|Reviews for The Ash Connection|
| Catapily chapter 33 . 7/27/2017
Wow. Just wow. This has got to be one of the most, or even THE best Pokemon story I've ever read on fanfiction. And one of the best stories I've ever read.
I like how in the story you focused on a large cast. Sure, it's hard to focus on a group but it makes the story feel whole, like including Silver even though he's from the games and some of the odder additions, like Ritchie. What's even better is that everyone seemed in-character, which, with so many characters that pop up in the story, is pretty hard to do. The ships and headcanons also don't seem out of place, either- especially the Ikarishipping. In other fanfiction Dawn and Paul are just randomly together, and you've made their relationship slow and unsure, which seems more realistic than the former.
The plot is very well planned out and the different "cutscenes" seem well matched-up with the rest of the story. All of the flashbacks were great- the way they all fit together to form a whole sense of the plot was great. I was kind of disappointed that the story didn't end with a Christmas party, but the wedding works just as well.
I've noticed a few grammar mistakes, mainly periods at the end of a sentence, but they are fairly rare and they don't take away from the story. Overall, this story is just plain awesome. I can't really describe it otherwise.
Kudos to you!
| Guest chapter 25 . 7/12/2017
I love what misty said this chapter!
| Guest chapter 7 . 7/10/2017
Shit. I knew it was coming but still... shit
| SilverDust5 chapter 1 . 6/29/2017
I still remember reading this story all night long two years ago. Was really fun coming back to it!
| Animation Adventures chapter 33 . 6/2/2017
I read all of this, and I loved a lot of it. There are little bits that I didn't like, or I just missed, but I really enjoyed reading this. Whenever I got a free moment, I'd try and get a little more of this read before I was called away again, or I had to turn in for the night. All of the chapters are just so long, and that's amazing because you include so much in it.
The premise of Giovanni recapturing Mewtwo and trying to get him back under his control is interesting, and how Mewtwo turns to Ash through psychic links is brilliant since they have history and Ash is the Chosen One.
I'll admit that the core cast was pretty huge, and some I felt were odd choices like Ritchie or Trip, but they found their roles within the narrative. I did feel sad a bit with Brock, Tracey, and Max staying behind on this adventure. They've helped Ash on his world-saving adventures so I naturally think they'd go with him, but their reasoning for not going works out.
I'll be straight here- I'm not a fan of the 'Giovanni is Ash's father' idea. I just cannot see that happening, and by extension, I'm not a fan of Silver being Ash's half-brother. I'm a fan of Silver, and his characterization through this adventure, but not of his relations to the cast. While they work for this story and make it masterfully written, I am still not a fan.
There were choices in shipping that I was and was not okay with. There were good ones like Ash and Misty, Tracey and Daisy, and May and Drew. Then there were ones I was more skeptical on such as Dawn and Paul, because of their history with Ash, and Steven and Cynthia, which I have nothing against but just find a really odd choice. There's lots of characters and lots of shipping to go around, and for the most part, I'm fine with, but I don't like all the choices.
I've seen a few interpretations of Leaf, and yours goes in the top three, two actually. I'm a bit skeptical about her being a G-Men agent, but she played her role very well regardless. I am very interested to see where her role as the next champion after Lance takes her, and how things develop between her and Gary. Her relationship with Gary was great, the way they were always going at it and challenging each other's ideas. Between her being an agent and her personal issues, she was developed into a well-rounded character. She also gets bonus points for bringing back up the Chosen One stuff, and for bringing the idea of the Ash Connection, which was named by Misty, to the table.
Speaking of Lance, I never really know if I like or hate the guy. This version of him, I hate for constantly trying to force the kids and adults into doing things his way. He kept trying to end the kids' mission so he and the G-Men can finish it themselves. The kids had a better idea of how to approach the situation, and I can't even begin to count how many times I wanted to tell him to step off both in the kids' situation and the conversations with the other adults.
One other thing I enjoyed is the appearances of past characters popping in, and helping advance the plot. It was great how everyone included contributed to that.
It's a shame that this was written pre-XY because it would've been awesome for Serena, Bonnie, Clemont, and the other Kalos characters to get in on this. Sadly, the timing did not match up.
