|Reviews for The Old Team|
| brightflare chapter 35 . 11/15/2016
| Rinnala chapter 16 . 9/5/2016
in 16 chapter, NO major changes have been made to the plot. Sure, You've indicated that something will happen with the Master and Rose, but so far, all Rose has been is a pretty face who hasn't affected the story much at all. the've shared the lines between the three of them and the extra bits don't really affect the plot. The Doctor is virtually unchanged, and as a DoctorXRose fan Rose should be owed more credit in her effect on the Doctor. Personally I only think he quizzed Martha in that hospital episode because Donna told him to find someone. Since in this story she told him to stick to Rose, I'd think, they'd probably aim to do the episode solo. I you really wanted Martha in, her stubbornness could easily account for making herself a place in their lives insisting on knowing what's going on. It seems to me that the plotline has been followed too closely for a story where a person as influential as ROSE is still in.
I like that you keep the basic framework true, like not adding an extra self balancing scooter in the runaway bride episode.
I don't mean to be mean or critique it negatively. It's an impressive story and you are practically rewriting whole seasons and that is awesome, certainly I couldn't undertake such a huge task and I do appreciate it. I just think that it could have been more. Maybe if you have the time to go back and look at it again, you could consider making Rose more influential and individual from the others in the story
I'll continue reading in the hope that the major change, you promised, will be coming.
| FaeLii chapter 24 . 8/25/2016
hey, I truely love this story, which is saying g something considering how many S3 rewrites I've read, but I've made it over half way through the season and I keep noticing one tiny thing that bugs me and may be bugging others too so I thought I'd poi t it out just as constructive criticism. Most of the time when you are using the word 'except' you should be using the word 'accept'. You accept the things that happen. Except means more like 'but' or 'however' or 'in the specific case ofI don't have a problem with cats, except when they scratch me for no apparent reason. I just can't accept that kind of behavior in a house pet.
| InsanityIsACalling chapter 21 . 4/4/2016
Hi! just want to say, such a great story! It's not often that I find one that actually feels realistic. Where you can imagine it actually happening like that on the show, everyone stays in character. So thanks for writing it. I would like to point out, however, that you often use the word "except" when it should actually be "accept". I'm only mentioning it because I've seen it used more than 5 times and it can be a bit confusing. The word "except" means to omit something, or to be apart from a main group. The word "accept" means means to acknowledge something or consent to it.
| Sommerlee chapter 34 . 10/4/2015
Overall, a really excellent story!
| Sommerlee chapter 6 . 10/3/2015
I love that the Doctor couldn't say "it means nothing"!
| Sommerlee chapter 3 . 10/3/2015
Already threading in the Master arc, nice!
| Guest chapter 36 . 7/6/2015
| eternalLove59 chapter 34 . 5/28/2015
Wow this story was wonderful. I've read a bunch of season 3 rewrites with Rose added to the mix and yours has become one of my favorites. Adding this to my favorites of course ;)
| Whofan14 chapter 34 . 5/19/2015
You, my friend, have perhaps become my favorite author on this website! This has been absolutely brilliant, I can't explain how well you've integrated Rose without her majorly changing the events of the series. I'd almost begun to think it wasn't possible! And as if the Time Crash short wasn't cute enough, you've gone and made it so much cuter! I've been reading this story non-stop, I honestly can't put it down, I can't wait to see what else you've got. :D
| Whofan14 chapter 20 . 5/19/2015
I really love that you completely replaced Joan with Rose in this story. I mean I didn't exactly like Joan in the first place, but this is a good way to test and develop their relationship. This is just so exciting to read, you've done such a good job!
| Whofan14 chapter 7 . 5/19/2015
Rose certainly did know, haha! My goodness, you're good at this!
| PskullV chapter 36 . 3/25/2015
During so much of this story, I couldn't deny that there were serous problems with physical description, or rather the lack thereof. Also, the dialogue was sometimes a bit unnatural and the pacing cold have been treated a lot better.
But I always kept reading. You know why? Because you go me to the point where I simply couldn't imagine the Doctor and Rose being apart.
| TheCurlyGal6218 chapter 29 . 3/14/2015
you just had to didn't ya? never mind that. I am really enjoying this story! I hope rose isn't really dead
| pinstripesandconverse chapter 34 . 3/8/2015
HURRAHH ITS OVER AND IT WAS FANTASTIC! I read your whole fic in the space of 36 hours so yup amazing