|Reviews for A Pyrrhic Victory|
| the Dreamer chapter 18 . 4/8
I really loved your story until you progressed too much into the relationships. Percy and Annabeth had questions to ask each other and Annabeth doesn't know Grover. She also didn't mention the abuse or other topics Percy mentioned while he was drugged and looked like a blond. You also skipped the training, which I was looking forward to after the cliffhanger about becoming a great swordsman, and totally confused everyone. Now Percy and Annabeth's mother know about the Olympians and the readers have little clue. In addition, Annabeth had no idea about the Olympians and would be confused upon hearing the term "son of the sea". Not just percabeth, but Thalia and Luke also progressed too quickly. Thalia can't be "charmed by his smile" if she is still hurt about his disappearance which US READERS don't know about. You leave out too information and progress too quickly. I had loved the story, but there is too much I'd like to change and cannot keep reading. Please rewrite and don't take this as a negative comment. Thank you and I hope to see more stories.
| Guest chapter 14 . 2/10
Heh, dying whale noises.
| zap chapter 7 . 1/27
interesting line breaks
also, the XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXLINEBREAKXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX
thing makes the "X"s look slightly different sizes
| SMHeveryday chapter 15 . 1/6
How can I possibly express the happiness I get while reading your fanfiction? :) Although during the start of the story it was a bit boring and dragging, I really ADORE the way you stuck with the original thing (you know, Bianca's death and Nico being angry with Percy, and the Olympians thingy). This chapter ended exceptionally well and I love you for giving me a good fanfiction to read :)
| TideNightwalker chapter 23 . 1/1
I can't wait! This was a great story. May the odds be ever in your favor. What up! Hunger Games reference! (Who knows who says that? :))
| jasongraceless chapter 25 . 12/31/2014
OH MY GOD YESSS IM SO EXCITED I'M READING IT FIRST THING TOMORROW
| RemainsoftheSphinx chapter 18 . 12/22/2014
*Tries hard not to laugh* Umm... I think you meant to use the word assess, earlier... you spelled it 'asses' and that, my fine writing friend, is ass in the plural. Just thought you ought to know...
By the way: loving the story, very... suspenseful.
| McStephSM chapter 1 . 10/19/2014
Nice plot F̶̲̥̅̊o̶̲̥̅̊я̩ a fic
| McStephM chapter 23 . 10/8/2014
Good story so far...nice plot too
| yoitsyourstruly chapter 23 . 7/22/2014
Can i just cry? I just want to cry so hard right now. The sequel is to far away. Way to far away. I loved this story and waiting for this is like reading the Mark of Athena and having to wait forever to read House of Hades and we all know how awful that was. I can't wait to read the sequel! It will be the most amazing thing to happen on fanfiction when you finally post it. Thanks for the great read.
| jasongraceless chapter 23 . 6/30/2014
ARE YOU SERIOUS
THATS LIKE, AFTER BLOOD OF OLYMPUS COMES OUT
I NEED TO KNOW ABOUT THE NEW PERCY
IM ACTUALLY CRYING
THE PROBLEM IS, I ALWAYS FORGET ABOUT OLD STORIES BECAUSE I READ LIKE TEN STORIES A WEEK
SO BY THE TIME THE SEQUEL COMES OUT I'LL HAVE AMNESIA
UGHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH IM DYING SO HARD RIGHT NOW THAT MAKES NO SENSE BUT ASDSADASDASDSAFDFDSFSDFSDFDSFSD
I READ ALL OF THIS IN ONE DAY AND THAT MAKES IT WORSE BECAUSE IM NOT USED TO WAITING FOR UPDATES ON THIS STORY
CAN WE HAVE A PREVIEW PLEASE PRETTY PLEASE PLEASE PRETTY PRETTY PLEASE
I LOVED THIS STORY
I CRIED AND LAUGHED SO MANY TIMES
IM CRYING AGAIN
| MMM chapter 14 . 6/30/2014
you made me literally start crying when percy was hurting annabeth's feelings
this is great so far!
| Violet Paraiba chapter 22 . 6/28/2014
Okay, i read this all in a few hours, i spent those few hours mostly crying. And damn, you just left me hanging, LIKE I CANT WAIT 'TIL 01/1 I'M GONNA GO INSANE
okay i'm done.
have a nice day.
| Guest chapter 23 . 6/27/2014
You lied. When is the sequel coming?
| Kate chapter 22 . 6/23/2014
I'm soooooo confused... How is Thalia... And Sally...what?! And you can't just leave us hanging about what happened to Percy! Ugh! January is way to long to wait to find out ;( I really hope you reveal more on your Tumblr page, because I think my brain might implode if I don't get more information soon. I loved your story sooooo much- until like the last 5 lines, but still! Start that's equal ASAP!