Ewww the weasels and the gold diggers

Well, I'm glad you went this far. It is too bad you hadn't the mojo to wrap it all up.

Since you recently this year updated another story I will post notice about an issue with this one.

Chapter two ends abruptly missing parts of it. No clue how much is missing, but it ends on "Hermione emerged from Percy's old room wearing a nice blouse with a" and everything intended after that last word "a" however small or great has been forever lost.

Any chance you can fix this? I hate to see things get cut off like that and left forever to wonder what was lost.

Does raise interesting questions, sorry you aren't going to wrap it. But the concept of the mark disappearing and proof of guilt is an interesting spin. Thanks!

If you really did write this in 2003 or whatever, then I'm curious as to when the other stories of yours I've read were written seeing how you're always using the word insure incorrectly as far as I lnow.

you're a bit too dumbledore with the characters, should have just offed all the DEs with Voldie through the mark.

so you're telling me that if a known member of the a notoriously murderously violent gang walked up to a school principal/headmaster, pointed a gun to their head only to get luckily spotted and knocked out by another student they'd just get a few detentions? That's not realistic at all

OK, this REALLY needs fixed. I skipped from Chapter 3 to the last just to see if this was going anywhere. There are NO, I repeat, NO buildings near the Hogwarts gates! The walk from Hogsmeade to Hogwarts is at leats 15 min, (some books say 1/2 hour) so HOW could they see DE's hiding around buildings while at the gates? Or do they have Hawk vision? And X-ray vision to see through the woods to the mile away buildings?

OK, you jumped from a scene snogging in the grass to Hermione appologizing about her bag?

WHY didn't the Child Services, muggle or magical 'take care of' the Dursleys.? Also, Harry will eventually find out that his friends joined the Order and he was left out. That could cause some very bad problems in the future. Not right for Dumbles to do that to Harry.

Great read. Hope you finish it someday.

First of all I did enjoy the story, wish there was more of it, I would love to see you go back and rework it and fill in the gaps. Like they yule ball was great then it was Valentine's day, what happened at the Christmas break? The wedding you set up nice then left it hang, I found myself wanting more. I love how you developed Ron, not the geek he seems to be but a strong man with a brain. So many great ideas that you put into this story then let them go, like I said, I hope you go back through this story and fill in the blanks, it will make a good story a great story.

And as always, thanks for writing this, I did enjoy the read.

River

Just a quick note. Was browsing, saw your story, read the summarry, and learned nothing so I dismissed it. Just thought you might appreciate a tip to alter your story and include whatever that info was in an AN so as not to lose more potential readers. Back to browsing!

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Nice Story. Little fast paced but nice.