Reviews for Self-Insert Series
Kine X chapter 1 . 3/25/2013
Awesome. I'd love to see more of this. Y'know how Kushina was able to make Chains out of her Chakra? Maybe Naruto's Chakra is dense enough to be able to make solid constructs. Also, when Gamabunta and Naruto where fighting Gaara and Shukaku, Gamabunta told Naruto to use the Henge to turn them into something that would let him get a hold on Shukaku. Maybe it is known, to summons or whoever, that the Uzumaki have dense enough Chakra to where they can make solid constructs or, it could be possible, Jinchuuriki have denser Chakra cause of the Bijuu inside of them. Bijuu ARE solid Constructs of Chakra. I hope that helps with an Explanation... xD
war sage chapter 1 . 3/12/2013
good start
kenegi chapter 1 . 3/11/2013
So kyubi isn't a chakra biju but a actual demon in this fic. I like how this is going BTW and what happen to clone #3?
serialkeller chapter 1 . 3/11/2013
Like it so far, but that he only knows up to after the gaara retrieval arc kind of sucks. Anyways, you made a mistake calling konohamaru with the second name hiruzen when it should have been sarutobi. I thought the solid henge that naruto can do is because of the kyuubi being practically all yang chakra because the yin is sealed away until he can get the key. Also hope he gets into fuinjutsu and finds he's really good at it like any uzumaki descendent should be and with kage bunshin to experiment and improve his handwriting he should be flying them out. Can't wait for more :D
Freshrice01 chapter 1 . 3/10/2013
Damn, you don't need to berate on the author for writing this. Fanfiction is a place where you write freely without the berating and negativity. No need to come here and troll on his story. If yu did not like it then why comment? It trolls like you that make the world a bad place because of your negativity.

On the other hand, I really think this story has potential. You just need to tweak it here and there. I think that you should continue writing this fanfic no matter what others might say. I really enjoyed this because there are rarely any self insert naruto fanfics out there and I believe that you can true ly write a good one.
- freshrice
TheBeardedAsshat chapter 1 . 3/10/2013
No one wants to read your stupid fucking self insert bullshit coz its fucking dumb and you are a faggot