|Reviews for Substitution|
| TheAngrayAmerican chapter 1 . 12/26/2013
This is an insult to the show and any fan.
| Amused bystander chapter 1 . 6/9/2013
Lol at you people getting your panties in a knot. I can't believe you're overreacting like this all because of a fanfic of a show that constantly pokes fun at disabled people, terrorists, Jews, retards, obese people, and cancer patients, just to name a few. You people need to find something better to do than sit here and make a big fuss of letting everyone know how "insulted" you are. Seriously, just get a life.
| Malla chapter 1 . 5/25/2013
| EvaTheIronWoman chapter 1 . 5/11/2013
I CAN'T UMDERSTAND THIS STORY EITHER! YOU WRITE LIKE YOU'RE FROM ANOTHER PLANET!
| ChefHatchet chapter 1 . 5/11/2013
You're rude and you don't understand how to fix a problem. I just wish you would get your shit together and stop feeling sorry for yourself. People have bigger things to worry about then Fanfiction. If that's the biggest issue you have in life then you have the life of a king.
You don't do anything at all except talk out your ass and make excuses for yourself. If you wanted a better start you would do it without giving anyone sob stories.
| LucasSucks1988 chapter 1 . 5/10/2013
This is still one of the most god awful things you ever wrote. You're still a sick freak.
Toast to the air all alone, nobody would want to toast with you, not even those porn stars you love so much.
| DevillishlyHandsome chapter 1 . 5/4/2013
Yes, it is me again, brightening your day with my unparalleled intelligence.
Heather informed me of this, telling me she was appalled. I do not blame her, though at least you are molesting and traumatizing another person for once, and sparing my girlfriend and I.
| Mrs. Alejandro chapter 1 . 5/2/2013
Well, Well, Well...
If it isn't foreverthetourturedrebel writing another bad plot that is horribly out of character. Giving the world bad ideas since October 10, 1988.
Can you seriously do research on a character before you write for a show?
| Guest chapter 1 . 4/29/2013
| residentkilla chapter 1 . 4/29/2013
The creators of family guy go to far in almost every episode, I don't see why these flamers are babying about this.
| Critic chapter 1 . 4/27/2013
This story was disgusting and badly written.
You are a nasty, twisted freakshow who put the "ass" in Asperger's Syndrome.
That shouldn't excuse your shitty writing.
| I'll Cover Angel and Collins chapter 1 . 4/28/2013
I'm just going to say this, I'm a fan of Family guy and I found this to be ridiculous in a bad way. As someone who loves Family guy I would say this was insulting, not to mention it was just gross. Why couldn't he just not wear underwear? Or wear Stewie's diapers at that point?
It's really sad because me and you seem to like the same shows, however you and I apparently have completely different views on what's in character and what's not. It seems like every time I like a fandom you go ahead and write a fic that makes me somehow dislike it.
I agree with NerdyBarista on this, Peter would never do that to his best friend especially after all Brian has done for him. This story actually made me physically sick to my stomach and this time, it wasn't just your writing. Where did you even come up with this idea? Don't say Peter is a sick freak in your ending note, You're the sick freak because you're the one who wrote this.
This isn't bullying either, This is the first time that I have felt the urge to write you a review and that's only because NerdyBarista told me about it. I'm seriously a fan of the show and this really rubbed me the wrong way. This wasn't funny or cute and if Peter actually did this, wouldn't Brian be dead from being stretched out? Also, I'm pretty sure that Brian wouldn't just let this happen, I think he would bite Peter.
Also, you won't tolerate flames? Really? Well if you write something that I don't care for, I'm going to tell you about it and you'll just have to get over it. Take this as constructive criticism, Before you write something, watch clips of the character or something! Instead of crying about how unfair people are being to you, try to listen to what people are suggesting to you. So, I checked out some of your stuff and you didn't do that bad with MLP, have you thought of just sticking to that?
| desiredSuburbia chapter 1 . 4/28/2013
You write them so in character, I could totally see Peter wearing Brian as underwear.
| NerdyNightStocker chapter 1 . 4/27/2013
"Anyway, read and review. And no flames either. I will not tolerate those."
Unfortunately for you, I happen to be a huge fan of Family Guy and I happened to notice a few continuation and writing issues. This is not a flame. It's "constructive criticism". Deal with it.
1. As of "Hannah Banana", Peter knows that the Evil Closet Monkey is real and that creature has officially left the closet to make something of itself.
2. Stewie would not watch "My Little Pony". He tends to like shows with posh characters such as "Mr. Belvedere" and "Mother Maggie's Story Time". Maybe even the occasional Sesame Street floats his boat.
3. Work. On. Your. Dialogue. You have been told this several times and still don't seem to understand how a potentially funny moment can easily be ruined by dialogue that is clunky or strange (AKA YOUR DIALOGUE).
4. There was none of the humor that is a staple to Family Guy. You could've created a crazy cutaway scene or even showed the Evil Monkey when it was mentioned. However, I suppose that would've taken effort and creativity on your part.
5. The idea could've been original if Peter didn't already use Brian as a hat and a horse. As a Brian-lover, Seth Macfarlene does have limits on how far bashing Brian goes. After the episode in which Brian offers to give Peter his kidneys, I'm sure Peter wouldn't ungratefully use him as a living diaper.
Your stories remind me of a person who tells a lame joke that a couple of friends will uncomfortably chuckle at not because they think it's humorous, but because they don't want to hurt the "jokester"'s feelings.
Instead of categorizing every critical review as "flaming", perhaps you should actually take them to heart and utilize them into the next story. That would show the negative reviewers that you can be a great writer more than just churning out lackluster work after lackluster work from your failure factory.
Until you do so, you can look forward to "tolerating" more critiques from me.