|Reviews for Peace at last|
| darklighteryphon chapter 24 . 23h ago
Not bad but let's see what will happen to Night.
| htffan951 chapter 24 . 3/8
This was a great chapter, I liked it a lot. Oh I almost forgot, happy almost one year anniversary with this story. I do however have one question. Why couldn't night break free of her chains in the last chapter, but she could free herself in this one? Other then that, I really liked this chapter. It is a nice addition to this great story. As always I cant wait to read more.
| Darklighteryphon chapter 23 . 3/5
Good to see this is still going I hope to see more.
| Loneshadow117 chapter 23 . 3/1
Sorry, my stupid tablet decided to click, "submit review" for me so now I have review as a guest due to it not allowing multiple reviews from one person.
- As I was saying, more of a back story would have been nice for the ape. He seemed to lack any motive for wanting to kill all of them.
-Last of all, the Well of Souls. Personally I don't really care where battles take place, but I had to decide, I would have had it take place in a location such as Cynder's Fortress from the first game. If I was the Ape leader, I would have been in a more secure and easy to guard location. Plus, if you had it take place there, you could have more character development for Cynder because she could remember her past and have her break down in the Fortress from the harsh memories there.
| Loneshadow117 chapter 23 . 3/1
Well, I guess in the ape's case it's better to go down fighting then to be executed. Now as for your questions:
-Night I actually ended up liking. Her turning good was great character development, but I do wish we would have learned about her past.
-With the Flame x Ember, I'm neutral sided for that pairing. In my opinion there needed to me more bonding moments between them. Personally I liked the Amp x Grace pairing better.
-Now for the ape leader. I liked him, but not very much. I wish there would have been more character development for him.
Heseemed to lack any motives for wanting to
| Dragonoc chapter 23 . 3/1
Alrighty good chapter, 1st Night is doin alright, but since she can't use her powers does she have any after her master took them? Flame and ember are doin good as well, might need to be a little slower on romance part so they won't be lovin like spyro and cynder straight away. Ape was alright had no problems with that. But main summary for chapter and story darn good :)
| rednec0 chapter 5 . 3/1
I'm sorry, but do you even proofread? The grammar since chapter 1 is atrocious and needs correcting severely.
| htffan951 chapter 23 . 3/1
Well I must say that I'm glad to hear that you are not giving up on this story, I am though sorry to hear about you lack of inspiration problem. Now for you questions.
I think Night turned out alright, however she is a bit of a bland character, at least in my opinion she is.
The story line for flame X ember to me is really interesting. I'm not sure if I've mentioned this before but I do really like you little twist to the love triangle that started in the beginning.
For the most part the ape is a good antagonist, but like night he is a little bland to me and it would be nice to know more about them.
As for the well of souls, I t thought it was a nice place for the fight.
I'm sorry to say that I don't have any ideas. What I can say is that you don't give yourself enough credit. Your actually a pretty good writer. Sure the fight scenes could be better, but you are by far a lot better then me with fights scenes. Every one is good at some scenes as well as terrible at others. You have troubles with fight scenes but you to a great job on the romantic scenes.
All and all, I thought that this was a pretty good chapter. I can't wait to read the next one regardless to how long it might take.
| Loneshadow117 chapter 22 . 1/20
Wow another late review from me. Anyways, I'm sorry that you lost your beta reader, and I would offer to do so for you, but I just haven't been dedicated enough to fanfiction lately due to school. School this past month has consumed much of my time and I haven't been online since mid-November. I wish best of luck to you for finding a new beta reader and I apologize for not being able to help.
| TheBARHalofan197 chapter 1 . 1/7
Aww, I'll deep reading
| htffan951 chapter 22 . 1/1
Well I'm glad to see, this story being updated. I'm sorry to hear about your beta reader. I would offer to help, however I only would be able to fix the grammar mistakes. I'm not all that good when it comes to punctuation. As for this chapter I thought it was rather good. A few mistakes here and there but over all still good. Can't wait to read more.
| Unit Omicron chapter 21 . 8/29/2013
Looks like this story is coming to an end...sad to see that, but I'm looking forward to seeing the end of it!
Good chapter here, a lot of important plot development and character development on the side as well. I'm surprised by Night's betrayal, but we'll see how that plays out later on, I suppose. I'm hoping Flame will survive this ordeal...
Nice chapter, Santana. Not much else to say! Looking forward to the next update. :D
Dominis det vobis fortitudo. -UO
| Loneshadow117 chapter 21 . 8/7/2013
Sorry for the late review, I didn't even know it updated. Anyways, I don't even have an account on Twitter, and I don't plan on getting one. As for your drawing, I don't have a Deviant Art account, but I did look at it and I think it's a good drawing of her, but if you could add some color, it would be even better. Now I think I'll follow the story since I forgot to earlier.
| Vilku chapter 21 . 8/5/2013
cynder: i think she ought to be more dark, a bit poisonous,(like making negative remarks nonchalantly) perhaps a bit selfish, manipulative, self succumbed, private.
spyro: well, it seems like everyone else is acting like spyro, too. hes supposed to be the icon of innocence and goodwill, yes?
humour? i guess im a bit deviant on that. i dont laugh at things youre supposed to, and i laugh when its inapporpiate to. ) its a smiley if it didnt work.
i especially love amphars, i imagine he has hidden loneliness that feels bitter sweet. dont know if you intended so, but it made sense to me.
| htffan951 chapter 21 . 7/31/2013
Ok before I start rateing this chapter you should know that you have done a fantastic job on this chapter. Ok so let's start with spyros and cynders personality. I think that you were pretty close to there original personality. You were in my opinion slightly off.
As for sparx, I think he should come back.
And finally the humor. I though that there was some funny moments in this chapter, but I think that this was chapter was suppose to be more serious. You did have a few laughs here and there, so I have to say that you did a perfect job on the humor. Is still love this story and I will be looking forward to read more.