|Reviews for Where Roads Converge|
| Renee Aubin chapter 23 . 1/16
One of the saddest thoughts in any language: "I'm sorry I didn't try to find you earlier, Molly. I thought I had time…" Of course he didn’t have the means anyway. “I used to fantasise about finding you… about knocking on your door, and seeing that big, beautiful smile.” Sniffle.
But in a way this is a good thing: ‘despite the complete reversal of fortune he had experienced, he had cried more in the last three months than in the whole of his life prior to this point.’ He’s chipping the formerly necessary armor off his heart.
‘As a homeless teenager, it was his experience that the British middle-classes were the least generous and the most contemptuous when it came to those who lived on the very margins of society.’ Nasty. And probably true.
I enjoyed this use of the Maggie and Alastair names from canon. Let’s see, Marcus would have been Maggie’s brother?
I hadn’t thought about this but of course Molly would have seen it: “Mum was right. She always said you'd turn into a stunner”.
Aww, Molly “felt so bad for leaving you and your mum when my brother died, but she just couldn't cope with staying in the house after that…” And later, “her one big regret was losing touch with you”.
How sweet for Maggie to hear this: "They were the best part of my childhood, Maggie, I want you to know that. If it hadn't been for them… well, I don't know what would have become of me.”
A lovely bottom line: ‘Sad as he was at Molly's passing, it seemed that he had, nevertheless, gained a new family…’ Because aside from Bella, he really isn’t tethered to anyone else in the world!
Yummy: ‘Bella watched him as he continued to cut the grass, whilst making his way towards her.
It was a sight worth taking the time to enjoy.’
And ‘She wondered if she would ever stop being excited by the mere presence of this beautiful man.’ Lucky for both of them.
"It's okay, babe, I know what I wanna do.” [about his mother’s ashes] Wonderful – for so long he had no choices at all. Lovely memory of the childhood trip with his mother and Marcus and especially the kite.
Bella saw ‘a wistfulness that spoke of fond memories, minus the dark and heart-wrenching sorrow which had previously been Edward's constant companion.’ Thank goodness.
Oh gosh, what a weight for a kid to carry: “I'm sorry I couldn't save you, but I hope you're at peace now."
Very sniffly, but a happy outcome.
| venure chapter 25 . 1/5
Thank you for sharing you fabulous story with us. It was so very well written - an absolute pleasure to read. Thanks again!
| Renee Aubin chapter 22 . 1/3
Nice: ‘even if he decided to leave her at some point in the future, she could never regret it. She would rather have a few short months or years with Edward, than to never have known what it was like to love, and be loved by him.’
Delightful New Year’s early morning lovemaking – perfect way to start another year!
Yaay: ‘the Judge apparently took a dim view of defendants who wasted taxpayers' money by claiming innocence in the face of overwhelming evidence to the contrary.’ I wish more judges thought that way.
Ugh, ‘The look of pure hatred on [Jake’s] face’ – of course his mess is Bella’s fault, not his.
Delicious: ‘the slow smile which never failed to disarm her…’
Odd – Edward’s drinking beer out of a Coke can? Or maybe he’s drinking one in each hand?
Satisfying that both Jake and Paul have been taken care of, but more than balanced by the sadness of Molly’s death. It must feel like the last tie to Edward’s previous life. So sad: ‘When they made love, Bella was conscious of a kind of desperate need in him that hadn't been present since they had first got together. Sometimes, he would collapse on top of her and weep uncontrollably…’
Understandable that he had no idea how to deal with the solicitor’s request – having an adult around can be handy! And then good for her, when he plans to make his way to Manchester on his own, as if she’s not even in his life: “I can't believe you would go all that way without me."
Whew, this is going to be an emotional trip!
| Renee Aubin chapter 21 . 12/25/2013
‘Being woken by him was never less than a delight…’ Yeah, that would definitely change one’s mind about morning sex!
Good statement of the double-edged sword: ‘He'd gone from literally having nothing, to having everything … he could barely bring himself to imagine his life without her. … the excruciating pain he would suffer, should he lose Bella.’ But we can’t let that fear stop us, can we?
Lovely progress for both of them: ‘Following years of keeping his emotions tightly reined in, it was a revelation to open himself fully to another person. … he could see that after struggling with her own insecurities, Bella was finally throwing off the shackles of Jake's negative and destructive influence.’
So creepy, and so typical of the initial charm of abusers: ‘Jake's initial enthusiasm and support for her work was just a means to draw her in, before he set about destroying her confidence in order to control her.’
Hmm, a touchy subject: ‘When Bella had come into the kitchen to get some snacks, he had questioned her about it, not entirely able to hide his disappointment that she had shared so much about his past [with Peter and Charlotte].’ But eventually ‘he realised he was glad he wouldn't have to pretend with her or Peter.’
