Reviews for Persona 4: The Darkness of Hope
Shirou Fujimura chapter 15 . 8/14/2014
YAAAAAAAY! Suza-I mean, a COMPLETELY new, unforeseen, and unfamiliar OC has been introduced! I can't wait to see what part he role he comes to play in the future!
Shirou Fujimura chapter 14 . 6/9/2014
YAAAAAAAAAY! New chapter! I loved the entire thing especially the Naoto-Minato kiss! HI-LARI-OUS!
Shirou Fujimura chapter 13 . 5/27/2014
And so ends the...I'm gonna call it the Fake Killer Arc. I'll be waitin for the next lil chappie!
Shirou Fujimura chapter 12 . 5/13/2014
FINALLLYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY! Can't wait for next chapter!
Shirou Fujimura chapter 6 . 2/15/2014
Ha...damn. Tired as shite again...well good chapter...good night...
I ship MariexMinato...
Shirou Fujimura chapter 5 . 2/15/2014
I really don't care about the Arcana events much so it's cool that you skipped them.
Shirou Fujimura chapter 4 . 2/14/2014
Yes! Happy ending-GET! YEEEEEEEEEAH!...that's about it. like the Yukiko everyone picking on Teddie...good night...
Shirou Fujimura chapter 3 . 2/14/2014
DUN DUN DUUUUUUUUUN! Things are really starting to heat up!
Shirou Fujimura chapter 1 . 2/13/2014
I loved it! Other than minor spelling errors, it was AWESOME! I like the amnesiac OC MC and can't wait to continue reading!
I'll admit, for a moment, i thought it was P3 Minato, but I guess I was wrong. Oh well!
SaberTheFallenAngel chapter 9 . 1/6/2014
Another good fight, but why did you put line breaks in the description of the fight? there were a few grammar errors, but nothing too serious. sorry it took this long to review
SaberTheFallenAngel chapter 8 . 12/14/2013
Again, I'd like to apologize for how long it took for me to read this. For the most part the chapter was good, but I should point out some things:
First, some spoken sentences didn't start with capital letters.
Second, there was no transition or line break between the guys meeting Rise and the meal at the Dojma house.
Third, some sentences were missing words, though this was rare
Finally, at the end of one section you put "Ye" at the end with no context.

Despite these points, I thought the chapter was good.

PS. I take it his sleeve concealed swords are shorter than his usual ones? Otherwise he wouldn't be able to move his arms.
SaberTheFallenAngel chapter 7 . 8/15/2013
hey, sorry it took so long to review. anway, good chapter, nice break from the fighting to show a little more normal interactions between the characters. I don't feel like the scenes about Rise at the end needed to be in this chapter, but I can accept it. also, I have some theories about Minato's "Shadow"...

looking forward to next time.
SaberTheFallenAngel chapter 6 . 6/14/2013
this was a decent chapter with a good fight. however, I feel I shold bring up a few things. first I feel that some sentences should really have commas in them, but they don't. I'd recommend using more of them. Also in some cases, rare cases, you either use the wrong word, or at least on one occasion missed a word. Also it's Kanji's mother who runs the shop, not his grandmother.

Apart from that stuff, I enjoyed this chapter, especially seeing Pale Rider (One of my favourite Personas), and giving Naoto a bigger role early on. I look forward to the next chapter.
SaberTheFallenAngel chapter 5 . 5/19/2013
Interesting. Appearnces from Kanji and Naoto are always good. but I do have a question. in the game , the Justice link only starts after Yukiko joins the group, so why does your story imply it happened earlier? it's not a problem, I'm just curious.

you're still doing well. I look forward to how they'll handle Kanji and his Shadow.
SaberTheFallenAngel chapter 4 . 4/30/2013
I figured she'd be the love interest.

The changes you made to the fight were interesting, and made it feel more unique. good job.

sadly, I did see numerous grammar errors, especially during the fight with the Prince. That's another reason I suggested shorter chapters,it makes it easier to go through them once your finished and fix these problems (then again, I'm not really one to talk. I make mistakes like that all the time). however, these did not affect the chapter too badly, and I still found it to be very enjoyable. keep it up!
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