|Reviews for Veela's Magic|
| Crystalline-Enchantix chapter 7 . 2/17
In retaliation Hermione should get a boyfriend and then Draco gets REALLY jealous. Love the story by the way.
| Tanto Storm chapter 7 . 1/28
Hermione's too smart to and devious to simply blast them to pieces. She'll want to get them back and make a devious plan of her own. I have faith in her ability to come up with a perfect plan to mess with them.
| Guest chapter 7 . 1/16
Yeah, an update. I love a dramione but I also want hermione to put Draco in his place.
| Only Dreams are Free chapter 7 . 1/16
I cant wait it is really awesome
| TheNewCompanion chapter 6 . 10/23/2013
Are you updating?
| Verni chapter 6 . 6/26/2013
| Tanto Storm chapter 6 . 6/16/2013
Bad move Malfoy. Does he really expect to get Hermione to like him by insulting her! Or does he really want to die of a broken heart? What are his thoughts about this blunder? And I'm super glad I was able to encourage you to keep writing! Now keep writing!...please :)
| megan jensen chapter 6 . 6/8/2013
this is awesome! hope to see more soon
| asdfdsasd chapter 6 . 6/8/2013
Your fan fiction in itself has a charm and is thoroughly engrossing!
You are an endowed writer, i really think so, and i think you should seldom be troubled about not living up to the expectations of your readers, because you will always be able to think of the defect in your writing, but the readers will scarcely ever think of any such existant imperfection!
Just a little hint that chapter 6 has not triumphantly left the readers as desirous to know more as your other chapters have successfully done so.
To improve that, you could add a slightly more captivating element of suspense towards the expected cliffhanger ending.
That would definitely leave the readers reflective about the probable plot in the next chapter.
Here and there, there are a few grammar absurdities and few spelling misprints, yet, on an extensive note, I think you should move forth with your fiction and take it to colossal heights.
Best Wishes from me
| AlexRider123 chapter 5 . 6/6/2013
hey ur story is very cliche and u hv no rights to tell me mine is
and firstly in ur summary u hv said that they despise each other in the chp 2 u say that they dream abt each other in the worst possible way that ' which would make the most perverted person alive blush' that's just stupidity.
secondly u were so mean when u gave ur "REAL review to Heart Attack" though in ur eyes its crap for the person who wrote with a lot of hard work its real good.
no offence but ur story is VERY cliche i can imagine the ending now so wht will happen is that she finds out abt Draco being a veela and then maybe she confronts him abt it or Draco comes and tells her abt his fate if she declines him and the hermione will be like "ill think abt it" and then maybe they start dating each other and the story will end with an epilogue when they both are happily married with and daughter and a son or only a son known as scorpius and they will live happilly ever after
so now aftr i told u this Raaga-Malfoy dont try n change ur story but just like u bieng critical abt heart attack try analysing ur own story and then speak abt other stories.
and btw "I hope you take my lengthy advice in a positive sense; i'm being critical since i cant see my friend making some ghastly mistakes that i , an experienced fanfic reader can make out.
Work on your next chapter, and let me know what you think about my suggestions.
Hoping to see you soar to greater heights in FanFiction,"
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| AlexRider123 chapter 1 . 6/6/2013
| Chorusfreak101 chapter 1 . 4/19/2013
Hey chorus freak here
And okay I agree it's good okay!
It's not that cliché
| Scarlet chapter 5 . 4/16/2013
This is a great fiction
| Tanto Storm chapter 5 . 4/16/2013
Yes, the end is a cliffhanger so get over your fear of not living up to our expectations and write, then post, the next chapter. I promise, wait scratch that I can't promise anything, that we will still love your story. PLEASE keep writing because I like the story!
| Firey Phoenix01 chapter 4 . 4/9/2013
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