A wonderful use of Bella’s money: Peter ‘had been able to get back some of his mobility, and it had gone a long way towards lifting the depression…’ Aww, Edward thinks ‘It was just one more piece of evidence—if, indeed, it was needed—that Bella was an angel.’
Mmmm – Dior Homme! I have yet to get a whiff of it. I never thought of that, though – an artificial fragrance would definitely interfere in the kitchen.
Oh, a guitar! Perfect. The bracelet sounds beautiful, too.
Your paragraph summarizing what Edward’s life had been like before Bella almost brought tears to my eyes. ‘He had been afraid many times, and had often despaired. He had lost everyone he had ever cared about…’ Shudder.
‘But now, with this incredible and unbelievably thoughtful gift, he felt the floodgates finally open…’ He really needed that release – and her acceptance of it.
OMG, he’s singing “In My Life”, one of my favorites, and such a great fit for this Edward! (Wouldn’t I love to hear Rob do that song… at least I hope I would )
| Edward's my obsession1971 chapter 13 . 12/24/2013
I'm LOVING your story. Sorry, with the holidays and prep I haven't had a chance to review like I normally do. I'm reading bits here and there, like now at 3am. Thank you for giving this southern US gal the definition on your proper English wording. Lol. Some I know, some I can decipher within context, and some have me asking WTF does that mean! Lol. Not always, but sometimes I just love reading Edward when he's not the "rich, successful, sex god" like you've done so beautifully. Well done. Merry Christmas to you and yours.
| Renee Aubin chapter 20 . 12/20/2013
This juxtaposition from Jake is SO revealing:
"BELLA! Bella, I love you… why are you doing this? You know I didn't mean to hurt you… we can work this out!"
followed quickly by "You fucking bitch, you think you can humiliate me like this and get away with it?"
Not hard to guess which one he really means.
Ah, so Edward’s experience living on the street pays off:
Jake ‘had a good two inches and fifty pounds on Edward and, despite being nearly forty, he prided himself on being in superb physical condition. He had absolutely no doubt he could take down this skinny kid… However, … he had no idea what real fighting was all about.’
I can’t tell you how relieved I was to read that paragraph! And then ‘The whole episode was over in less than thirty seconds.’ Yaay! It's satisfying that ‘Jake's drunken and aggressive behaviour’ contributed to his arrest.
It’s promising that Bella agrees to press charges. Of course she’s absolutely right, but it seems that women so rarely fight back against men who have repeatedly assaulted them.
From Alice: "Besides, this town has never seen so much excitement—people will be talking about this for weeks… months… years, even.” No doubt true.
From Bella: “I've had a lot worse." Never a good thing to hear!
Great speech from Rosalie – she makes a good point about now having grounds for a restraining order. And of course “your sexy as fuck new boyfriend” and “Edward is clearly a lot more than just a pretty face”. Excellent that afterwards Edward “was now blushing to his roots”.
I laughed out loud at Esme’s unexpected response to Rosalie’s hope for Jake’s future:
"Oh, well, yes, that is what I thought. And I have to agree, that scenario would be remarkably satisfying."
Hmm, didn’t see this coming, from Edward: “I've never felt so capable of murder in my life, not even with Paul or Tanya's pimp. It fucking scared me."
He needs her confidence in his good heart.
Nice: ‘If he had been confident in the kitchen before, he was now master of his environment…’
Good little insight: ‘Bella bit back tears, while Rose hid her emotions by ribbing Bella about being a wuss.’
Wow, Edward was on Bella’s “my love” like a duck on a June bug (an American expression): "Am I?"
And then he’s finally free to let it out himself!
I love the way he (you) puts this: if “I ever wanted to move on from CQ, then I'd hope you would support me and… well, would it be impossible for you to come with me? … you're my home, Bella. You always will be… if that's what you want?" How could she resist? (Not that she wants to!)
Thank goodness that despite a few verbal detours that frightened both of them, they’re now on the same page. Makes sense: ‘they took their time to rediscover what they thought they were in danger of losing.’
Sigh, a perfect concluding paragraph!
| Renee Aubin chapter 19 . 12/13/2013
Yeah, that’s a vexing contradiction, being glad to be included in Bella’s family, but wishing they had those few days off to themselves. Especially problematic when you’re building a career and insanely busy. This is a first for Edward, too, working this hard and this steadily.
Nice observations on Carlisle’s style of running the kitchen. ‘…the best chefs maintained order by being firm but fair, treating their staff with respect and consideration, and always working as hard, if not harder, than those around them.’ Not surprising really that ‘one or two of the staff railed against kitchen discipline’ – given that Carlisle deliberately recruited people who didn’t necessarily have a background in commercial kitchens, he probably expected this.
