This may be my first ever romance story, but i'm happy it is 's also So god dam good

Incredible story and perseverance to finish it. Bravo!

Chapter twenty six dam just dam

I'm so happy that Kay gaia made an must join Luche., harum, Slash kalin

I love the romance

You meet tamaki, my favorite character, a fucking badass Thank you

I'm at chapter three, and I gotta say, I See the fireworks popping off. I love the romance. They are perfect for each other sound effect

It was a very nice read. I know I said a lot of things and gave some harsh criticism, but I did because I was enjoying the story, otherwise I would've just closed the tab and went on to read something else. Thank you for having made this, Author.

The fight was easily the worst part of this chapter, but not because it was poorly written—Simply due to it's awful execution. Lelouch not making at least an attempt at a request of his own in having the duel be hand-to-hand, which I assumed was gonna be it's style, comes off as him being incredibly stupid as he knows he has no actual skill in using blades. It makes Lelouch look like an inexperienced idiot, which clashes with the way the story's been trying to portray him big time. Then, there is Renfeld's survival, which is not bad by itself, but the way he did it was absolutely terrible. It is the single most plot armor-ish way he could've done it, and it cheapens that entire segment a lot. Kallen's attitude and dialogue is also waayyy too overdone in my eyes, she should've been more "feisty", even if her actions themselves showed how actually scared and incapable she really was; Hiding behind some false bravado to cope with her trauma. It would've been much more in line with her portrayal so far. This way, it just turns her into an uninspired damsel in distress.

I'm gonna be honest, C.C. is incredibly unlikable here. If that's the intent, then good job, she's completely unbearable and I can't wait for someone to get rid of her, which I know will, sadly, not be the case. I also have taken to just completely ignoring the little snippets in the beginning of the chapters, which have worked wonders.

I know it's a completed work, but I'd still like to drop a few pieces of criticism. The snippets in the chapters' beginning are easily the worst part of the fic by far, takes the tension out of everything and makes reading the more mundane parts of the story a slog, because it gives that "There's only one way it's ending," feel that not only tells you what it is, but also HOW, because they tell of pretty much everything and ruin the intrigue of character interaction and so on. I don't even care about Caedron because of them.
Then there are the relationships. All of them are incredibly rushed and uninteresting because of it so far, they just happen offscreen or they happen entirely within 2-3 scenes with no actual buildup or tension behind them. Lelouch and Kallen's would've been one to benefit heavily from a more slow-burn type of thing where they were "playing chess" against one another, instead of the "love-at-first-sight" and subsequent "fight-your-feelings" thing that's going on now. It's contrast with everything else makes it come across as obnoxious, partially because of the snippets. It, along with the snippets, makes the conflict between Lelouch and Zero a lot less appealing too.

I'm enjoying the story so far, but Euphemia is really annoying. It's tiring to see her about to have sex with Suzaku, having sex with Suzaku, just finishing having sex with Suzaku or talking about having sex with Suzaku everytime the POV shifts to her.

I love how Lelouch's character here is different than in the canon. Like imagine, in this fic he was able to live in 'somewhat' a peaceful environment with Nunnaly and his other siblings which he cherishes. Because of that I kind of get how he was able to confess his feelings to Kallen. It's because his personality here is not pushing people away to make them safe, but rather keep them close. He have this kind of confidence where he knows that he will be able to protect his love ones if they are within his territory.

Gosh I love this story! 3

God, Lelouch is stupidly arrogant for a supposed genius, I know he was under pressure but what in his life so far made him think the Emperor cared about any of his wives and children?

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