|Reviews for Warrior Children|
| Yami Flo chapter 35 . 6/3/2007
This new version is far better than the previous one. Some situations are more clear and more developped, and it's nicer this way.
Great job, really.
| rowensage chapter 37 . 5/5/2006
Hi! me again! ok in this Chapter Wufei talks about how he saw Duo go all crazy in the youjaki, but Wufei didn't go to the youjaki. Only Duo and Heero did. I think you mention it again later in the story that Wufei saw Duo in crazy mode in the youjaki.
Just thought you'd like to know.
| rowensage chapter 7 . 3/22/2006
Hey, I am rereading your story and I noticed something. Now this isn't a flame, but constructive ceritisism. I really really really like your story. I've read my favorite parts several times over. However, there are many things in it that don't make sense. Much of it is time frame. For example, in "Imperfect Solider" ONe scene will say three weeks later such and such happened then you'll switch perspective and it will say the same thing had happened, but instead of it being three week that had passed it would be a few days. For example, You said Noin made Seiji go to the hospital to give her lunch 3 weeks after he came in Seiji's persepective, but when you switch to Noin's perspective she would say one week, now I read that chapter yesterday so I'm not sure if those are the exactly right (I mean the numbers) but I know the times that are said are different. Now these little things don't really nother me (though fixing them is quite simple) However when you compare this chapter to the previous knowledge we have of Seiji it's almost competely different. When Noin and Zechs are talking in Ch. 4 about Heero they say he snuck into the base then shot himself, then he escaped later from the hospital after Seiji healed him. Here you make it seem as if he had this huge fight in his gundam and it had been shot down and destroyed and that's how he got hurt. Don't you think Noin and Zechs would have mentioned the Gundam if it had been destoryed as it says here? They don't. In fact, I think they say the guards caught him on the computer getting information. He found out he had been caught and shot himself. Now I know that you are revising this story and therefore you could have just not gotten to this chapter yet, so then just consider this something to look out for when you get here _. But the sequencing trouble I've seen since Ch 1, and I know you redid that cause it used to be Touma coming home and finding Heero and Duo in his bed and getting angry at Qautra. They could easily be fixed if you just read through the whole story once. Again I really don't mean this as a flame. I've been a fan of your story since it was like on Ch 16 way back when you first wrote it. I don't know if your completely done revising but if you are, I'll be happy to see this new version of an old favorite of mine. _ thanks for your time
| crystal-chan chapter 41 . 6/23/2005
I love this story!
I almost cried several times whilst reading it!
Im so glad you finished it, and I liked the ending. That usually doesn't happen with me... hehe.
| rowensage chapter 41 . 12/27/2004
hey love your story! I've read it multipule times. I just wish you would have gone back to the first chapter at the end. You know? Back when Touma went to visit Qautra and he woke everyone up? I would have liked to see what happened in the morning. _ but other than that, It rocked.
| DarkYoaiFox chapter 41 . 8/30/2004
Hey! Your story is perfect! I love it! I've read it twice now, and I still can't stop! Could you make a sequil? Pretty please? If not, oh well, I'm not going to hate you. Ja Matta Ne. :D
| AstarothTheFallen chapter 1 . 7/27/2004
Wow. . . so sad. Poor Touma!
Astaroth The Fallen
| Dosu chapter 41 . 5/1/2004
Now! Lets have a squeal! Amazing and wonderful. And now the reviews have given justic to this story.
| Dosu chapter 40 . 5/1/2004
What a happy ending. Black Inferno even! A it's a boy!
| Dosu chapter 38 . 5/1/2004
Oh poor Noin. Rajua is so cute. _ And good for Duo! More yaoi!
| Dosu chapter 37 . 5/1/2004
Ew! I loved it!
| Dosu chapter 36 . 5/1/2004
This is my fave chapter. I keep reading it over and over.
| Dosu chapter 35 . 5/1/2004
Ha! I loved the begging with Noin in Nasties room. Hehe.
| Dosu chapter 34 . 5/1/2004
O dear. *Gasp* Anubuis and Noin! Yes.
| Dosu chapter 31 . 5/1/2004
Kay is hte cutess little girl I have ever seen. Aw.