‘Alice was supremely organised’, thank goodness. Someone grounded and calm in the middle of all this activity. Snicker, we usually think of Alice as being the cyclone, so this is a nice change! And yet she gets the results we do expect from Alice: ‘Bella was astonished at the interest the little local exhibition had garnered’.
Kind of fun that Bella gets to really dress up for this occasion. And later when we see Edward, whoa! No wonder they didn’t want to let him leave the restaurant. Beautifully done description of their first sight of each other and the way they orbit around each other all evening.
‘The centrepiece, in particular, had come from a place in her heart, and she found herself second-guessing her decision to exhibit it.’ Intriguing! And later, what a lovely reveal of the subject. Sweet thought from Edward: ‘How he managed to stop the words pouring forth he would never know…’
Funny image: Bella 'needed to chill and not flap about like a startled goose all night'.
Surprising, but then not really. ‘Edward seldom went into Bella's studio—it was her personal space, and he didn't feel comfortable invading it. He had therefore seen none of her work until this moment.’ He is very careful not to push too far too quickly. So what a lovely surprise for him to see the exhibition.
So fun that Edward thought to locate and invite Rose! Good line, Bella to Emmett: “you look like that rarity in life, a man who can handle Rose Hale." Rose gets a great line too: “who knew you were such a talented little trollop?"
Terrific that Edward now enjoys the company of two sets of friends, Alice & Jasper, plus Carlisle & Esme.
Lovely observation from Carmen, too: "You're good for her, Edward. I've never seen her so happy, nor so creative. I don't know what you're doing… well, I can take a pretty good guess, but whatever it is, I hope you keep doing it…"
And later: “she's found her muse." Yes, exactly.
Oh crap, and bringing us back to the worries at the top of the chapter, Jake shows up to spoil the party. Sigh.
| Renee Aubin chapter 18 . 12/7/2013
Wow: ‘the imposing edifice of the BBC's Broadcasting House. The stunning art-deco building, shaped like the stern of a great ocean liner in a sea of traffic…’ Thanks for that bit of local color. And later an office window view from St. Paul’s to the Gherkin.
Oooh, ‘Foyle's, once the world's largest bookstore, with more than 30 miles of shelving…’ I love bookstores! When I visited The Strand in Manhattan, I loved it of course (after all, Tyler Hawkins worked there), but didn’t think it was better than our beloved Powell’s Books in Portland OR.
That’s a nice touch that her editor knew her well enough to be concerned about her history with Jacob. And then he handles the real Jake with aplomb!
Fun: ‘Bella grinned with delight, but didn't enlighten him as to exactly what—or who—was currently inspiring her writing.’
A good measure of how Bella has settled into her new home: ‘It was the longest she'd been away since moving in and she was a little surprised at how emotional she felt about being back.’ How funny to find Edward’s things occupying every surface in the house – and I love that she doesn’t get annoyed. Oh, that was considerate of her to mark his place in each open cookbook before stacking them all up.
Smile, it seems right in character for him to simply drop his bike in the driveway when he realizes Bella’s home.
Sweet that he’s still hesitating to say he loves her. I have to think that eventually he’ll just blurt it out, possibly at an inconvenient time!
It made me sniffle that she’s worried that he wasn’t sleeping because of nightmares while she was gone. Which we later learn is exactly what happened!
Yummy loving the next morning. Nice: ‘He was no longer a skinny, undernourished kid. He was a strong, well-built man. The thought made her shiver with pleasure.’ And she gets busted "ogling his arse".
Hmm, so they both choose to hold back something important, his nightmares and her run-in with Jake. Ominous last sentence!
| Renee Aubin chapter 17 . 12/4/2013
This truly made me laugh out loud: ‘"So, talking of sticky treats… you and Edward?" Alice said…’
Fun, when Alice hears their story: ‘“Oh, Bella, you could write a book about it… oh, oh, you actually could write a book about it," she exclaimed gleefully...’
Being folded into the staff at the restaurant: “I know this sounds daft, but it makes me feel like I'm a real person… like I'm part of the world at last… that I'm not invisible anymore…” Aww.
Yummy description of his haircut. ‘…tapering it to a sleek 'duck's arse' at the nape of his neck.
She was keen to ensure that she still had something to hang onto during the throes of the very considerable passion Edward aroused in her.’ Definitely.
And the final result: ‘Oh crap… like he needed to be any sexier.’ Nice: ‘It occurred to Bella that, once the restaurant opened, it wouldn't just be the food that brought in the customers.’ Damned right!
