|Reviews for Residue of a Rainbow|
| Oophaki chapter 1 . 8/15
this is really sweet!
| coldf chapter 1 . 10/24/2013
Absolutely my favourite! The story and characters are so convincing! You did an amazing job on telling how Sanji and Zoro develop their feelings for each other! I enjoyed reading every sentences! Thank you
| MonsterTrio chapter 1 . 7/9/2013
Hiya NarcissisticNinny! I’ve been reading your writing for a while and have only just made an account, so this story will be my second (and very late) review. :) It’s probably going to be quite long, but I think good writers deserve thorough reviews, so I hope it’s okay! :D
Firstly, I’m just going to say that I don’t know what it is about your style of writing, but I always absolutely LOVE reading it, no matter what the story is about. I think it’s to do with the way you write the characters – they are so IN character that I can honestly say that I read your stories as if they are an extra One Piece chapter that Oda forgot to throw in or something. Zoro and Sanji are written especially in character, like Zoro making dumbass comments and Sanji getting pissed because Zoro said he was a new crew member when they were in the cell. It’s just little things like this that make me want to read your stories (this one especially) over and over and over.
The only things I could see that might need improvement were: There are a few grammatical errors, where the wrong word has been used, but nothing that can’t be fixed with a quick proof-read, and not enough to interrupt the flow of the story. Also, there were a couple of changes in tense, for example, it went from present to past tense when you wrote, “Sanji CAN hear noises”, to “It KILLS Sanji”. A lot of people struggle with tense though (I know I’m really bad at it myself), so you didn’t do too badly. :D
Alrighty then, the story itself. I LOVED the plot, so damn much. You did really well with writing the progression of Zoro and Sanji’s relationship through different events in the course of their adventures. As I said before, you do it so well that it actually feels like I’m reading a new OP chapter. :) It was cool how you made Sanji’s feeling develop slowly, and it wasn’t a sudden, “Oh my God I love Zoro notice me please senpai”. It was really sweet how Zoro ended up making the first move.
Something that I really thought was good was Sanji’s mild jealousy when Nami and Zoro hugged. The fact that you didn’t make it clear whether Sanji was jealous of Zoro or Nami was genius, and it’s things like that which keep the reader guessing.
I adored the start, how they were trapped in the cell. Sanji’s internal struggles were done brilliantly, and the imagery of the marine base was really clear in my mind. Now normally I would say that it would be unrealistic for the rest of the strawhat crew to make their entrance just as Zoro and Sanji have been cornered, but heck, that kind of shit happens all the time in One Piece, and I think it fits in really well with the overall plot and idea of your story.
This is one of those freaking awesome stories that actually make me laugh out loud, and smile while I’m reading it. Although the interactions that Zoro and Sanji had were great, I’m so happy that you didn’t, (unlike a lot of other writers), disregard the rest of the crew entirely. Zoro being protective of Chopper was excellent, Brook’s skull joke, Chopper and Robin falling overboard, and Usopp telling on Zoro – all fantastic details that I really enjoyed reading.
I really, really, liked the ending of this oneshot. The way they talked about the rainbow, and the laughter, followed by their interaction in the kitchen. It was uncomplicated, adorable and a nice way to finish off this story. I honestly do not think you could have improved the ending any more. It’s one of those fics that by no means needs a sequel, but you want one just because you don’t want it to end haha! I would recommend this fic to anyone who likes Zoro and Sanji, BrOTP or OTP, because seriously, it’s so well done. I give it a 9/10 for a fantastically written story and phenomenal characterisation. You should be really proud of this oneshot, and I wish you luck with your writing in the future (I’m sure this won’t be the last of your fics that I will review haha!). :D
| Mikan Kecil chapter 1 . 4/25/2013
You know, in the first part, I was crying because I thought Zoro would die. But, fortunately, it didn't happen.
Most importantly I like the ending... Soooo sweeeet 'w'
| Aerle chapter 1 . 4/25/2013
Really cute story Keep up the good work :)
| XiggyMatsu chapter 1 . 4/25/2013
I just, I can't-
I've become illiterate.
This is too fucking cute and I hate you. Now let me hug you.
| eternal-anime chapter 1 . 4/24/2013
omg omg omg! this is the cutest think ever! thank you sooo much! :D