Reviews for The Last Straw - Oneshot
ec-direwolf chapter 1 . 3/14
really good
FlightyDuck chapter 1 . 8/31/2017
Wow! Really liked this snapshot of Dumbledore's past, especially for the motivation it provides for him to call out Grindelwald. Great work!
Guest chapter 1 . 9/2/2016
Oo this is good. Especially the canary screaming part.
FromageFondue chapter 1 . 1/26/2016
Excellent, excellent story. This is, without doubt, one of the best portrayals of Dumbledore I've seen. Reading this story was truly a pleasure for me.

I loved your characterization of Dumbledore. The mix of ruthlessness and kindness was spot on. I also appreciate that you left small details throughout the story that hint to Dumbledore's canon personality - his humor, his observance, his politeness, etc. These things made me think that this was an extension of canon Dumbledore, not just a fanfiction portrayal of him.

And of course, badass Dumbledore is such a joy to read. Showing politeness and serenity right after an assassination attempt makes Dumbledore classy as hell (as he should be).

Just one small thing that I noticed:

He continued talking, and his voice was sad as his thin, gnarly fingers caressed her cheek "Why you, my dear child? Why must he toy with the lives of others so?"

I believe there needs to be a period after the word "cheek". I may be wrong (I'm not a native speaker or a good writer), but I thought you may want to look at it.

Anyways, incredible work! I appreciate the time and effort you put into writing this story. Now, I'm going to go ahead and share this on several other sites, since a great story like this deserves more attention. Thank you for sharing this wonderful piece of writing.
Danny Bailey chapter 1 . 11/29/2015
Oooh, this was great! I love powerful Dumbledore. I really liked the way you incorporated German into the fic as well. (I don't speak any German, so if you made up German-sounding nonsense words, don't judge me for my ignorance please!) I would absolutely love to see more of this characterization of Dumbledore. Very compelling.
Starfox5 chapter 1 . 11/29/2015
Good, short story illustrating just how much of a wizard Dumbledore was, back in the day. I loved the way he foiled her plan.
Blazinghand chapter 1 . 7/15/2015
I liked the decision Albus made, and the way his power is written.
Jaal Ama Darav chapter 1 . 12/18/2014
Interesting story.

And the transformation into a bird sounds and looks really painful.
jdg0l1n chapter 1 . 11/3/2014
That was, well 'awesome' works.
Lucillia chapter 1 . 6/8/2014
That was...whoa.
Fullmetal11791 chapter 1 . 2/24/2014
Very cool. Assuming that human transfiguration is very difficult in this story, so she's gonna be stuck like that.
Guest chapter 1 . 9/13/2013
Really great one shot that leaves you wanting more. Love it
MrRobertsIII chapter 1 . 9/3/2013
SomeGuyFawkes chapter 1 . 6/20/2013
Interesting. I liked this glimpse of Dumbledore at the top of his game.
invinoveri chapter 1 . 6/18/2013
Don't f with Dumbledore! Nice.
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