|Reviews for The Light Hawk War|
| Guest chapter 5 . 2/23
Katauhito showed himself as yosho to Syria when kagato first attacked get your facts straight
| Guest chapter 5 . 2/23
Kiyone never died your altering to much from canon which ruins a great story
| Guest chapter 4 . 2/23
Your ranma should be called ranma "whiny crybaby bitch" saotome
| Guest chapter 3 . 2/23
Juraians can't create energy shields or energy boasts or energy swords the energy swords juraians use are juraian versions of a lightsaber Ryoko can use energy blasts and create energy swords but that's because she was genetically created by washu one of the three goddesses in tenchi muyo (washuu, tokimi, tsunami) using one of washuus eggs some masu DNA and perhaps juraian though I don't think that part is ever clarified tenchi is the only juraian or part juraian who create swords and energy shields and that's only when he calls on the lighthawk wings that every other juraian needs a tree ship to call on
| Guest chapter 2 . 2/23
You've ruined ranmas character by making him an whiney angsty little crybaby birch ans by ruining his character you've lessened how good your story could have been and if you choose to continue it could still be and also pantyhose tarou would never have the skill power or ability to beat a ranma who's defeated saffron so you need to change that part of your story and make it of been months or years since he left home to master the nekoken and have his injuries that washu healed him of be as a result of his mastering it instead
| edboy4926 chapter 11 . 12/9/2014
| Malix2 chapter 11 . 11/27/2014
Pretty good story. Good job.
| Malix2 chapter 9 . 11/27/2014
Great story so far. Though in this chapter there's a little typo, but I kind of found it amusing.
There they were treated to a wondrous sight, Mihoshi Kuramitsu, soon to be Saotome, in her glowingly white weeding dress.
My thought was is she getting married or doing some gardening. ;) Hehe.
| Guest chapter 2 . 2/14/2014
Should have had yell out "Thank you now I can Rest in Piece" before blacking out
| Ranmamania chapter 11 . 1/21/2014
With the exception of being to short this is a great story one of the best I have ever read, I just wish that when you said "In Ranma's case it seems as if he appeared out of no-where" & "It's unthinkable that someone like Ranma was ever created" you would added something like
"When you look across the multiverse Ranma is basically the same person despite his parentage & background like
Nodoka x Genma, Nodoka(WereCheetah) x Genma, Nodoka(Vampire) x Genma, Nodoka(Mystique) x Wolverine, Nodoka x Bardrick(Goku's Father), Nodoka x Soun, Setsuna x Nodoka, Ryoko x Genma, Ryoko x Setsuna or (adopted/stolen) Ariel x Prince Eric, Xerses and Cyan...etc
| marcwilebski93 chapter 2 . 10/23/2013
to be completely honest and I do mean this as a complement is that you should probably break up your chapters a bit for future reference now I am not saying break up your upload dates or anything(you know unless it results in faster uploads lol) that's a joke. but it could definitely help keap people interested if they don't have to read 15k words a chapter. I mean I personaly don't have any problems with it but it just feels to long. I gues its kinda like watching a full movie instead of one or two episodes is all lol
| shugokage chapter 11 . 2/26/2013
Nice job on this interesting story!
| Spokavriel Daniel T. Stack chapter 11 . 3/8/2012
It is creeping up on 10 years since this story first began. Will the second book begin before that anniversary?
Have you had much luck in finding other places to post your fanfiction? I've tried to find your work in Deviant Art but have not been successful.
I pulled up an Archive. org copy of your old site and now have a reflected (Like a kaleidoscope) version of your stone image for my desktop graphic. Its been a while since you've posted anything new to Fanfiction. net I hope you are both well and still writing. Looking forward to your future works no matter what they may be.
Spokavriel yahoo. com
| Ranmaleopard chapter 1 . 10/9/2011
awesome and interesting please continue!
| Shannon Dee chapter 11 . 6/16/2010
Great story. I read the first seven chapters years ago and just found the finished story here. Thank you for writing it.