|Reviews for Beacon|
| Lone Warrior2 chapter 1 . 1/25/2014
This is a pretty cool set of drabbles. I thought the parts he interacted with Quackerjack were funny and I felt really sad for the old lady. I was morbidly amused by the part he killed the mugger. How fun that he just had to magnetize one of them and then continue wandering off in an attempt to find his appartment.
I felt you kept him in character really well. Its difficult to write Megavolt in character and batshit insane.
I just gotta know, was the old lady his mother?
| Guest chapter 1 . 12/29/2013
I really love this fanfic. I only recently started watching Darkwing Duck but I really like it. Megavolt is one of my favorite villains so finding a well-written fanfic starring him is a real treat to find. Great job on this fanfic.
| Bookworm Gal chapter 1 . 12/28/2013
This is oddly wonderful. I like it. The scattered fragments of his life works well for Megavolt. Nice work.
| The What-If Writer chapter 1 . 10/5/2013
These where all amazing- you got his character really well done. The fact he keeps forgetting things isn't overused or underused and it works really well, and the dialog bits between him, Quakerjack and Darkwing are spot-on. I liked '40' best. Pretty good effect with the small paragraph about the friends.
Really well done, one of the best Megavolt stories I've read :)
| zanganito chapter 1 . 3/30/2013
I really enjoyed reading this. It was hilarious and I liked all the electricity puns. It was also very interesting to read the POV of a character who didn't remember things.
| DjinniFires chapter 1 . 3/29/2013
I absolutely loved this. Not joking (though I'm envious of your ability to joke). I'm pretty much canon blind here (just know these characters from seeing them on lunchboxes, etc.).
First, I love your choice of POV character. Megavolt is strangely sad and likeable with his hazy, confused memory (damaged by whatever accident made him electric?). He's a Phantom of the Opera antihero type here. "Drat. He knew someone, somewhere, had made him terribly angry, but he couldn't remember who it was or what they'd done."
And his twisted but sincere morality got me, too, introduced by: "And then there was the night that he couldn't remember where he lived, finger crooked thoughtfully at his chin as he ambled down dark streets, lampposts black and lightless from his liberation of their bulbs." I cracked up at this first mention of liberating lightbulbs and the glory and hilarity of his grand mission just kept on building. "A single bulb burned in the center of the ceiling. They'd been friends. Then the bulb had sided with that moron in the cell across the hall." To him lightbulbs are enslaved!
When he got to the Quackerjack toy factory and that one single enslaved bulb burning night and day, I was worried for the owner. Megavolt's surprise and inability to deal with the toy creator's enthusiasm about turning him into an action figure was even more endearing.
And then you switched it up with the lighthouse which seems like an almost religious experience for Megavolt."Otherworldly glow from the lantern cast its fingers down, all the way to the foot of the tower where he was standing."
And he's so sweet with the old lady who apparently is the mother he can't quite remember. The description of her is great from the sentimental details to "her whiskers were quivering" which saves her from being just sentimental.
In case you can't tell, I *really* enjoyed this piece. My only comments are confusion at not seeing any scenes of Quackerjack and Megavolt as partners-in-crime (after you promised at the end of 35!) and utter and complete confusion at the very last scene where Megabolt is "surrounded by living, breathing people." But I'm going to have to hazard that this is my canon blindness.
May I suggest you go on the Reviews Lounge and play review tag?
| LordHelen chapter 1 . 3/29/2013
This is difficult to follow. There is one where he is in prison, about to be executed. How does he get out. Then he's in prison again, and there's a comment about future partners or something. How does he get out again, and why is there no further description on this? Also, there is a spelling error at the end. Unless you meant to say Negaduck, which seems unlikely. Who is the old lady? Why do you make such big skips? What is the point of the story? I'm not trying to make your day worse, but these are the questions you should ask yourself. What do I want to do with this story? Who do I want to read it? Who is the main character? What do they look like? Do they have friends? If you can answer these questions, you are half way to a good story. The other half is communicating the ideas in a way that is understandable and making sure there are no spelling errors or grammar mistakes. I only want to help you, I swear. It just doesn't make much sense, this story.
| acosta perez jose ramiro chapter 1 . 3/28/2013
Hey, very cool idea here. Nice job with Megs.
Keep the good writing.
| Shychick chapter 1 . 3/25/2013
There was a Megavolt action figure way back in the early 90s! And it did have sparking action! I owned one, along with most of the other DWD figures in that line. They were CHEAP, believe me. Broke so easy. (And Megs' gloves were white instead of blue.)
GAH, anywhoo. I LOVELOVELOVE this story. I am one of the biggest MV fans out there, and I love it when people explore his past! Check out my own MV story, 'Electric Phoenix' sometime! :)
| Felidae1 chapter 1 . 3/24/2013
*applauses* That was -breathtaking. Sad, quiet, a little haphazardly stitched together, but all the more befitting since these are Megavolt's memories. The part where his mother meets him and he doesn't remember her, his heart-wrenching. The dialogue between him on death row and Darkwing is hauntingly detached and yet frighteningly captivating.
Again, a wonderful ficlet you have woven here, and definetly a reccommendable read. I tip my hat to you.