Story sounds good but I fucking hate the different pov's

this is now one of my favorite insane Harry fics. It read perfectly fine imo, the narrative was very well done. I enjoyed the alternative character narration because it gives a view on what characters around Harry are feeling, while from the way you describe their observations, we can make an educated guess at Harry's own feelings. very well done.

I enjoy a dark harry fic. Wish I could find more that were complete. 5ank you for the share. I believe this story has the bones for a novel length story if you ever change your mind and fill this in more. Thanks for sharing this and your time

It seemed pretty well done from point of view. But alas I am no writer. Anyway thanks for writing this story :)

Amazing fic. After reading as many fanfics as I have, things tend to get repetitive. But this story was a breath of fresh air. Thoroughly enjoyed it.

Only complaint is that you could have expanded on a few things. The HP/DG relationship had a lot of stuff that could have been explored in more detail.

Great fic! Kudos!

I've no clue whether you will actually read this or not but I still want to write my opinion down here so: As you said in the last A/N the story is really jumbled up and many things just get thrown at you that you never heard of but in my opinion that just fits here. This writing style just makes sense with your Harry being broken and mad the way he is. The only really bad thing I noticed are the loose ends: What happend to the horcruxes? Are they still intact everywhere and that's why voldemort didn't die? Are 2 destroyed now because harry hit him twice with the killing curse? How did the whole order die? Otherwise great story

Damn, I love this! Good job on the post-? war Harry :)

This was cool. It seems pretty wrapped up from my point of view.

Incredible story. I've read this a half dozen times and it is still pretty epic.

I hope you manage to expand the story a bit, maybe a select story with the "missing" chapters.

In particular I would love to see if Harry and Daphne could heal each other after it's all said and done.

Thanks for sharing.

Hey decided to reread this story, it's a bit darker than what I usually read, but it's great. The reason I decided to reread though is because some jackass by the name of beyonce2 is plagiarizing your story, and uploading it as his own and I thought you should know.

Very well written short story, I can certainly appreciate a maddened, "Lord-level" Harry taking care of business.

I re-red this after a while and I need to say: you coined it right, this is a powerful piece. That said, I can't say I like it, I can't say I dislike it. My opinion on it changed back and forth as I read and the ending, was a mixture of both. And yet, I could 't stop reading it. Even now, after thinking and writing about it, I can't say whether I liked this story or not, and that makes it all the more powerful. I liked the style it was written in (especially the changing viewpoints and never getting Harry's perspective). That said, I think that aspect could have been a bit more fleshed out; One of the few times I like perspective pieces is because you lose the omnipotent view and I'd have liked it if this piece played a bit more with that besides the Harry part of that. I also think some of the 'Harry was away so timelapse' could have been better implemented. Then again, I realize the constraints a contest would put on development, so much of the negatives above are negligible. I still might have liked a bit more development, however (polish for after?).

As for the content, I again have a love/hate relationship, and even my views are split: for example, I generally greatly dislike rape, so having that as a cornerstone makes me like the story less. However, it was largely skipped over, which again, I like and dislike. The masochist half of me that enjoys a dark story once in a blue moon, would like a bit more detail and more emotional fallout (though obliviation as a plot device helps-still, knowing you were raped and feeling the pain after losing the memory would still greatly impact the character, especially given how long it was happening). The other non-masochist half still thinks it was a bit much (a lot of the Blaise chapter was at least referencing it and giving it a large timescale), especially as it was a large part of the story but didn't seem to directly impact the larger story (other than setting up Daphne's character and add flavor). Also, why? From what I could see, Daphne was a pureblood who didn't necessarily balk (or at the very least speak out) against Voldemort, and Pansy despite being 'lessened' was still a full supporter. Why would they be diminished to whores when it is likely the purebloods would want wives and to start families (even if the wife might not have wanted to), and pureblood wives would be sort of a commodity. I'd find it more likely they use half-bloods instead (as many would likely balk at sullying themselves with the muggle-borns).

As for the ending, I still wish for a bit more polish, as it seemed kind of rushed. That said, I quite liked the last paragraph, even though it seems a bit at odds to not show that development as much. We met her as a broken woman, forced to service guys for years, hopped up on lust potions, where she was degraded (while feeling that she wanted it) and beaten. After, memory charmed to forget, even though she realized what happened later on, feeling the new pains and bruises (if not more). Mid-way through, she's attempting to find some semblance of normalcy, being timid and trying to steel herself (to help Harry, to find her voice). At the end, she's convincing enough to put on a performance (however minimal) to Voldemort, has Harry's trust, and, right after the battle when she visits her sister, has suddenly developed an indomitable resolve. I feel it's a bit of a jump, especially as she only has herself and the not very 'talk about your problems' Potter to sort out what happened and go from there. From being twitchy to indomitable is a bit of a stretch for me, especially if there was nothing to that prior...

And yes, I still can't say I like this story, but I can't say I dislike it, either. I'll have to bookmark it again and re-read it later. Again. :)

Amazing scenes, very soohisticated writing, nothing over the top.

This second chaptee is really bringing the heat to this stpry, fantastic scenes so far! Loving the characterization and plot so far.