Reviews for By Sally Sparrow
Nikki Pond chapter 1 . 4/5/2013
you should make more stories about sally encounter the 11th doctor cause i love when they meet keep making some
Guest chapter 1 . 3/12/2013
cool story
BonusParts chapter 1 . 3/12/2013
I really enjoyed the sense of both love and danger in this. The Sparrow/Nightingale romance is one close to my heart. I often think it was Moffatt's dry run for Amy/Rory, so the parallel of Manhattan stories was scary and heartbreaking...but you pull it out at the end. Nice job!

Do remember to start new paragraphs with each new character's speech, or each new action. Also, a few details - while interesting from a back story perspective - did slow the story down a bit. Not terribly so, but for a suspense story like this, consider carefully what absolutely needs to be in the story and what doesn't.

I still had a great time reading this. The bit with the trio on the hill was a nice touch, too, and puts the adventure in space/time.

Well done!