|Reviews for Elemental Darkness|
| ProuDragoNight chapter 15 . 2/14
Glad that no one got hurt. I hope everything turns out okay
| Loneshadow117 chapter 15 . 2/13
I'm glad everyone's all right then. Hopefully they'll be caught eventually, and maybe you'll get everything back.
| wolfartist117 chapter 15 . 2/13
...damn... was not expecting that... And yeah fortunate that no one was seriously injured. Hope that those guys eventually get caught
| coincidencless chapter 15 . 2/13
Yeesh, stolen! I am overjoyed that you and your family is alright; I hope you take measures to prevent such a thing from happening again.
| DarkflowerofTc chapter 14 . 2/11
| ProuDragoNight chapter 14 . 2/11
Great story so far can't wait for the next chap update soon
| Unit Omicron chapter 14 . 12/15/2013
You updated. That's something I didn't expect to say. XD
Loved this chapter. Maybe it's because of my deprivation from this story for so long, but it was definitely enjoyable to read. Nice to see an update, either way.
I really don't have much to say besides that. Great work!
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| Mr Teggsy chapter 14 . 12/15/2013
Do my eyes decieve me? Chapter 14? Wow. Been a long time (aside from the Halloween special) since we heard from the frontline. It's great to hear you're back man.
You may of had 2-3 months vacation. And by then usually the writers are a little bit (insert sad face) and (insert 'urh can't be productive. Eat more biscuits) thing. But you? You still deliever the full package, and this chapter was certainly a great comeback.
A lot of the time it was 'easy going' than all the usual fast adrenaline action. But that's good! Now that the Elemental attacks have seized (for now) you've really opened up the characters. And I don't just mean personality wise. Sure this story has been action a lot of the way through. But it's nice to see the 'calmer' side of the characters'.You really expressed a lot of the innocence these young dragons should have, and that's brilliant. And not to say, it has been absolutely funny reading this. I loved Micheal with the imaginary tear. Classic! I love it! Could picture perfectly and read it several times over. Great stuff.
Anyway. Moving on to the storyline. The plot's thickening. Glacia/Flake in disguise is really pushing her luck with the 'undercover' thing. Especially now that she's got Amber to look out for (and that really is something to be concerned about). The 'expedition' shall we call it is certainly something I'm looking forward to seeing. And I can't wait what's in store for us then. And the Elemental attack? Not good. Only bad things can prevail afterwards...
Overall, after 2-3 months you've still got it. Another brilliant chapter from you. I hope to see chapter 15 soon. Hopefully on Christmas Day, because then I have another present to look forward to! But don't rush. If it doesn't fit in with your holiday then that's fine. Enjoy your holidays. Hope to see from you soon.
Also, side note: sorry for not posting sooner. Caught up with the writing myself today. Oh and while we're at it, massive thank you for the shout out. Made me smile.
Merry Christmas Airchi, and a happy new year!:)
| coincidencless chapter 14 . 12/15/2013
Ah, bit of slice of life, always fun, with a touch of elementals at the end. Though I strongly recommend writing out smaller numbers. Instead of 91, ninety-one, instead of 4, four, and so on.
| Loneshadow117 chapter 14 . 11/9/2013
This was so confusing, but at least it was funny. I'd leave a longer review but my mind neads to recover from this. Just for a suggestion since you mentioned pokemon, you should have Ash or Red, preferably Red because he is way better, come in and capture one of them.
| Airchi chapter 14 . 11/7/2013
Just wanna clear something up to everyone that reads this: This chapter is nothing more than a Halloween Special, this is not a separate story, I will be posting Chapter 14 soon enough. I wrote this to get something more light hearted out as opposed to the more serious-themed chapters of the main story.
| HKGhost chapter 14 . 11/7/2013
... I don't understand...
| MurasakiKuroAkai chapter 14 . 11/7/2013
Well this is an odd, yet entertaining fanfic. I think this should be classified as either a crossover fanfic or a parody. Mostly a separate story. Looking forward to the next chapter (mostly on the main story, but I'm curious to see how this canon will work out).
| darman700 chapter 14 . 11/7/2013
XD LOLOLOL Man what a great chapter bro very very funny, and it's good to see you back I hope you find some more free time so you can continue writing, but a great chapter bro you kept me laughing the whole way great job bro and keep at it.
| Avimus chapter 13 . 7/30/2013
You're getting desperate now with these flame jokes. I know they can't last forever! You will be pressed to keep pulling fresh ideas!
And I can't believe that I'm already done with your story. And I didn't have to "go to Convexity" and back.
Since this is my closing review (before you submit another update), I will try to make it long.
I'll get my critical points over in a single paragraph so that we can end on a praiseful note! I saw that you included long scenes of Flame, Sion, and Pyro in this chapter. For the first time in an eon. We don't really get much of Flame, Sion's not popped up since the fight with the Elementals, and Pyro... Pyro seems like he's going to play a large role in the story, but I don't know anything about him except that he has an attitude to match Mike Tyson.
This is most likely a symptom of your boundless variety of OCs that you've introduced and focused on developing well. Because Amber, Darman, and Michael have been characterized to the very marrow (and very well, mind you), it is difficult to prevent personalities of Flame, Ember, Sion, and Pyro from suffering. It's not a major problem, but it is noticeable. Be careful not to neglect certain characters that have or will play a large role in your story, or I will have to call a social worker on you.
FS: "A war lost, an ally gained. The corruption of all focused in one, the birth of an evil second to none. Do not resist but must embrace; lest you cause the extinction of the dragon race." Ok, I cheated again. But before you call red card on me and force me to sit on the bleachers, realize that these three sentences have equal value together. The reason I chose this as my FS (FParagraph, more like) is that it's one of the first examples of poetic prose that we get in your writing. And let me tell you, you do it well. My only regret is that there is not mooare of it.
By the way, I feel stupid for commenting about not having a reaction from Spyro for receiving an Intermediate. It was midnight, and my brain was not functioning correctly. It's obvious that he's well aware of the Guardians' intentions. Disregard what I said there.
Awesome tensions with Sion discovering Flake and wanting to learn more about the Elementals! I love how you didn't just make him realize immediately that Flake was evil. I know that it's bound to come out some time, but it's wonderful that you are taking it gradually.
I am genuinely sorry that this time around, I will not be able to go on to the next chapter after I click the "Post Review as Avimus" button. Shame on you for not having an unlimited supply of your writing available at our disposal.
And finally, it's been a pleasure reviewing over your story, and I'm glad to have been able to give you my input. And for the record, it was incredibly easy to keep typing these things out and flooding your review box. Usually, I have some difficulty giving these things some volume, but you had so many wonderful elements (see what I did there?) going on in here that I just couldn't resist!
For now, *sigh* I guess I'll just have to wait for Chapter 14.
May the Elementals get lost on the way to your apartment,
P.S. Take the gun away from Sarge. Now. Or he will catch pregnancy.