Reviews for Two Dark Secrets
TheWonderfulWorldOfInsanity chapter 6 . 11/19/2014
no no flashbacks
TheWonderfulWorldOfInsanity chapter 5 . 11/19/2014
wow these chapters are short...BUT WHATEVER!
meadow-music chapter 11 . 5/25/2013
HARRY POTTER- Great Story and if the offer is still up (it has been a decade) then I would be honored to be your beta reader.
TheScarlettShadows chapter 7 . 10/29/2012
Okay, much nicer, but why are they both dumping the kids? ANd maybe you shoukd make one of the lashbacks a nightmare and have one of the others save them, gain trust etc etc.
TheScarlettShadows chapter 6 . 10/29/2012
Wait what! A person abused does not just suddenly splurt things out like that! I believe n your previous chapters you said that it was going to stay secret. You need to give reasons! And more description and a variation of virtually everything. But I like the plot twist you had wit hRemus appearing.
TheScarlettShadows chapter 5 . 10/29/2012
Much better, yes storyline is going too fast, is this an AU? And I won't repeat what I said earlier.
TheScarlettShadows chapter 4 . 10/29/2012
Okay, nice, and I like the flashback, but why would he have it? And can you please do something about the sentence structure. Its actually difficult to read.
TheScarlettShadows chapter 3 . 10/29/2012
Okay, sorry for the last review, but these sentences are kinda boring. And you have no punctation inside speech, at all. And yes it is going to fast, but I have seen writers write lots faster, so this is going well, just heed everyone's (includding your own) advice.
TheScarlettShadows chapter 2 . 10/29/2012
Punctuation! And there's no substance. If you can, rectify the top conversation and make the sentences more interesting. And give some description. And some realty. He'd just been chained in a dungeon when he goes to his room and starts reading, and his father suddenly comes in and punches him! Oky, sorry, that sounded mean. But these chapters could be alot longer. You've rated it a t, and t is what I want to read.
TheScarlettShadows chapter 1 . 10/29/2012
Okay. Good plot, but seriously? One line with absolutely nothing at the end. Nothing interesting. Basic sentences. Please put a bit more enthusiasm in please. But I look forward to reading more.
Child of Music and Dreams chapter 6 . 10/20/2011
Oh God, I hope that Remus is allowed to adopt Harry!

I have a feeling that Remus needs Harry just as much as

Harry needs Remus.

Please post Chapter 12 soon!
MalfoyIsClearlyAwesome chapter 11 . 4/21/2011
You need to improve you'r writing quite a lot, start to describe things better and just make the story feel more real, you know what I mean? And also, write longer chapters. Otherwise, the storyline is pretty good, I'd love to read it if you just improved the writing.
SuperxXxGirl79 chapter 7 . 7/23/2010
oooh...i would LOVE to see Malfoy in Gryffindor...i've always thought he was just kind of misunderstood and brought up with prejudice.
uk3-obeys-seme chapter 11 . 3/29/2010
wow, I love it!
kitteh lova chapter 11 . 3/10/2008
nice story. i think its kool that draco and harry are gona be brothers and friends.i also hink its great that remus gets to adopt them. update soon please!
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