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| Guest chapter 2 . 5/26
lol keep this going
| wavy.gurl chapter 2 . 7/7/2014
Please continue the story
| Guest chapter 2 . 9/5/2013
Please update soon
| xxxflobreeziexxx chapter 2 . 3/30/2013
i like it, it has potential but that was so short.
| ShadowCub chapter 1 . 3/25/2013
What happens when a platonic relationship turns into something more?
Uh a teacher gets arrested?
| DeJee chapter 1 . 3/24/2013
ok i kinda like it just a bit rushed and there are some mistakes in it that make it harder to read but again not bad.. are the other cullens around or the wolves?
| CountingNumbers chapter 1 . 3/23/2013
Okay. Um. How to put this nicely...
You need, NEED to, separate your paragraphs. Two thousand words is amazing. But you have to use at least basic grammar. This includes paragraphs for each start of a new dialogue for a different person, punctuation marks and last but definitely not least, capitalize your I's.
I generally overlook these mistakes if they are few and far in between, but with this chapter, I can't. I seriously recommend that you re-upload this chapter and fix these things. I'm not here to insult you, I apologize if I have offended you. I'm sure with these simple suggestions, this story will be amazing. I wouldn't be reviewing if I thought otherwise. I'm not saying I'm perfect, I'm just saying think about it.
Best of luck and don't give up,
P.s- You got this! (:
| shiznagisa chapter 1 . 3/23/2013
vive ton prochain chapitre, espérant plus long