Overall, fantastic work with the long chapters, the plot development, and the characterization of all the characters. I'll be moving onto Ash Connection ll: The Rising.
| Lucifer-Allheart chapter 33 . 5/29/2017
So, i think it has been ages since i've reviewed a fanfic... but i wanted to let you know that i found this story to be an incredibly gripping read. Once i started i could not stop reading, which is very very rare for fanfiction stories. I did notice that there were at times some small mistakes in writing, but it was never anything truly glaring and it just made me pay more attention. The way you bring out the characters and let them develop is very fluid, even when they are in a large group. There weren't all that many pokemon battles involved, but i found that to be good. Most other pokemon fanfics i read tend to overextend the battles/ You however wrote them subtle, but solid. an excellent backstory and integration of OC's and a mix of anime and game characters.
All in all, it was an incredible read. and i will definetly check out your other work.
| D11 chapter 32 . 4/27/2017
Wow! I'd seen that this story had such great reception, but I had held off reading it as I'm not too fond of Ash as a character. But wow! This story sucked me in. I have been glued to my phone reading this in my free time, and I absolutely loved the ending where it comes out that this was just the story being recounted. Very clever. I throughly enjoyed it!
| User is inactive chapter 33 . 4/22/2017
Hi there. I have just read this entire story in one go. One entire afternoon, and into the early evening.
I have been utterly dazzled.
I don't think I've ever read anything over 300K long before. I usually get bored by the end of the first 10 chapters, and stop reading. But god, I could not stop with this story. I just kept going and going, and each chapter just kept getting better and better.
Funny, I am quite the anime elitist, but for whatever reason, I journeyed back to the Pokemon fandom, and this is where I find the type of story that I had been looking for all along. A story that reads like another season of the anime, that develops multiple storylines, that includes all of my favourite characters, that has enough plot conveniences to keep everyone alive but never enough to bore the reader, that has an ending that ties it all together.
Thank you for giving me a wonderful Saturday.
| bigb360 chapter 33 . 3/21/2017
I've just started reading TAC 2, and I wanted to give this a review before I got too far into it. First off, my appreciation for giving these characters the treatment they all deserve. I didn't necessarily agree with all of your decisions character wise, but you did it so well that any complaints I would have are very minor and are overtaken by the story as a whole.
It does feel like the story gets bogged down in a lot of places by a lot of politics that aren't completely hashed out that I see (like why on earth are people so accepting of a sporting event choosing their leaders in the first place) but it feels so real and satisfying because of how you portray all of the characters and situations they're in. It also gives a needed depth to the Pokemon world that we obviously never see in the anime.
At times it seemed like Ash was a side character in his own story. Granted you're dealing with a ton of characters, and frankly I believe this was your intent. He did take more of a backseat, but in doing so I learned about characters like Drew, May, Paul, Leaf, Dawn, the various champions, etc. Was the intent to flesh them out more and leave Ash as kind of the catalyst for everything, but not necessarily the central character? (I hope that question is clear). He also seemed a little more duncey than I'm used to.
The only character I didn't really get was Misty. I can tell she's strong and independent and cares for Ash and wants more than a simple friendship. But then when it came to Ash's brush with death she dealt with it in an almost blasé manner. Not that she needed to become an emotional mess by any means (there are probably too many stories that treat her in that manner), but I feel like maybe you pulled back a little too far in the other direction. I just had issues figuring out what to think of her and what she was thinking at times.
Gosh I feel like I'm complaining too much. That's not my intent, as I really did enjoy the story (and I plan to enjoy TAC 2 as well). Take any of these critiques as constructive, please (and I know the story is now almost 5 years old)! The story is very good and its scope is beyond impressive. You've given us a mature look at the world of pokemon with a lot of good political intrigue and nice personal moments.
Shipping wise, if I'm not mistaken, it seems TAC set the standard in the fandom for relationships given Ash x Misty. A lot of other fics follow the standard of Ikari, Wishful (my 2nd fav), Contest, and OldRival.
Anyway, I really enjoyed the story and am looking forward to more in TAC 2. And I hear you're mulling over a third story, which would be fantastic.
| FlameUser64 chapter 32 . 3/20/2017
Review here because I didn't put in the epilogue review like I should have, but I was actually quite disappointed that Meloetta didn't do something like, say, show up in Ash's hospital room. Like, considering how other characters noted how in-sync Ash and Meloetta already were, I expected her to show up for the aftermath as things were winding down. At least to pop in and say goodbye, you know? Also, gotta wonder why she turned Fighting-type before attacking Mewtwo when she's perfectly capable of blasting things with Psychic or Hyper Voice in Aria Forme. Especially since, you know, being part Normal is supposed to make her immune to Mewtwo's Shadow Ball. And I was kind of insulted that she just got casually one-shotted when she tried to help. You'd think she'd know better than to turn Fighting-type and then try to rush a Psychic-type, instead of playing his game at range where she'd be better able to survive.
| FlameUser64 chapter 33 . 3/20/2017
So, the question here is: what happened to Meloetta? She was mentioned as having made a full recovery, but unlike Mewtwo and Moltres nothing further was said about her after that. And, well… I'd expected her to at least appear in the epilogue, seeing as Chili and Cress had promised to take her to a rock concert someday. And, well, it would've been cute.