‘They explored one another with dedication and wonder, each constantly seeking out new ways to please the other.’ Are you familiar with columnist Dan Savage’s idea of ‘GGG’? Partners should be “good” (at what they do), “giving”, and “game” (for anything that pleases their partner). Sounds like E&B qualify!
Whoa – welcome home, Bella! And he’s supposed to go back to work after that?
Ha, ha, I’ve never heard this expression: “He's been like a dog with two dicks ever since he got back." Can’t quite wrap my mind around what it means!
Charming interactions between Bella, Esme and Carlisle. It's so good to see Edward's talent and hard work appreciated.
Silly girl: ‘…a moment of slithering, dark fear. If Edward did as well as Carlisle expected him to, he could well decide to move on some time in the not-too-distant future.’ To another restaurant, maybe, but not from her!
But this is true: ‘He was so young, with a world of possibilities before him.’ Finally.
| Renee Aubin chapter 16 . 11/28/2013
A charming – and hot – first time for these two. I especially liked how Bella recognized what she wanted and went after it.
What a contrast: ‘Such inspection from Jake had always made her feel uncomfortable, his slight sneer bringing all her insecurities to the fore. No such feelings plagued her now, as she saw only wanton, barely-controlled lust in Edward's greedy gaze.’
I giggled when after ‘the most powerful orgasm she'd ever experienced’ he asks her where the condoms are and she can’t quite manage to be coherent. ‘Despite his need, Edward couldn't help grinning at her…’ Yeah, he’s justifiably proud of himself!
‘She thought it was beautiful.
She thought he was beautiful.
And, unlike any man before him, he made her feel beautiful.’
And ‘However, it seemed her expectations were about to be well and truly exceeded.’
Smile: ‘…he buried his face in her neck, lest he tell her he loved her.’ Then a moment later: ‘Collapsing on top of Bella, Edward could feel the sting of tears, his heart full to bursting.’ I’m on the verge of a sniffle.
Good observation: ‘…she had confused [Jake’s] possessiveness for devotion, and her own gratitude for love.’ Many women have to learn the hard way, the difference between possessiveness and devotion.
Fun moment when he comes into the bedroom with a tray full of breakfast, so she immediately hops back into bed as if she’d never gotten up. And how delightful: ‘they made good progress on preparing the surfaces for decorating, despite frequent pauses to kiss and make out.’ I think I’m jealous.
It’s good that their both well aware of Edward’s need to prove himself. ‘I can be more than just a guy who got lucky.’ Yes, he can. I’m glad too that he admits to her that when she said she was going to London, he was afraid she was leaving him behind. Yaay, today he has no trouble believing her reassurances. Progress!
| grandn chapter 25 . 11/28/2013
Good story. Thanks for your hard work.
| love2readtwilght chapter 25 . 11/25/2013
Fantastic story! Excellent original plotline! Thanks for sharing!
| miadiekat chapter 25 . 11/24/2013
thank you for this amazing story. i loved it so much. now i am going to read your other story. thanks again.
| Renee Aubin chapter 15 . 11/21/2013
This chapter is so well done, reflecting each one’s uncertainty about what the other really wants. They are both so good at talking themselves out of any possibility that they could be attractive to the other. They both do a lot of this: ‘She watched him anxiously, wondering what the hell was going on inside his head.’ I guess that’s kind of built into the mating dance.
For instance, ‘He knew he was acting like a petulant schoolboy…’ when Bella kept doing errand after errand. Snicker. But later in the day he ratchets that up to a capital offense and is reduced to hoping ‘that they could continue on in the way they had before he had so recklessly and thoughtlessly abused his position in Bella's life.’
And on her end, ‘Much as Bella wanted Edward—and she really, really wanted him—she couldn't help but think that he would find her wanting.’ Aww, women are so very critical of themselves.
There’s something very predatory about this: ‘Bella was jolted out of her reverie when she saw Edward move. She was frozen in place as he sauntered towards her, immobilised by his watchful gaze.’ There are some men who truly freeze me in my tracks just by sauntering across the room.
Bella’s phone conversation with Carmen made me smile: “I'm even writing again …. Yeah, I know, it's going really well. I think it must be this place—it's good for me..” Yeah, this place. That’s not all!
And yaay, she finally asks: "Oh, Edward. What is going on in that head of yours?" And even more directly, she eventually just kisses him. Misunderstandings all cleared up now! Nice: ‘He looked up at her, eyes wide, and Bella's heart melted at the warring emotions she saw there—surprise, relief, hope and, most gratifying of all, desire.’
| GeminiGirl437 chapter 25 . 11/12/2013
Loved the story! It's amazing what a difference one small decision can make. They really needed to find each other. Loved your Alice and Rose. Always enjoy reading English writers and thanks for the clarifications. Never knew how crude "bollocks" was!
Thank you for entertaining us all with your beautiful talent.