Reviews for The Zerg Swarm - Neo |
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![]() ![]() First of: I was searching for a story quit a while and generaly like this for quit a while. The first part of the story drew me in, because started from a weak protagonist with a simple goal. There was for example no infodump/exposition like this time. It was discovering the workings of the zerg and the world alongside the mc, with his conflicting natures as human and zergovermind. The zerg started to evolve, the mc lerned to control them better and started to learn how to interact with the world through mistakes/regret. He started to build a place for his people, gain higher ambitions and started to forge the swarm to his imagination. And than the author stopped to think more about the plot. He did and decided to flush out the other races in their own storyline. He started stoppt after teasing the start of the Terrans and stoppt to continue the zergs. Now to this story: Breaks the continuum to make the mother who fought to keep him and his sister alife in the wildernis into a disgarced women who vainly begs for mercy from a clan that tries it best to kill, starve or make the family otherwise gone. The MC becomes a almighty god who hides his power(breaks his character) in order to judge and than slap faces... And his sister... well she is mentioned, so she exsists, but besides being a convenient pitabel target to give the MC reson to justify acting out... Dear Author, This Month marks the 11 Year stopping to publishing this story, you are in a more stable situation and gain more experience overall. A great time give it another try. I' m exited where it my lead. |
![]() ![]() Instead of telling us "oh yeah all this cool stuff happened and six months later I own a massive zerg army" actually seeing that journey would've been significantly better. This chapter is so boring compared to all the stuff that supposedly happened before it |
![]() ![]() ![]() Restart however many times you need. The story is there. It has so much potential. I've liked every version of it. Mostly. |
![]() ![]() Rest in piece Author-San |
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![]() ![]() 6 years later and nothing yet is happening. This writer is dead. |
![]() ![]() ![]() um u need a lot more time |
![]() ![]() ![]() Well, just read the other two stories, and the grammar is horrible, like, I guess as might just be used to it from other stories, but this is a nice idea and story. Also, considering the leaders of the races (at least he Zerg one,) are like the opposite personality of the original game's race, maybe the Protoss one would leave his family to be alone with his faction, possibly even becoming he Tal'Darim. Or maybe I could write my own fanfic about that since it might not be following your story the best way. |
![]() ![]() ![]() not as much of a fan of this as the original, shitty grammar include was kinda endearing, sorta |
![]() ![]() Pls Finish this story, both your earlier version and this one have drawn me in so that i cannot stop reading it! Ps Nice rewrite so far. |
![]() ![]() What happened to the story are you going to continue 8 or not |
![]() ![]() ![]() So, continue the Zerg story off planet... THat is a nice plot out... |
![]() ![]() ![]() ... again |
![]() ![]() Seriously, where did the Bridge Go? |
![]() ![]() ![]() is this over |