Also, I can assume this story definitely sidetracked stuff midway through Unova. By the end of Unova, Ash and Meloetta were on speaking terms — heck, she was *flirting with him* for a good chunk of Adventures in Unova, adding one more to the tally of "Pokémon with a romantic interest in Ash" — and Ash was more than familiar with Giovanni after the latter attempted to use Meloetta's power to control the Unova weather trio. He succeeded, right up until Pikachu absorbed one of Thundurus's electric attacks and blasted Giovanni and his ritual platform with a Spirit Bomb-sized Electro Ball.
| The Happy Pen chapter 33 . 2/18/2017
I have no idea what I can say that can summarise just how good this is without also repeating what you have heard so many times already—the intriguing plot, the beautiful characterisation, the clear structure, your captivating style, etc.—but I know that I can't go without telling you that this was one of the best Pokémon fanfics I have read.
I never got bored of this story, and although it was really, really tough not skimming and rushing through chapters to save time, I had a lot of fun completely losing myself in this, just crying, laughing, smiling, squealing and screaming. I was a bit hesitant about committing myself to reading so much, but I'm glad that I did—everything this put me through was more than worth it, and it left me with a great sense of satisfaction at the end. I can't give you deep or thoughtful insight on this, but I know that there are a lot of things in here that pull us in and make it an amazing read—sadly, I just don't know how to put it into words.
In all honesty, I gave up on Ash a long time ago, but this makes me want to have faith in him again. Really beautiful work.
| anjumstar chapter 33 . 1/9/2017
It's whenever I finish a story like this that I think, dang, I should have been reviewing every chapter! Because what I have to say at just the last one isn't really enough. But I'll give it my best shot.
I read half of your Pokemon stories (all the ones that had ships that I liked) before diving into this one. Just because this one is so long and such a commitment that I wanted to make sure that I liked your writing before buckling in. And, truthfully, I only really, really liked a couple of your stories. There were a few that were okay, and a few that I didn't really like at all. But, I guess it didn't matter, because I decided to read this anyway. And...it blew me away. This is a masterpiece. Just because of the plot. That alone-well, not alone. Also combined with the mad balancing of characters, but I'll get to that-was a monstrous task. And well, here I am, totally satisfied at the end of it. Um, onto those characters now.
You were balancing, what, 30 main characters? I couldn't even make the complete list off the top off my head if I tried. And when I say balance, I mean, pretty much perfectly. I mean, little things, like Ritchie could have gotten more screen time or Adler could have seemed a little less doofy or Barry could have said 'I'm gonna fine you' a couple less times. I mean, super, super tiny things. I've never read anything with this many characters and it being handled so well. And I stopped watching Pokemon part way through Gen 3-though I've seen bits and pieces of 4, 5, and 6. I feel like I have a decent grasp of Dawn, at least. But the rest of the crew-all the randos from Gen 5, for instance, not to mention even some people in our group of 14 (Zoey, Trip, etc.)-I didn't have much knowledge on at all. Yet, you made all of the characters compelling with interesting backstories, they were tied well together, you paired together unexpected friendships, and I was nearly equally invested in all of them. I felt like I knew all of them equally well as I was reading, because they were so balanced in this story.
Okay, Imma try to get more specific now...I've been trying to hold onto a few from throughout the story so that I don't just have things to say about the end, lol! So here are those random things. 1, love that you made Barry gay. I've been reading a lot of spectrum inclusive fiction right now, and I'm super digging it, and all of the main Pokemon pairings I read about are so heteronormative! So, while there was still a lot of that in there, Barry at least warmed my heart. Though I don't get why you had him liking Paul...I don't really get why Dawn is shipped with Paul either. He's kinda a dick in the anime. (But I'll touch on your use of Ikari in a sec). I actually maybe would have preferred it if he liked Kenny or someone more understandable than Paul. Because right now, that pick seems kinda arbitrary. I just don't get it. But I also don't like Paul, so it might just be me.
