013
ha ha ha so cute
great chapter looking forwards to the next
Guest chapter 5 . 7/31/2013
Cookies 5529: Doumeki is so funny. Inside he's overflowing with excitement, but on the outside he's still barely smiling. And scaring harmless waiters. ;)
kittymko chapter 4 . 7/25/2013
i really like it you did a good job so far
James Birdsong chapter 4 . 7/5/2013
Groovy
theSardonyx chapter 4 . 6/30/2013
I liked the way you describe things in this story. They're very precise; that is, not too vague but not too detailed either. You give just enough leeway for your readers to imagine what is happening, what it is the characters were seeing and feeling.

There are some hings I noticed about your work though, that I'm particularly wary of. First is your spelling. It's "Himawari", not "Himaware". It's "chaperone" not "chaperon". It's easier to understand if your get the spellings right, and I know you're trying your best. Just remember, if you can't do it yourself, ask someone to beta your work.

Another thing, honey, don't forget your question marks. I noticed that when a character directly asks a question, you type in a comma instead of a question mark. That's wrong syntax, and it confuses some readers (like me).

Last, and most important of all, I think you're ailing through the story way too fast. The climax is already done in just four chapters! The narration was, for the most part, very sufficient, but the transition from one scene to another is bad. The story came and went too fast for me. It would have been better for the effect to add more cliffhangers or even some details to the storyline, for these create the mood or atmosphere of the story. In my opinion, it can also help in showing how Doumeki really loves Watanuki, why he would do everything to keep his beloved safe, and the despair and grief he must have felt when that vampire took his love away.

I'm still going to look forward to your updates. Whether you heed my opinions or not is entirely up to you since you're the one writing this story, but I did not say all that stuff to make you feel depressed. I'm actually hoping that my criticism would help you develop your writing skills so that next time I read your work, I won't have anything bad to say about it.

Write on..! Yuna
charm13insomnia chapter 4 . 6/25/2013
what a dramatic rescue
cant wait for the next chapter
crazyanimelover98 chapter 4 . 6/24/2013
Hmhm, I think this is my favorite chappy so far X3 I cant wait to read more!
Guest chapter 4 . 6/24/2013
Cookies5529:
_ you mean there's more?!
James Birdsong chapter 3 . 5/6/2013
Very nice and somewhat cool.
asian0music0lover chapter 3 . 5/4/2013
Omg that was fabulous! I was already hooked since the beginning! also the description was very eye catching. I would for you to continue this story and bring a new and fresh story to this site.
charm13insomnia chapter 3 . 5/3/2013
walkinh pa he's running as fast as he can
great chapter can't wait for the next chapter
crazyanimelover98 chapter 2 . 5/1/2013
Oh my grrr I love this story so much X3 I can't wait for the next chapter to be up so please update as soon as you can X3
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