Reviews for Naruto: Shinobi Institute of Performance Analysis |
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![]() ![]() ![]() A 100 steps ahead is a tad excessive is it not? I'd shoot myself if that was my life. Fml |
![]() ![]() I've read this before, and while I like most of it very much, I never liked the ending of these fights with orochi, kabuto and jugo. Granted, you as author my plan to never use these 3 enemies again. But you wrote it in a way that all 3 can easily become a problem again, as you didn't even indicate them destroying kabuto's body. kabuto had a healing factor thing, and the others are sealed away in ways they might survive/escape. Bad move for experienced killers like Jiraiya an Kakashi to not finish enemies when they're vulnerable. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Goddannit, a bash fic. |
![]() ![]() ![]() earth and water make wood, not mokuton. doton and suiton make mokuton. don't mix and match languages. |
![]() ![]() ![]() So cliche |
![]() ![]() ![]() lol -Naruto breaks Juriaha's nose- okay your forgiven. oh God I can't stop laughing about that. so funny. I love this story. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I just binged this whole story. I hope you get around to finishing the sequel. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow. This fic has not aged well. I mean, the idea that Sasuke is a sociopath to begin with wasn't a very well thought out one (he's clearly not, there are numerous examples of him having both positive and negative emotions in Part 1, and even Part 2). He clearly has a psychosis about him in the second half of the series, but it's more a temporary break than full blown just being crazy. Overall it seems like you watched too much Dexter and tried to apply that to a character you're not found of. Congratulations are in order, though, as this is one of the more popular stories on the site, but overall this plot twist is a major turnoff because it honestly is completely out of character for cannon Sasuke, to think otherwise is delusional. And I dont mean that in a "you're crazy" way, more a "your cognitive dissonance from your dislike of the character has caused you to grossly exaggerate his flaws" way. I get it is fanfiction, but the fact you seemed to have tried to rationalize it with faulty logic and character analysis at the time of writing is more of a turn off for me than just the fact that Sasuke is a sociopath in the fic. And to be clear, this isn't me being a stan for Sasuke, he's not my favorite character either. Somewhere near the bottom actually. Anyways, it's a shame but this story just isn't to my taste. Maybe one of the works from your more recent/mature oeuvre will be. Your overall narrative, descriptive language, and mechanics are very good, which is something 95% of fics don't have, and the story certainly has found an audience that was able to enjoy it. I just feel its a shame because as popular as this has become, I think the basic idea of Team 7 being Guinea pigs for a program like this is such a novel concept that with a more realistic Sasuke this story could've become the MOST favorited story on the site by a wide margin. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is a review of the whole story, I really enjoyed reading this to the end. You actually had a good plot, character development, progression, etc. I'd give it at least a 4/5 for all the above. As for the negatives, I would suggest having a couple beta readers. The story has quite a few grammar and punctuation errors, either way, we are human and make mistakes so it's not much of an issue. |
![]() ![]() ![]() You've totally seen Men In Black haven't you, cuz that line was straight out of Men In Black the first movie not 2, 3, or International as far as I'm aware |
![]() ![]() ![]() Had Naruto had access to the Rinnegan then he could have used the Rinne Rebirth Jutsu. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Is this version of Orochimaru an idiot? Killing Naruto will greatly piss off the Akatsuki, especially when they realize that the Fox didn't reform after 9 years pass. In order to reform the fox needs both halves of his chakra. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I wouldn't be surprised if it was the fact that Haku had a Bloodline that pissed Danzo off. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm surprised that they don't have Sasuke impregnate a few women BEFORE sending him out on missions where he could possibly die. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I wouldn't be surprised that Naruto has strong Psychical Chakra. He DOES only have Kurama's Psychical Chakra sealed inside of him after all. Kurama's Spiritual Chakra is sealed in Minato's Body. |