You were really good about building up and releasing tension, answering questions and posing new ones all throughout. Incredible plot balancing, once again. The one moment where I felt that was a little off was the chapter where we got Lance and Leaf's backstory and the scene with Felly Rodriguez. I think that the tension would have worked better if we didn't know why Lance chose Leaf until Ch 30 when he mentions her to Leaf. And Lance himself could have told a watered down version of the tale. But your way was good too...I mean, all of the backstories and how well the weave together and all that...really brilliant. And how you related characters to each other...well, it makes the world seem really small, but it's also very creative!
I loved the last Special. The transitions were artsy and all the moments were so Ash down to the molecule. That's all.
Oh, I said I'd mention IkariShipping. Well, I'll just dive into the ships in general. I liked what you did with Paul here because, near as I could tell, he was still pretty in character. A douche. But he was protecting Dawn and he didn't know why and then when he did know why, it didn't really change him. That sounds like Paul. And Dawn was just sweet, but attracted to the bad boy (happens to all of us, babe). It worked. ContestShipping. Always a fave, always makes me smile. I'm glad that this was kind of the prominent ship, because that's how it is in the anime. It's the most canon one. They were the ones most relationshippy the whole time. I dug that balance. And the PokeShipping was just right. I mean, some carnal part of me wanted more, but this was just right, really. I mean, Ash is an idiot. I think that you didn't give him enough credit in that he could understand what a girlfriend is after it's explained to be one word, but aside from that, he wouldn't know squat about a relationship except for gut instinct stuff. And that's what he did. And not a lot of it. Because he's an idiot. And we love him for it. I liked Cynthia and Steven and little Emily. Cute. Maylene seemed a little random, but I liked the use of the arc, and ending with a wedding was brilliant. I don't like Iris and Cilan, but you didn't focus on them, so I give it a pass.
Really, my bottom line is that this is my favorite kind of Pokemon story. A lot of action and the romance on the side-haven't mastered writing it myself, but I know it when I find it and this is IT. You laced it in throughout to give the readers a little something sweet to suck on, but it wasn't the whole meal, as Cilan would probably say. (Speaking of which, you captured a lot of characters' manners of speaking and personalities really well, but Cilan's dumb cliches were kind of a missed opportunity. I see how good you are with Harley's dumb dialogue-I know you could do Cilan's!)
And even though that's my bottom line, I'm gonna keep talking, because I have many feelings! The Luke-Lu thing was a funny almost-inside joke. There were a lot of things in the last few chapters that had me making squeaks of various different emotions.
I liked the mirroring between Mewtwo and Silver at the near-end. It was unexpected and surprisingly satisfying. I loved when we got to see Delia's past and she saw Ash as having saved her life and that's why she loved him so much. It was touching. Deeply. Especially because right at the beginning when Delia was breaking down with the revelation that Giovanni was Ash's dad, I was kind of like, oh sheesh, this again? But that one tidbit made it super worth it. And Ash and Silver's dynamic was very interesting. And Silver DESTROYING Giovanni there at the end. Oof, that boy has some daddy issues.
Speaking of, Drew and Ash's scene at the end was nice. I just really liked it. And usually last minute drama between a meant-to-be couple is really annoying and unnecessary, but Drew's response was actually super believable. And him quickly realizing his mistake and fixing it was also nice and unusual for that kind of situation. (I'm a total Drew fangirl, btw.)
The mirror that Lance made between Paul/Reggie, Drew/Solidad/, and Leaf/Lance was super smart of you. Perfect timing and a really nice message. I liked how you were mentioning Iris's issue with the cold for so long before finally revealing the story of her parents dying. Because when it was first introduced, I thought it was kind of melodramatic writing but then you pull the rug out from under us! Yikes, so many tragic backstories!
I could probably say so much more, but this is already beyond too much, so I'll spare you from anymore, save for this last gem: I wanted more Brock.
That's all. Thank you for this.
| Xexclaima chapter 4 . 12/26/2016
Wait... is the Pokemon Mewtwo!? I remember that it used to wear armor in Giovanni's care and its attack is somewhat similar to a Shadow Ball.
| TabathaEvans chapter 32 . 12/17/2016
Dang. This has been an amazing ride. From the beginning, your characterization has been spot-on, and you slowly built up momentum until we were hurtling to the thrilling conclusion. Your grammar, spelling, and punctuation have been perfect, and I loved this. Five stars for The Ash Connection.
I'd be suffering from withdrawal if I weren't about to go read the epilogue and sequel.