I really like this story. This is a quite different take on the HP story and I find it quite refreshing and interesting. I really like the internal dialogs you're written for the various characters to add depth to their development. I look forward to any additional stories you may choose to post.

A bit of a weird error/inconsistency in this chapter: The narration mentions Harry's only just started with conjuration, and how difficult it is, but he conjures a bandana wandlessly before he's even at Hogwarts in the first book, and showcases the ability to conjure things numerous times afterwards e.g. a handkerchief for Daphne, robes for Malfoy.

You suck for killing Hermione .

nooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo why couldn't it have been Colin Creevey ;(

I hate you for this, but I've thoroughly enjoyed the story so far. so I'll continue

Harry Potter wanted to exercise through his puberty but then he noticed a house-elf in his room: "...This could be handy!.."
lol

"That day, Harry Potter was taught the art of wine tasting from Selene."
or just telling the obvious: got drunk and maybe even lost half of his monetary assets

the how-many-hundred years old still uses accent... and all that temperamental. A play? Looks somewhat ridiculous.
Would've been funny if it turned out that those guys were the good ones even though not so keen on following much morals in case with those who hunt humans.

It's a good thing you don't do this for a living . Without the Rowling characters you wouldn't have anything to screw up .Shame on you !

Wow. Such a sad ending, and you leave us with a cliffie. I hope that this doesn't signify you having Harry descend into a downward spiral of darkness. Hhmmm...we shall see.

Don't think you really HAD to kill her off. She could have been frozen as in canon. :(

i’m fucking 21 and not tryna read a bunch of 14 year olds fucking

Every HP fic has some explanation about harry having warly puberty or something to have Harry clapping cheeks extremely early so pervy authors can write about him pounding out a harem. It’s ridiculous.

None of this is making since I can't find the first book

I liked the first one but gotta say this whole Alchemy thing just isn't going to fly for me. You can't make gold because it is chemically different from the other metals? really? All metals are chemically different. Using the logic stated you can't make lead from iron. The o ly use would be making permanent shape changes and I guess if you really couldn't find X compound for sale easily but could get the base ingredients it might be useful.