|Reviews for Mechanic|
| twintogepi chapter 1 . 5/31
I like your stories. What I've read of them so far. Could I offer a little constructive criticism? Or maybe I should call it "friendly advice." I believe that you've been using run-on sentences.
For example, in this paragraph, you only have 2 sentences.: "You drove my car?" Seto asked and his voice is layered with dislike for this, even though he's mostly doing so to avoid making it obvious that the thought of the attractive and still half naked dirty mechanic behind the wheel of his car is definitely a huge turn on for the usually cold and level headed CEO.
Rember to keep your thoughts separate.
Anyhow, other than that I think your stories are good.
Please don't hate me. I know from reading one of your other stories that you hate people who complain about grammar and such. Though I am a self-proclaimed "grammar-nazi".
Please don't think of this as a "bad review".
I'll leave you with this: I sincerely hope you continue to write. Follow your dreams. Always. -Twintogepi
| Cagholino chapter 1 . 1/16/2015
Please write a sequel, I beg of you! This was to freaking awesome to be a one shot! Ill do whatever I have to in order to talk you in to a sequel! I mean a sexy Joey machine is far to go to pass up! Lol
| Hibary-Hiwatari chapter 1 . 9/17/2014
Smexy fic is SMEXY!
AND I LOVE IT, TOO!
Ahh... You really are awesome :'D
| nchai001 chapter 1 . 6/28/2013
Haha so sexy! Sex on a car!
| KeiMaxwell chapter 1 . 4/25/2013
Hmm, I liked this! x3 I can totally see this happening, although maybe without the tiny, lovey-dovey undertone at the end there, but that's still okay. Lovely oneshot!
| wishfulliving89 chapter 1 . 3/25/2013
love the story. very well written. so cant wait for the next chapter.
| Shaliza's Scarab chapter 1 . 3/4/2013
I couldn't stop laughing at Joey calling Seto's car his kitten!
Thank you for this story. I love how you portray their relationship and you always accomplish it in refreshing and exciting ways - I can't find the right words to express how much I enjoy (re-)reading your stories :)
| noffermans chapter 1 . 3/3/2013
| jj chapter 1 . 3/1/2013
| Angel Dove1 chapter 1 . 3/1/2013
I loved it! I'd be right there with Kaiba drooling over Jounouchi. I especially loved Jou's nickname for Kaiba's car.
| Guest chapter 1 . 2/28/2013
haha... nice story.. luv ur writing style.
| BrowneyedShamer chapter 1 . 2/28/2013
Oh my gods! That was adorable! I loved loved loved how seeing Joey dirty turned seto on! Hehehe and the 'test driving of the car' on the car... Priceless! As always well written and flows easily! I want to see more but it's a great stand alone one-shot!
My favorite part was when seto said Joey needed a shower before coming into bed... How like him! You keep the character realistic and believeable while weaving a wonderful story!
Kudos 11/10 stars!
Oh and sorry I've been absent but I'm back yeah sooo
#1 fan... Even when not here!
| dancing elf chapter 1 . 2/28/2013
lots of fun
enjoyed it very much :)
| Violet-Eclipse chapter 1 . 2/27/2013
Awesome story sweetie :)