|Reviews for Harry Potter: Life of a Ninja|
| DreigoththeVampireGod chapter 7 . 7/1
Kimimaru's 'bone thingy' is called Dead Bone Pulse
| xxMockingbirdxxx chapter 6 . 6/28
ha wouldn't be interesting if tom survived and ended up with the snakes, thus an eventual meeting with orochimaru
| Marz1 chapter 1 . 6/24
| Kai19 chapter 2 . 6/7
I just realized as I reread this... they're team 4. That should be man omen for them. If I remember right, the number 4 is bad luck in Japanese culture, as the word for it, "shi", is also the word for death. Foreshadowing!
| Guest chapter 5 . 5/31
Ningyo means merman!
| Kiara.Queen.of.Kaos chapter 13 . 5/25
Awesome story. Pleas update.
| Kiara.Queen.of.Kaos chapter 3 . 5/25
Awesome chapter of and awesome story. The fireflys are awesome and I can already see a downside. In order to be used they must die.
| depressedchildren chapter 13 . 3/12
Very interesting premise and you've done a good job with characterization and fighting. I really feel like Harry ought to be in a coma right now from chakra exhaustion but...eh. Other concern, they are only two days in and they have five more to go, and they are all really weak right now, plus Keika could still fall into a critical condition even if she is "stabilized" (a fever or infection could put her in a serious condition again). I feel like the leaf nin are all really screwed right now, and it doesn't sound like they have too many hiding options especially with both Mist and Rock after them on this island.
As far as falling into the regretful patriarchal depictions and characterizations of women and their abilities, if that's all we see it's hard not falling into it. We may have a critical eye when watching or seeing such patterns, but because strong female characters are so rare, it can be hard to write them in. (you know...the whole not having anything there to base strong females off of, and thus we use what is most familiar, which here means the typical patriarchal bs)
Anyways, looking forward to where this will go; although, it seems highly unlikely anyone from Leaf will make it to the final round because it looks like it will be a miracle if they can even survive to the last day. [the follow are ramblings about this] I could buy Kotesu going onto the third round because he has his matching token, but the other three? unless kiri or rock just foolishly left their tokens just hanging around, which would be really lame, it is just too stacked against Leaf for all of them to pass on to the final round with their present exhaustion and injuries.
But you are the author and you've been pretty practical thus far, so use your judgment and go where you know your story needs to go. Again, I am enjoying it thus far, and will continue to enjoy it regardless of how these exams end.
| Daikuro chapter 13 . 3/1
OKay, I don't know about you, but a kid who isn't even eleven doesn't have the necessary hormones to feel sexually attracted to anyone.
He can be curious, consider someone pretty or beautyful at a superficial level and so on.
He CAN'T feel sexually attracted or fall in love- not emotionally and mentally mature enough, shinobi or not. He can have a superficial- or not so superficial CRUSH.
So be careful what you write, please don't make the error of pairing Hari with someone, or God forbid, give him a harem, before he hits puberty.
I have a little brother around Hari's age and believe me, kids at that age can only be cute, pretty and so on...and they are still in the" girls have cooties" stage.
Just don't get offended at this, but Keika's kiss and Hari's groping of Kurotsuchi...they kinda upset me.
Anyway,don't take it too quick in this department,sloppiness when it comes to romance can ruin a story.
If you listen to my advice or not is your business, but please, no serious action between immature(they still have some development to do) prepubescent characters.
It's down right creepy-here I am speaking as an older sister, so others might believe otherwise.
If you don't understand what I'm speaking about, search pictures with 10 years you immagine any of them doing anything like kissing?Yeah, thought so.
Anyway, sorry for the rant. It's just that I like your story and I wanted to make sure that you don't make the error many authors have done.
When writing a character it is easy to forget their actual age and immagine them as someone closer to our age...I've seen this in some fics in which Naruto sleeps with his harem and he isn't even twelve-scarred me for life those, to this day I regret reading enough to understand what they were doing.
Please don't rush this.I don't say you would do something like the above,just that you are in too much of a hurry with the...romancing part.
Otherwise...yours is an original idea,one that actually makes sense, and I quite like your fic, especially the depth of your characters and the strong females-they are very rare indeed.
PS-sometimes my reviews and PMs get mutilated-in case this happens again,I hope you understand the gist of things.
| ZabuzasGirl chapter 1 . 2/4
Update immediately, please!
| MattKennedy chapter 13 . 1/23
So I really liked the start of the story, and think you've got a great idea with Shisui as their teacher. However, I think things kinda became less awesome in the later chapters. Love the humor with the crows though. :)
| DarkViolet7258 chapter 13 . 12/29/2014
Kurotsuchi is quite trigger happy
| Guest chapter 3 . 11/27/2014
It wouldn't have taken away from the fact of their first kills in fact with Haringey it would have increased it bbecause shadow clones pass on the memories once they have been dispersed so in effect he would have gotten the first kills multiplied because from each clones point of view it was their first or second if you counted the leaders first kill so once he heleased the clones it would have all piled on him at once the memories of his first kill multiplied
| Elfin69 chapter 1 . 11/7/2014
Hopefully Harry will not be as self sacrificing as Dumbledore hopes and that Dumbledore will learn how bad it will be that Harry is a Ninja.
| sierra.steinbrecher chapter 4 . 10/26/2014
I like that their first C-rank wasn't the typical "cursed mission". I would have liked a peak at their psychology sessions. This mission's getting interesting!