|Reviews for Only Fourteen|
| FFFG chapter 1 . 9/16
Very good for a first time. My only complaint is the point of view switching between Zoro and Sanji unpredictably and without any kind of continuity. Otherwise I liked the premise and enjoyed the fic. Thanks for writing. KTN
| ShitCook chapter 1 . 5/17/2016
It's so cute!
| Gothickawiigirl784 chapter 1 . 11/29/2014
| Vampchick2010 chapter 1 . 1/26/2014
that was so cute at the end. i loved this.
| yume76 chapter 1 . 11/22/2013
Very nice and steamy. And I would not have realized that English was not your first language. kudos.
| ZosanFan chapter 1 . 11/8/2013
Loved this One Shot 3 It was sooo sweet :D
| Loojee chapter 1 . 10/5/2013
i love stories like this where Zoro and Sanji are so stupidly falling for each other but had a hard time admitting it! and i also love that they had a little history back at the beach house when they were only 14..oh the joys of being a teenager! xD! great story! kudos to the writer!
| AlpacaCokelat chapter 1 . 7/7/2013
I hardly see any fatal grammatical error and i'm mostly satisfied with how you make the plot flow like a fresh stream. Truly amazing. This has become one of my favorite fics
| Diction-sama chapter 1 . 7/3/2013
Wow, that was good. Long, and amazing. I don't know what to say. It was angsty, sweet, salty, and fluffy! Gah, so adorable! I love ZoSan. They're my favorite couple right now by far.
I'm was really surprised that English wasn't your native language. You wrote in it with expertise that many Englishmen could not achieve. That's not to say there were no errors- there were errors, and I counted quite a few. But the errors I saw had mostly to do with grammar stuff, I think nearly all the spelling was correct. The things I noticed were: sentence arrangement (which words go where in a sentence), commas (run on sentences and comma splices- not too many though), and capitalization issues.
These are not awful mistakes to have, and not many people even notice them it seems. Being a grammar nazi myself, I notice them.
But, the story was wonderful, I thoroughly enjoyed it.
((Oh, and this came to mind near the middle-ish: Zoro! If you stopped being such a sad sap after the "incident," and actually pursued Sanji, you would have been able to avoid all of this! Zoro's a dummy... Sanji's also a dummy for not telling Zoro about his feelings the minute he developed them.))
| CoSINeRULES chapter 1 . 6/12/2013
I fell in love with this story xD
when i'm bored i keep comin back to this story and well, it is fantabulous
You are AMAZING and this story really deserves more love. I didn't regret reading it, and i think nobody did :3 hope to see more from you -3-
| ecklumi chapter 1 . 6/5/2013
first of all
i hate myself to tell it and to think this way...but... I just hate Ace here. I'm sorry but he is soooooo irritating that I wanna kick his ass out of this fanfic. I'm really sorry :(
But this story was just great... (apart of the person I mentioned ... however I rella love him... well... this time not)
omgomgomgomg I wanted so much the solution of the problems! And when it finnally happend... ahhh... it was sooooo sweet! I almost melted to my bones 3
and the prologue was so full of promises that it -literally said- made my heart ache...
omg too much sweetness!
really good work!
| bed of nails and sandpaper chapter 1 . 5/22/2013
That was so lovely! I didn't even cringe at the sappy parts like I normally do. Definitely one of my new favourites :) well done
| eternal-anime chapter 1 . 5/6/2013
OMFG! SO FUCKING HOT! I LOVED IT! i cant believe this is ur first story i mean seriously wow! you have an amazing talent! and there was a couple of grammar mistakes here and there but that nothing compared to how long this story is! amazing! i love it sooo much! have an amazing week! :D :D :D
| beau-peep chapter 1 . 4/19/2013
Loved loved loved it!
| Uftaki chapter 1 . 4/7/2013
Ooooh... lovely and HOT! X3 Zoro's worry/insecurity/feelings towards Sanji were so cute. XD And of course, everything after Zoro left the party was so delicious. X3 *lol* Nice work! :3