|Reviews for The Marshmallow Pizza|
| Pa Trizia 88 chapter 1 . 8/6/2014
I liked your approach and the tender, funny character you gave Edward.. I think , if you have had more freedom as far as the length was concerned , you could've worked it out with more detail. I like your writing style. It made me wanna read more.
I don't think you can add anything to it, since the plot feels complete , but , if you ever felt like it, you could actually make it a full chapter story with the same idea, just more elaborate and with more background on all of them. I think it would be interesting to get Bella's full story leading up to where she finds out about the Cullens... I thought you said this was your first story.. so I wasn't aware you had already 6 on here ! I will definitely check them out .. thank you for sharing , xox
| shecater chapter 1 . 7/13/2014
This was awesome ! Love to see it continued !
| lellabeth chapter 1 . 4/3/2014
LOL! This was hilarious. A very sweet little story (though not as sweet as I can imagine the Nutella and marshmallow pizza would be... yuck!) I loved the whole idea of them owning a pizzeria, and the little details like him humming Whitney Houston under his breath were so funny. Thank you for a really enjoyable read!
| kiwisrock chapter 1 . 2/22/2014
That was so cool!
Marshmello pizza?! Ok then!
Great twist with her being a hybrid!
Thanks so much, more would be awesome!
| Rita01tx chapter 1 . 2/21/2014
Edward's relationship with his pizza dough is freakin' hilarious! How clever to make Bella the hybrid so he doesn't have to worry about hurtin' her or turnin' her! As a stand alone story, it was so so good! If you continue, I'll be there!
| mommymac0508 chapter 1 . 2/10/2014
Heheheheh awe that was too cute and sweet hehehehe and silly thank you
| JK5959 chapter 1 . 12/4/2013
Honestly, the pizzas sound disgusting but the story was adorable. :-)
| bornonhalloween chapter 1 . 11/8/2013
Archy! LOVED this cute, sweet story. I loved Edward right from the start- his great sense of humor and his bewilderment with the world of sexual desire. Such a great brother-sister relationship, too. I love how easy they were with each other. Alice could look upon him as innocent and not mock him for it. I love how you used the canon moments as touchpoints- his mind-reading, the venom pizza flavoring, the slice of Bella's finger...so cleverly inserted throughout the story.
"You had me at marshmallow" had me laughing, as did many others.
I loved how you solved their central problem with your own invention- a hybrid!
What a fun "little offering"!
| ChristyWIX chapter 1 . 8/8/2013
That was super cute. Thank you for suggesting it to me. :)
| curiosity-striks-the-mind chapter 1 . 8/5/2013
aww yes this story was great! i loved it so much!
| Mooah chapter 1 . 8/4/2013
Oh I do hope you continue it at some point, it was great (:
| Milk40 chapter 1 . 6/9/2013
That was highly entertaining :0)
| prettyflour chapter 1 . 5/15/2013
That was great! Made me giggle!
| Dil9 chapter 1 . 4/29/2013
That was lovely:) and really funny. Lived the way Edward Kneeds his dough. Wish I could watch him lol!
| RaeMazerolle chapter 1 . 4/28/2013
That was so cute! I'm very glad I decided to read it.